艺术— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to make your answer more natural and grammatically correct. Avoid redundancy and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then add supporting details with linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

範例: Yes, I like drawing very much because it has been my passion since I was a young girl. I enjoyed drawing and coloring various things, which always gave me a lot of happiness.

建議: Improve sentence structure and vocabulary. Use linking words to make your answer coherent. Also, be specific about the types of art and avoid unclear phrases like 'protect it'.

範例: Yes, I love going to galleries to see different types of art and learn about the stories behind them. Although sometimes I find it difficult to understand, I enjoy the experience. For example, galleries often display modern art and military art.

建議: Focus on grammatical accuracy and clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas logically. Avoid repetition and express your goals clearly.

範例: Yes, I want to learn more about art because I think my current knowledge is limited. I hope to become a great artist in the future, so gaining more knowledge will help improve the quality of my work.

建議: Work on sentence structure and vocabulary. Avoid unclear expressions like 'Bible talent' and incomplete sentences. Use linking words to make your answer coherent and clear.

範例: Actually, no, I did not formally learn different types of drawing when I was a kid. Drawing is a natural talent for me, and I enjoy sketching anything I see. It has always been my passion.

× Yes, I like drawings, at least I loved drawing when I was a young girl.

✓ Yes, I like drawing, at least I loved drawing when I was a young girl.

The word 'drawings' is plural, but here 'drawing' as an activity is more appropriate and uncountable. So, use 'drawing' instead of 'drawings'.

× I loved to draw anything and colored them.

✓ I loved to draw anything and color them.

After 'loved to', the base form of the verb should be used. 'Colored' is past tense, but here it should be 'color' to match the infinitive form after 'to'.

× You can say, uh, it's, it's give me a lot of happiness.

✓ You can say, uh, it gives me a lot of happiness.

The subject 'it' requires the verb in third person singular present tense, which is 'gives', not 'give'.

× Yes, I love to go galleries and watch different type of arts and I also love to understand those arts behind the story.

✓ Yes, I love to go to galleries and watch different types of art and I also love to understand the stories behind those arts.

The verb 'go' requires the preposition 'to' before a place. 'Different type' should be plural 'different types' to match plural 'arts'. 'Arts' is usually uncountable or singular 'art' is used. Also, 'behind the story' should be 'behind the stories' to match plural arts. 'Understand those arts behind the story' is awkward; better to say 'understand the stories behind those arts'.

× Sometime I was failed but I love to do it.

✓ Sometimes I have failed but I love to do it.

The adverb 'sometimes' is correct. 'Was failed' is incorrect; the correct form is 'have failed' to indicate past experience. 'Was failed' is passive and incorrect here.

× Uh, there are different types of arts in galleries like modern art, military art, protect it.

✓ Uh, there are different types of art in galleries like modern art, military art, and portrait art.

'Arts' is usually uncountable; 'types of art' is correct. 'Protect it' seems to be a mishearing or typo; likely 'portrait art' is intended. Added 'and' before last item for correct conjunction.

× Yes, I want to learn more about art because I thought uh, what I know is to very much less.

✓ Yes, I want to learn more about art because I think what I know is very little.

'Thought' is past tense but the context is present, so 'think' is correct. 'To very much less' is incorrect; 'very little' is the correct expression for small amount.

× I want to became a great artist in future so I want gain knowledge about arts which provide me a good quality of my arts and it better.

✓ I want to become a great artist in the future so I want to gain knowledge about art which will provide me with good quality in my art and make it better.

'Became' is past tense; after 'want to' the base form 'become' is needed. 'Want gain' should be 'want to gain'. 'Arts' should be singular 'art'. Added 'the' before 'future'. Added 'will' for future tense. 'Provide me a good quality of my arts' is awkward; better 'provide me with good quality in my art'. 'And it better' is incomplete; corrected to 'and make it better'.

× Actually, no, I don't learn different type of drawings.

✓ Actually, no, I didn't learn different types of drawings.

The question is about past, so past tense 'didn't learn' is needed instead of present 'don't learn'. 'Different type' should be plural 'different types'.

× It's my Bible talent.

✓ It's my natural talent.

'Bible talent' is incorrect and unclear. Likely intended 'natural talent' or 'innate talent'.

× I usually art any kind of things what we see, but I love to.

✓ I usually draw any kind of things that we see, but I love to.

'Art' is a noun; the verb 'draw' is needed here. 'Any kind of things what we see' should be 'any kind of things that we see'.

× Drawing is my passion, so I can draw anything.

✓ Drawing is my passion, so I can draw anything.

This sentence is correct and needs no correction.