艺术— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is natural and relevant, but shorten and organize it. Begin with a clear topic sentence, avoid unnecessary capitalization and rhetorical questions, and add one specific example of how drawing helps you. Use linking words like “because” or “so” smoothly. Keep it to under five sentences.

範例: Yes, I enjoy drawing because it helps me relax and forget my worries. For example, when I sketch landscapes after a long day, concentrating on lines and shading calms me and improves my mood.

建議: Good content but fix grammar and flow. Start with a simple topic sentence, remove redundant words, and use linking phrases like “because” and “for example.” Replace “to my mind” with “I think” or “I like to.” Clarify how galleries inspire you with a specific detail.

範例: Yes, I like visiting galleries because I can study many different styles of painting. For example, seeing modern art often gives me ideas for my own sketches and helps me try new techniques.

建議: The idea is clear but the sentence structure is awkward and negative phrasing could be smoother. Start with a direct response (No), explain briefly with linking words (“because”/“so”), and add a concise detail about priorities or time constraints. Avoid double negatives and keep it under five sentences.

範例: No, not right now, because I need to focus on other subjects like English and Korean. Since my schedule is busy with classes and homework, I don’t have time to study art at the moment.

建議: This answer is clear and relevant but can be tightened. Use a concise topic sentence, correct article use (“art was an essential subject” is fine), and avoid repetition (“draw, draw paintings”). Add one specific memory or example of what you learned to enrich the answer.

範例: Yes, I did. In elementary school, art was an important subject, so we learned basic drawing and painting techniques. I remember practicing watercolour landscapes, which helped me develop control over colour and brush strokes.

× Yes, of course, Why not? Because when I Draw Something, I can relieve my stress and forget my concerns.

✓ Yes, of course, why not? Because when I draw something, I can relieve my stress and forget my concerns.

The verb 'draw' should be in lowercase and in base present form 'draw' not capitalized; 'Draw' was incorrectly capitalized as if a noun or title. Use 'draw' for general habitual action. Suggestion: use lowercase for verbs and keep present simple for habits. Grammar problem type ID:10

× To my mind, yes, I'd like to visit the gallery because I can see a lot of paintings and and think about the pictures. Why doing so? Sometimes I got inspiration from them.

✓ In my opinion, yes, I'd like to visit the gallery because I can see a lot of paintings and think about the pictures. Why do I do so? Sometimes I get inspiration from them.

Multiple issues: 'To my mind' is a nonstandard prepositional phrase in modern English; use 'In my opinion'. Remove duplicate 'and and'. 'Why doing so?' is ungrammatical; for asking reason use 'Why do I do so?' or 'Why is that?' 'Sometimes I got inspiration' uses past simple incorrectly for habitual action; use present simple 'I get'. Suggestions: use 'in my opinion', avoid duplicated words, form questions with auxiliary 'do', and use present simple for habitual facts. Grammar problem type ID:11

× Not merely because I should study other subjects as well like English or Korean. So since I don't have enough time to learn about art, I don't want.

✓ Not only because I should study other subjects as well, like English or Korean. So, since I don't have enough time to learn about art, I don't want to.

'Not merely' is formal but 'not only' is more natural; this is a word choice/modal nuance. The structure is acceptable but punctuation and connector 'So, since' is redundant; better 'Because I don't have enough time... I don't want to.' Suggestion: use 'not only' and connect sentences clearly. Also 'I don't want' is vague; better 'I don't want to study it' for clarity. Grammar problem type ID:4

× Yes, of course. Actually, when I was a child in elementary school, the art was an essential subject. So I had to learn about art and how to draw, draw paintings.

✓ Yes, of course. Actually, when I was a child in elementary school, art was an essential subject. So I had to learn about art and how to draw paintings.

Use simple past 'was' and 'had to' are correct, but article 'the art' is wrong here; 'art' as a subject is uncountable and doesn't need 'the'. Also avoid repeating 'draw, draw paintings' — redundancy. Suggestion: remove 'the' before 'art' and delete repeated verb for conciseness. Grammar problem type ID:5