艺术— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答不够自然且表达不清晰，存在语法错误和词汇使用不当。建议简化句子结构，直接表达喜欢绘画的原因，并使用正确的词汇和语法。

範例: Yes, I like drawing very much. When I was a child, my parents encouraged me to take after-school classes, and I chose drawing because I believe it helps improve my imagination.

建議: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不流畅的问题。建议注意时态和介词的正确使用，同时增加连接词使句子更连贯。

範例: Yes, I really enjoy going to galleries. When I worked in Beijing, I usually went to galleries on weekends or holidays. Moreover, my best friend Simon is also a big fan of drawing, so we often went together.

建議: 回答中时态混用且表达不够准确。建议使用正确的时态，简洁明了地说明想继续学习艺术的原因。

範例: Yes, I really want to learn more about art. I studied it a lot when I was a child, but I had to stop in high school because of heavy schoolwork. Now, I hope to continue learning art.

建議: 回答语法错误较多，表达不清晰。建议直接回答问题，使用简单句子说明学习绘画的时间和感受。

範例: Yes, I started learning drawing when I was about 7 or 8 years old. My parents wanted me to take after-school classes, so I chose drawing. It helped me a lot and allowed me to express myself differently.

× my parents told me that I have two truths of one kind of after license class.

✓ my parents told me that I had two truths of one kind of after license class.

这里是过去时态的叙述，应该用过去时态'had'，而不是现在时态'have'。

× I choose I trust the the drawing.

✓ I chose, I trust the drawing.

这里时态应为过去时，'choose'应改为'chose'。

× The reason is that I strongly believe that the drawing can enhance my imagine, so I really love it.

✓ The reason is that I strongly believe that drawing can enhance my imagination, so I really love it.

'imagine'是动词，应该用名词'imagination'。

× When I was worked in Beijing, I usually to go to the gallery on the weekends or maybe in the holiday.

✓ When I worked in Beijing, I usually went to the gallery on the weekends or maybe during the holidays.

'was worked'错误，应该用过去式'worked'；'usually to go'错误，应该用过去式'usually went'；'in the holiday'应为'during the holidays'。

× My best friend Simon also the big fan of the drawing, so we always go to gallery together.

✓ My best friend Simon is also a big fan of drawing, so we always go to the gallery together.

缺少动词'is'，'the big fan'前应加不定冠词'a'，'go to gallery'应为'go to the gallery'。

× when I was a child I have learned more many about the art,

✓ when I was a child I learned a lot about art,

过去时间点应使用过去时态'learned'，'more many'表达错误，应改为'a lot'。

× because of the high pressure about the school lessons, I have to stop the art lessons.

✓ because of the high pressure from school lessons, I had to stop the art lessons.

过去时态叙述，'have to'应改为过去时'had to'。

× I really want to learn more in these days.

✓ I really want to learn more these days.

'in these days'用法不当，应直接用'these days'。

× Yes, I have been said that when I was a child,

✓ Yes, I have been told that when I was a child,

'have been said'错误，应该用被动语态'have been told'。

× my parents told me that I have to learn a kind of after lessons class.

✓ my parents told me that I had to learn a kind of after lessons class.

过去时态叙述，'have to'应改为过去时'had to'。

× So I trust the drawing.

✓ So I trusted drawing.

过去时态叙述，'trust'应改为过去式'trusted'，且'drawing'前不需要定冠词。

× It really helps me a lot and I is a immerse myself in a different.

✓ It really helped me a lot and I immersed myself in a different world.

'I is a immerse'语法错误，应为'I immersed'；'a different'后缺少名词，补充为'different world'。