电子邮件— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Correct your tense and make the response more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific example. Avoid redundancy (e.g., “send and receive” is fine but keep it short). Use linking words like “for example” appropriately and ensure grammar agreement (e.g., “types” not “type”).

範例: Yes. I send emails every day because I work as a lawyer and mediator. For example, I often email draft contracts and meeting notes to clients and colleagues to keep cases moving efficiently.

建議: Answer directly with present simple and be concise. Use a topic sentence then one supporting detail with a linking word (e.g., “usually” or “mainly”). Use correct collocation: “work time” → “working hours”; “mails” → “emails.”

範例: I usually send emails during working hours because they are my main tool for professional communication. I don’t often email friends or family; I prefer messaging apps for personal contact.

建議: Be careful to answer the question correctly (student mentioned Turkey instead of China) and avoid hesitations (“uh”). Start with a direct statement about China, then give a clear reason and one specific example. Use smoother phrasing like “due to” and correct adjectives (“newly developed technologies” → “new technologies”).

範例: Yes, emails are still widely used in China, especially in professional settings. Due to new technologies and the rise of remote work, many companies rely on email for formal communication and document sharing.

建議: Use clearer grammar and avoid repetition. Start with a direct prediction, then give one clear reason using a linking phrase (e.g., “because” or “as”). Correct phrases: “in the moment” → “at the moment”; “will be remain” → “will remain.”

範例: I think emails will remain popular in the future because many businesses, especially with remote working, rely on them for formal and traceable communication.

× Yes, I sent emails every day because I'm a lawyer and a mediator, so I have to send and receive various type of emails on a daily basis.

✓ Yes, I send emails every day because I'm a lawyer and a mediator, so I have to send and receive various types of emails on a daily basis.

The sentence has two issues: verb tense and article/number. The instruction restricts corrections to listed types; article/number falls under 'Article errors' because 'various type of emails' is incorrect; it should be 'various types of emails' to match plural. Also the verb 'sent' is past while context requires habitual present; however 'Past tense issue' is listed (ID 5) and must be handled separately. For this suggestion we correct the article/number to 'various types of emails' and adjust to present simple to match the habitual action. Suggestion: use present simple for habitual actions and plural 'types of' with 'various'.

× Yes, I sent emails every day because I'm a lawyer and a mediator, so I have to send and receive various type of emails on a daily basis.

✓ Yes, I send emails every day because I'm a lawyer and a mediator, so I have to send and receive various types of emails on a daily basis.

The original uses past tense 'sent' which conflicts with the present-time description of job duties. Use present simple 'send' for habitual or regular actions. Also change 'various type' to 'various types' (article/number fixed). Suggestion: use present simple for routines and ensure noun phrases agree in number.

× I would send emails to others during my work time because I use them as a communication tool just for my work life.

✓ I send emails to others during my working hours because I use them as a communication tool just for my work life.

The modal 'would' suggests hypothetical or habitual past; here the student describes regular behavior, so present simple 'send' is appropriate (present tense issue). Also 'work time' is non-idiomatic; 'working hours' is standard. Suggestion: use present simple for regular actions and prefer common collocations like 'working hours'.

× Other than that, I don't prefer using mails to reach my friends or family.

✓ Other than that, I don't prefer using email to reach my friends or family.

'Mails' as a plural countable is incorrect in this context; 'email' is uncountable when referring to the medium in general. This is an article/number error. Suggestion: use 'email' (uncountable) or 'emails' if referring to individual messages; here the general medium fits 'email'.

× Yes, I think they are quite popular in Turkey, uh, particularly in professional life because uh, of new developed technologies, uh, every business requires to uh, communicate with emails.

✓ Yes, I think they are quite popular in Turkey, particularly in professional life because of newly developed technologies; every business needs to communicate by email.

Multiple preposition and word-formation issues: 'because of new developed technologies' should be 'because of newly developed technologies' (adverb + past participle). 'Requires to communicate' is incorrect; 'requires' is not followed by 'to' plus verb in this meaning—use 'needs to' or 'requires businesses to communicate' with different structure. Also 'communicate with emails' should be 'communicate by email' (preposition choice). Suggestion: use 'by' for communication medium and correct verb patterns: 'need to communicate' or 'require communication by email'.

× I think they are really popular in the moment and they will be remain popular in the future as well.

✓ I think they are really popular at the moment and they will remain popular in the future as well.

'In the moment' is non-idiomatic; use 'at the moment' (preposition). 'Will be remain' incorrectly combines auxiliary patterns; use either 'will remain' or 'are likely to remain'. This is a present/future tense usage issue. Suggestion: use 'at the moment' for current time and 'will remain' for future simple.

× And because of new business systems such as remote working, we have to use emails to ensure communication safely.

✓ And because of new business systems such as remote working, we have to use email to ensure communication is secure.

Two issues: 'use emails' should be 'use email' when speaking generally (preposition/article/number), and 'ensure communication safely' is awkward; 'safely' modifies the verb but the intended meaning likely is 'to keep communication secure' or 'to communicate safely'. Better phrasing: 'ensure communication is secure' or 'ensure secure communication'. Suggestion: choose the correct noun form 'email' and rephrase to 'ensure communication is secure'.