团队合作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 答えは肯定的で適切ですが、表現が繰り返しで不明瞭です。まずトピック文で簡潔に理由を述べ、次に具体例と結果を示す構成にしてください。つなぎ語（for example, because, which）を使って論理を明確にし、単語の重複（new perspective, feeling）を避けて具体的な語彙（ideas, insights, motivation など）を使いましょう。文は3〜4文に収め、簡潔にまとめてください。

範例: Yes, I do. I enjoy teamwork because it brings different ideas together and helps solve problems faster. For example, when I worked on a school project, my teammates suggested new approaches that improved our final design. As a result, we finished earlier and got better feedback.

建議: 文法や語順の誤りが多く、意味が分かりにくいです。まず簡潔なトピック文（Yes, I have.）を置き、いつ・どこで・誰と・何をしたかを具体的に述べてください。過去形の一貫性を保ち、目的（objectives）や活動内容を具体的に説明しましょう。接続詞（for example, when, so）で文をつなげてください。

範例: Yes, I have. For example, when I was on my school archery team, I formed a small practice group with three teammates. We set clear goals for improving our accuracy and met twice a week to train together.

建議: 要点はあるものの、表現が不自然で具体性に欠けます。“how to reach decision without making correction”など意味が不明瞭な箇所は言い換えてください。学んだことを2点程度に絞り、理由や具体例を付け加えて論理的に説明しましょう。接続詞（for example, because, therefore）を使って流れを整えてください。

範例: I learned several things from working in my IT team. Firstly, I learned how to make decisions by discussing options and reaching a consensus, which reduced mistakes. Secondly, I learned the importance of creating shared ideas so everyone knew their role and worked efficiently.

建議: 答えは曖昧で比喩（demonic, severe horror）が不適切で過剰です。嫌いな点を1点に絞り、具体的な問題（意見の対立、遅延、責任不明確など）を簡潔に説明し、なぜそれが問題かを述べてください。冷静で自然な語彙（conflict, disagreement, slow decision-making）を使い、解決策や対処法を付け加えると印象が良くなります。

範例: Although I value teamwork, I sometimes dislike how hard it can be to reach a decision when team members strongly disagree. For example, in one project we spent too much time arguing about minor details, which delayed our work. To avoid this, we later agreed to vote or assign a leader to make final calls.

× Doing something in the team helps us a lot.

✓ Doing something in a team helps us a lot.

The preposition 'in' with the definite article 'the' implies a specific team, but the speaker refers to teamwork in general; use 'a team' for general statements. Use 'in a team' or 'as a team'. Suggestion: Use 'in a team' when speaking generally about being part of any team.

× For example, it provides us the new perspective or feeling so that we can reach our new perspective.

✓ For example, it gives us new perspectives or feelings so that we can gain new insights.

'Provides us the new perspective' is awkward: 'provide' usually takes 'us with' or use 'give'. 'The new perspective' incorrectly uses the definite article; 'new perspectives' (plural) fits better. 'Reach our new perspective' is unnatural; use 'gain new insights'. Suggestion: Use 'give us new perspectives' and avoid unnecessary 'the'.

× Yes, I have I.

✓ Yes, I have.

The extra 'I' is redundant and grammatically incorrect. In short responses using present perfect, say 'Yes, I have.' Suggestion: Remove duplicated pronoun.

× When I want to achieve something, objectives especially I made a small team when I was belonging to the archery team and we set our objective and make.

✓ When I wanted to achieve certain objectives, I formed a small team while I was on the archery team, and we set our objectives and worked together to achieve them.

Multiple structural problems: tense inconsistency ('want' vs past events), word order ('objectives especially' misplaced), incorrect verb 'belonging to' instead of 'on' or 'in', and incomplete clause 'we set our objective and make'. Use past tense for past events, 'formed a small team', and complete the action 'worked together to achieve them.' Suggestion: Keep tense consistent and use natural collocations like 'on the archery team' and 'formed a team'.

× I learned a lot from working with Team IT.

✓ I learned a lot from working with Team IT.

Sentence is grammatically acceptable in past tense if referring to completed experience. No change needed. Suggestion: Keep as is if referring to past experience.

× How to reach decision without making correction was very meaningful.

✓ Learning how to make decisions without constantly correcting them was very meaningful.

Missing articles: 'reach decision' should be 'make decisions' or 'reach a decision'. 'Making correction' is incorrect; use 'constantly correcting them' or 'making corrections'. Also, sentence structure improved by using a gerund 'Learning how to...'. Suggestion: Use 'make decisions' or 'reach a decision' and 'make corrections'.

× Besides, creating shared opinion was very important.

✓ Besides, creating a shared opinion was very important.

'Shared opinion' needs an article: 'a shared opinion' or better 'shared opinions' plural. Use countable noun with 'a' or plural noun. Suggestion: Use 'a shared opinion' or 'shared opinions' depending on meaning.

× Through the experiments and Team I. Received a lot of precious experience but sometimes I face to a challenging and demonic situation that we can't make decision with severe horror issue.

✓ Through experiments and working with Team I, I gained a lot of valuable experience, but sometimes I faced challenging situations where we couldn't make decisions because of serious disagreements.

Many issues: sentence fragments ('Team I. Received'), incorrect prepositions ('face to'), awkward vocabulary ('demonic', 'severe horror issue'), article misuse, and tense inconsistency. Replace 'precious experience' with 'valuable experience', 'face to' with 'faced', and 'demonic'/'horror' with 'serious disagreements' or 'conflicts'. Ensure past tense for past experience. Suggestion: Use clear verbs, appropriate collocations (gained experience, faced situations, couldn't make decisions), and neutral vocabulary like 'serious disagreements'.