艺术— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer wa eigo no shizen-sa ga tarinai desu. Tokuni, bunpou to kotoba no tsukaikata ni fukuzatsu-sa ga arimasu. Motto seikaku ni shite, fukuzatsu na kotoba o tsukawazu, rikai shi yasui bunshou ni shite kudasai. Mata, setsuzoku-shi o tsukatte, setsumei o renshou shite kudasai.

範例: Yes, I like drawing very much. I often draw pictures of nature or my surroundings when I have free time. Drawing helps me relax after a busy day. Also, it inspires me to think of new ideas, which is why I enjoy it.

建議: Kotae ga fukuzatsu de, imi ga wakari nikui desu. Tokuni, setsuzoku-shi no tsukaikata to bunpou no seikaku-sa ga hitsuyou desu. Motto shizen de wakari yasui kotoba o tsukatte, setsumei o shite kudasai. Konkyo o motte, tokuchou o shousai ni setsumei shite kudasai.

範例: Yes, I like going to galleries, especially on holidays. I enjoy looking at historical artworks, such as those from Portugal, because I can learn a lot about history and culture from them.

建議: Kotae ga fukuzatsu de, imi ga wakari nikui desu. Tokuni, bunpou to kotoba no tsukaikata o kaizen shite, motto seikaku ni setsumei shite kudasai. Setsuzoku-shi o tsukatte, rikai shi yasui bunshou ni shite kudasai.

範例: Yes, I want to learn more about art. I studied it a lot until high school, but after that, I haven't had many chances. If possible, I would like to improve my skills and learn more about your art.

建議: Kotae ga fukuzatsu de, imi ga wakari nikui desu. Tokuni, bunpou to kotoba no tsukaikata o kaizen shite, motto seikaku ni setsumei shite kudasai. Setsuzoku-shi o tsukatte, rikai shi yasui bunshou ni shite kudasai.

範例: Yes, I learned drawing when I was a child. Art was a subject from elementary to high school. I practiced drawing many things like nature and faces, but it was difficult.

× Drawing some pictures is one of my favorite things to do.

✓ Drawing pictures is one of my favorite things to do.

The phrase 'some pictures' is unnecessary here; 'drawing pictures' is more natural and grammatically correct. 'Some' is often used with plural countable nouns but can be omitted when speaking generally.

× I often draw some pictures such as nature or surroundings when I have a spare time.

✓ I often draw pictures such as nature or surroundings when I have spare time.

The quantifier 'some' is unnecessary before 'pictures' in this context. Also, 'a spare time' is incorrect because 'time' is uncountable here; it should be 'spare time' without an article.

× It allow me to reflex from very busy schedule for somewhat driving is useful.

✓ It allows me to relax from a very busy schedule because driving is somewhat useful.

The subject 'It' requires the verb 'allows' in third person singular form. Also, 'reflex' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'relax'. The sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× I often come up with new idea when I enjoy it, that's why I like.

✓ I often come up with new ideas when I enjoy it; that's why I like it.

'Idea' should be plural 'ideas' to match 'come up with'. The sentence is incomplete without 'it' at the end. Also, a semicolon or period is needed to separate the two clauses.

× I often go to gallery by hour.

✓ I often go to the gallery for an hour.

The phrase 'by hour' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'for' to indicate duration. Also, 'gallery' needs the definite article 'the'.

× In particularly I like watching the historical arts such as Portugal scholarship, famous art, cause from them I can learn a lot of things.

✓ In particular, I like watching historical art such as Portuguese scholarship and famous artworks because I can learn a lot from them.

'In particularly' should be 'In particular'. 'The historical arts' is better as 'historical art' without 'the'. 'Portugal scholarship' should be 'Portuguese scholarship'. 'Cause' should be 'because'. The sentence is restructured for clarity.

× How a lot of history? How do they spend the time?

✓ There is a lot of history. How did they spend their time?

The original sentences are incomplete or incorrect questions. The first is a statement, so it needs to be rephrased. The second question needs correct tense and pronouns.

× Yes I do cause until I until high school student I learned about a lot, but after that I don't have any opportunity to learn about it.

✓ Yes, I do because until I was a high school student, I learned a lot, but after that, I haven't had any opportunity to learn about it.

'Cause' should be 'because' in formal speech. 'Until I until high school student' is incorrect; it should be 'until I was a high school student'. The tense is corrected to present perfect for 'haven't had'.

× I would like to develop it more expatic, that's why I if possible I would like to learn about your art.

✓ I would like to develop it more explicitly; that's why, if possible, I would like to learn about your art.

'Expatic' is likely a misspelling of 'explicitly'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and correct pronoun placement.

× Yes, I teach.

✓ Yes, I was taught.

The question asks about learning drawing as a kid, so the past passive 'was taught' is appropriate instead of the present tense 'teach'.

× The art is one of the subject when we have to students have to learn when like from elementary school to high school.

✓ Art is one of the subjects that students have to learn from elementary school to high school.

'The art' should be 'Art' without 'the'. 'One of the subject' should be 'one of the subjects'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammar.

× I also run a lot of how to write down the picture.

✓ I also practiced a lot on how to draw pictures.

'Run a lot of how to write down the picture' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'practiced a lot on how to draw pictures'.

× I try to write down many pictures such as nature, my face, but it was tough.

✓ I tried to draw many pictures such as nature and my face, but it was tough.

'Write down' is incorrect for drawing pictures; 'draw' is the correct verb. Also, 'try' should be past tense 'tried' to match the past context.