艺术— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 답변이 자연스럽고 효과적이지만, 문장 구조가 조금 더 명확하고 직접적으로 질문에 답할 필요가 있습니다. 예를 들어, 주제 문장으로 명확히 'I don't like drawing'이라고 말한 후, 그 이유를 구체적으로 설명하면 좋겠습니다. 또한, 'illustrators' 대신 'Illustrator' (프로그램명)로 정확한 단어 사용이 필요합니다.

範例: I don't really like drawing because I find it difficult to express my ideas with a pencil. However, I enjoyed my media art class where I learned to use Photoshop and Illustrator, which allowed me to create digital art more easily.

建議: 답변이 질문에 잘 답하고 있지만, 문장 연결이 조금 어색하고, 구체적인 설명이 부족합니다. 'our pieces'는 의미가 불분명하므로 'art pieces'로 수정하고, 'Salvador Dalis pieces' 대신 'Salvador Dali's works'로 표현하는 것이 자연스럽습니다. 또한, 문장을 완성하여 구체적인 감상을 덧붙이면 좋겠습니다.

範例: Although I'm not very interested in drawing or painting, I enjoy visiting galleries to appreciate art pieces. For example, I recently went to a museum exhibiting Salvador Dali's works, and I was fascinated by his surreal and imaginative style.

建議: 답변이 명확하고 자연스럽지만, 'particularly' 앞에 콤마를 넣어 문장 흐름을 개선할 수 있습니다. 또한, 'just appreciate and admire' 대신 'simply appreciate and admire' 또는 'enjoy appreciating and admiring'으로 표현하면 더 자연스럽습니다. 추가로, 이유나 감정을 조금 더 구체적으로 설명하면 좋겠습니다.

範例: I'm not particularly interested in art, so I don't plan to take any art classes in the future. However, I enjoy visiting museums and galleries because I find it relaxing and inspiring to appreciate and admire various art pieces.

建議: 답변이 질문에 잘 답하지만, 문장 연결이 부자연스럽고 문법 오류가 있습니다. 예를 들어, 'some of two-dimensional figures' 대신 'some two-dimensional figures'로 수정하고, 'When I was in high school.'는 문장으로 완성해야 합니다. 또한, 이유를 조금 더 구체적으로 설명하면 좋겠습니다.

範例: When I was in elementary school, I learned how to draw basic lines and some two-dimensional figures, but I wasn't very interested in it. Later, in high school, I took media art classes, which suited me better because I could use digital tools to create art.

× I remember that I took media art class and learned how to use Photoshop and illustrators, but it wasn't drawing, it was just utilizing.

✓ I remember that I took a media art class and learned how to use Photoshop and Illustrator, but it wasn't drawing, it was just utilizing.

'media art class' should be 'a media art class' because 'class' is a countable noun and needs an article. 'illustrators' should be 'Illustrator' as it refers to the software name, which is singular and a proper noun.

× Even though I'm not a big fan of drawing and painting, I like to visit galleries to appreciate and admire our pieces.

✓ Even though I'm not a big fan of drawing and painting, I like to visit galleries to appreciate and admire art pieces.

'our pieces' is incorrect because the speaker is referring to art pieces in general, not pieces belonging to 'us'. The correct phrase is 'art pieces'.

× For instance, I recently visited the museum where it exhibited Salvador Dalis pieces, and I was fascinated by his.

✓ For instance, I recently visited the museum where they exhibited Salvador Dali's pieces, and I was fascinated by them.

'it exhibited' should be 'they exhibited' because 'museum' is singular but the subject here refers to the exhibits or the museum staff, so 'they' is more appropriate. 'Salvador Dalis pieces' should be 'Salvador Dali's pieces' to show possession. 'I was fascinated by his' is incomplete; it should be 'I was fascinated by them' referring to the pieces.

× I'm not interested in art particularly so I don't plan to take art classes in future.

✓ I'm not interested in art particularly, so I don't plan to take art classes in the future.

The phrase 'in future' is incorrect in American English; it should be 'in the future' with the definite article 'the'.

× When I was in high school. I learned media art and it was better for me.

✓ When I was in high school, I learned media art and it was better for me.

The original has a sentence fragment: 'When I was in high school.' should be connected to the next sentence with a comma to form a complete sentence.