电脑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be clearer and more relevant: start with a direct topic sentence about when you use a computer, avoid unclear phrases (e.g. “do Simmons”, “bend over backwards”), and give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep it natural and within 3–4 sentences.

範例: I mainly use my computer for studying and completing assignments. For example, I spend long periods researching articles and typing essays, especially during exam season. Also, I use it for online classes and communicating with classmates, which helps me finish group projects more efficiently.

建議: Provide a concise direct answer, then add one or two specific details using linking words. Reduce hesitation and grammar errors (use past tense consistently) and improve coherence by linking ideas (e.g. “because”, “so”).

範例: I first used a computer in high school when I took an introductory IT class. In that course I learned how to use Word and Excel, which has been very useful for writing reports and organizing data ever since.

建議: Answer directly then give specific consequences. Avoid vague or confusing phrases and improve grammar (conditionals and tense). Use linking words like “because” and “therefore” to explain reasons clearly.

範例: Life without a computer would be very difficult for me as a university student because I rely on it to access online books and academic articles. Without it, I would spend much more time finding sources and writing assignments, so my study efficiency would drop significantly.

建議: Give a clear condition and a concrete example. Avoid repeating and hesitations; use conditional sentences correctly and add linking words to explain why it would be difficult. Keep it short and specific.

範例: It would be difficult for me to use a computer if I had to use specialized software I’ve never learned, such as advanced programming or graphic-design tools. In that case, I would struggle because I lack the necessary skills and would need training or help.

× I was just being on the computer the whole day to finish all my assignments.

✓ I was just on the computer the whole day to finish all my assignments.

The phrase 'being on the computer' incorrectly uses the progressive 'being' with a location/activity; English uses 'be' without '-ing' when describing being somewhere for an extended time in past continuous contexts. Use 'was on the computer' or 'was using the computer' to convey continuous activity. Suggestion: say 'I was on the computer the whole day' or 'I was using the computer the whole day.'

× In class there is a class that teaches how to use computer, especially umm Excel and word documents which help me really a lot when they come to think about it nowadays.

✓ In high school there was a class that taught how to use computers, especially Excel and Word, which helps me a lot nowadays when I think about it.

Multiple issues apply but per instructions only correct those matching 'Verb + -ing form' and related tense consistency: change 'teaches' to past 'taught' because the action happened in the past; 'help me really a lot' adjusted to 'helps me a lot' for present relevance. Also corrected article and plural 'computer' to 'computers' but those are not required by the rule list; primary focus was correcting verb forms to match time frame. Suggestion: maintain consistent past tense for past events and present simple for current relevance.

× I think that would be so tough my university student life 'cause I never can imagine doing assignments without any AI or I'm translated in online books because it's way easier to find all sources for my assignments so I would really struggle.

✓ I think that my university life would be so tough because I can never imagine doing assignments without any AI or online translations of books, since it's much easier to find sources with a computer, so I would really struggle.

The sentence mixes modal and present tense incorrectly. 'Never can imagine' is an incorrect word order for present simple; correct order is 'can never imagine.' Also 'I'm translated in online books' is incorrect; use 'online translations of books' or 'having books translated online.' Suggestion: keep modal verb 'would' for hypothetical result and use correct present simple word order for general ability ('can never imagine').

× I never can imagine doing assignments without any AI or I'm translated in online books because it's way easier to find all sources for my assignments so I would really struggle.

✓ I can never imagine doing assignments without any AI or online translations of books because it's much easier to find all the sources for my assignments, so I would really struggle.

Modal verbs like 'can' should be placed before the adverb: 'can never imagine' not 'never can imagine.' Also 'would really struggle' is appropriate for the hypothetical main clause; ensure consistency by using 'can' for current ability/imagination. Suggestion: place modals before adverbs and use clear noun phrases ('online translations') instead of 'I'm translated.'

× I really can't think much anything about it without computers to be honest, but I feel like if I had to do something that I I don't know how to do it, that would be the time I would struggle to use the computer.

✓ I really can't imagine much without computers, to be honest, but I feel that if I had to do something I didn't know how to do, that would be when I would struggle to use the computer.

This run-on sentence has structural problems: 'can't think much anything about it' is ungrammatical; use 'can't imagine much without computers.' The conditional clause 'if I had to do something that I I don't know how to do' mixes tenses and repeats 'I'; use past tense in the if-clause ('didn't know') to match the conditional 'would struggle.' Suggestion: simplify phrases, avoid repetition, and keep conditional tenses consistent.