电脑— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答中存在重复词汇和语法错误，且表达不够简洁自然。建议减少重复，使用更准确的词汇，并且句子结构更清晰。

範例: I use a computer daily, from morning to evening. At work, I write emails, analyze data, and prepare presentations. After work, I watch movies and browse social media on it.

建議: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，且缺少连贯的连接词。建议改进语法，使用连接词使回答更流畅。

範例: I first used a computer in 1999 after finishing my college entrance exam. I attended a training class where I learned basic operations, mainly how to type and input words.

建議: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，且逻辑连接不够清晰。建议使用更准确的语法结构和连接词，表达更具体。

範例: Honestly, I can't imagine life without a computer. Without it, I would have to do most of my work manually, which would be inefficient. Also, information wouldn't be updated quickly, and life would feel like living in a primitive society.

建議: 回答中有重复词汇和语法错误，表达不够流畅。建议减少重复，使用更准确的词汇和句式，使表达更自然。

範例: I find it difficult to use a computer during brainstorming sessions that require creativity and discussion. Also, spending too much time in front of the screen often gives me headaches.

× I use a computer every day, almost from from the morning to the evening, umm at work I use my computer to write e-mail and to process and analyze data and write presentation.

✓ I use a computer every day, almost from the morning to the evening. At work, I use my computer to write e-mails, process and analyze data, and write presentations.

“e-mail”应使用复数形式“e-mails”，因为通常指多封邮件；“presentation”应为复数“presentations”，表示多次写演示文稿。

× And when I'm when I'm off work, I use the computer to watch movie, uh, social media.

✓ And when I'm off work, I use the computer to watch movies and use social media.

“movie”应为复数“movies”，表示观看多部电影。

× I attended a computer training class where I learned, uh, the basic operation of computer, umm, mainly typing words use will be input.

✓ I attended a computer training class where I learned the basic operation of computers, mainly typing words to be input.

“computer”应为复数“computers”，表示计算机的基本操作。

× If there isn't a computer, I have to deal with most of my work by hand, which will be not effectively in my daily life.

✓ If there isn't a computer, I would have to deal with most of my work by hand, which would not be effective in my daily life.

条件句中使用虚拟语气，表示与事实相反的假设，应使用“would”而非“will”。

× If there isn't a computer, I have to deal with most of my work by hand, which will be not effectively in my daily life.

✓ If there isn't a computer, I would have to deal with most of my work by hand, which would not be effective in my daily life.

“effectively”是副词，修饰动词；此处应使用形容词“effective”来修饰“be”，表示“有效的”。

× The information will not be updated and I have to go back to the paper era, which will like the primary society.

✓ The information will not be updated and I have to go back to the paper era, which would be like a primitive society.

“primary society”应为“primitive society”，表示“原始社会”；且“like”前应加“be”构成系动词结构。

× The information will not be updated and I have to go back to the paper era, which will like the primary society.

✓ The information will not be updated and I have to go back to the paper era, which would be like a primitive society.

此处是假设情况，使用虚拟语气，故用“would”代替“will”。

× I find it would be difficult for me to use a computer when it comes to brainstorming which needs needs more creativity and discussion.

✓ I find it would be difficult for me to use a computer when it comes to brainstorming, which needs more creativity and discussion.

“needs needs”重复，应去掉一个“needs”。

× I find it would be difficult for me to use a computer when it comes to brainstorming which needs needs more creativity and discussion.

✓ I find it would be difficult for me to use a computer when it comes to brainstorming, which needs more creativity and discussion.

“needs”作为第三人称单数动词形式是正确的，但前面重复了，应删除多余的“needs”。

× Additionally, when I spend too too too much time in front of the computer, I find I'm I will suffer from headache.

✓ Additionally, when I spend too much time in front of the computer, I find I will suffer from a headache.

“too too too”重复，应只用一个“too”；“I'm I will”重复，应选用“I will”；“headache”前应加不定冠词“a”。

× Additionally, when I spend too too too much time in front of the computer, I find I'm I will suffer from headache.

✓ Additionally, when I spend too much time in front of the computer, I find I will suffer from a headache.

“headache”是可数名词，单数时前面需要加不定冠词“a”。