艺术— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答は質問に直接答えていますが、文法の誤りや不自然な表現が目立ちます。例えば、「I'm not a good at drawing」は誤りで、「I'm not good at drawing」が正しいです。また、内容が少し冗長で、より簡潔に表現することが望ましいです。接続詞の使い方も改善すると良いでしょう。

範例: No, I don't like drawing because I'm not good at it. When I was a child, I hesitated to join art classes, and my parents often scolded me for that.

建議: 回答は質問に答えていますが、最後の部分「watching how many must」が意味不明で、文の一貫性が欠けています。より具体的で明確な内容を加え、文法や語彙の誤りを修正する必要があります。接続詞の使い方は良いですが、内容の明確化が重要です。

範例: Yes, I enjoy going to galleries because the calm and quiet atmosphere makes me feel happy. I like to spend time observing the artworks carefully.

建議: 回答に多くの文法的誤りと不明瞭な表現があります。例えば、「I want to learn about at」は誤りで、「I want to learn about art」が正しいです。また、「I wrote about, I'm not sure about that, of arts」は意味が通じません。内容を明確にし、文法を正しく使うことが必要です。

範例: Yes, I want to learn more about art, especially its history, because I have studied history before. I am interested in understanding how art will develop in the future.

建議: 回答は質問に答えていますが、「I won a drawing」は意味が不明で、「I took drawing lessons」などに修正が必要です。また、「when I was 10 years ago」は不自然で、「when I was 10 years old」が正しいです。文法と語彙の誤りを直し、より自然な表現を心がけましょう。

範例: Yes, when I was a little kid, I took drawing lessons because my mother sometimes took me to classes. However, when I was 10 years old, I hesitated to continue because I was not good at drawing.

× No, I don't like drawing because I'm not a good at drawing and structuring skills.

✓ No, I don't like drawing because I'm not good at drawing and structuring skills.

The article 'a' is incorrectly used before the adjective 'good'. 'Good' is an adjective and does not require 'a' before it when used predicatively. The correct form is 'I'm not good at...'.

× So when I was a child I hesitate to participate in the art class and my parents always scolded me about that.

✓ So when I was a child I hesitated to participate in the art class and my parents always scolded me about that.

The verb 'hesitate' should be in the past tense 'hesitated' to match the past time frame indicated by 'when I was a child'.

× Yes, I like going to the gallery and spending time there because the atmosphere is very calm and quiet, which makes me feel very happy and I can spend quiet time watching how many must.

✓ Yes, I like going to the gallery and spending time there because the atmosphere is very calm and quiet, which makes me feel very happy and I can spend quiet time watching many things.

The phrase 'watching how many must' is incorrect and unclear. It should be 'watching many things' to correctly express observing multiple items or artworks. Also, 'how many must' is not a proper phrase in this context.

× Yes, I want to learn about at, especially about the history, because I have studied history.

✓ Yes, I want to learn about art, especially about the history, because I have studied history.

The word 'at' is a typo or incorrect preposition here. The correct word is 'art'.

× I wrote about, I'm not sure about that, of arts.

✓ I wrote about it, but I'm not sure about that, of arts.

The sentence is fragmented and unclear. Adding 'it' and 'but' helps connect the ideas properly, making the sentence coherent.

× I wanna understand their future.

✓ I want to understand its future.

The pronoun 'their' is plural, but 'art' is singular, so the singular pronoun 'its' should be used to agree with the singular noun.

× Yes, when I was a little kid I won a drawing because my mother sometimes took me to the lesson.

✓ Yes, when I was a little kid I won a drawing contest because my mother sometimes took me to the lessons.

The verb 'won' is correct, but 'a drawing' is incomplete; it should be 'a drawing contest' or similar. Also, 'lesson' should be plural 'lessons' to indicate multiple sessions.

× But when I was 10 years ago, I hesitated to participate in that because I was not good at the skill.

✓ But 10 years ago, I hesitated to participate in that because I was not good at the skill.

The phrase 'when I was 10 years ago' is incorrect. It should be '10 years ago' to indicate the time in the past. The verb 'hesitated' is correctly in past tense.