老师— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct and clear. Start with a simple topic sentence naming the teacher (e.g., my primary school English teacher), then give two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid hesitation sounds and irrelevant fragments. Use correct grammar for possession and tense (e.g., “my old English teacher” and “he guided me”). Keep to 2–4 sentences.

範例: My favourite teacher was my primary school English teacher. He guided me step by step, teaching pronunciation and grammar clearly, which helped me improve quickly. Because he made lessons interesting, I became more confident and enjoyed studying English.

建議: Answer directly then give a concise reason. Use correct verb forms (e.g., “I am still in contact with him” or “I still keep in touch with him”) and avoid filler words. Add a short detail about how you keep in touch (e.g., messages, visits) to make it specific.

範例: Yes, I am still in contact with my old English teacher. I often message him to ask for advice about English, and we meet occasionally when he visits my town.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence describing one or two concrete ways he helped you, then support with a brief example and a linking word (e.g., “for example” or “because”). Use precise vocabulary (e.g., “taught me pronunciation and grammar,” “inspired me to pursue English”).

範例: He helped me by teaching pronunciation and basic grammar in a very patient way. For example, he corrected my speaking step by step and encouraged me to read stories, which inspired me to study English more seriously.

建議: Be clear about your current attitude and give a reason. Start with a direct statement (Yes or No), then explain briefly why, using linking words like “because” or “however.” Correct pronoun use and tense (e.g., “I was attracted to him” not “her”) and avoid vague words like “strange.”

範例: I sometimes dream of becoming a teacher, but I am not sure if I will. I was inspired by my English teacher because he made learning enjoyable, but I also have other career interests, so I might choose a different path.

× Of course, yes, it's in my old English teachers.

✓ Of course, yes, it's my old English teacher.

The student used the preposition 'in' incorrectly and an unnecessary plural 'teachers'. Use the noun phrase 'my old English teacher' without 'in'. Remove plural to match singular referent.

× I remember he gave me step by step, especially I am, I was in fact, uh by his uh, teaching weight.

✓ I remember he gave me step-by-step guidance; in fact I was influenced by his teaching.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and contains awkward phrases. 'Gave me step by step' should be 'gave me step-by-step guidance'. 'I am, I was in fact, uh by his uh, teaching weight' is incorrect; use 'I was influenced by his teaching' to show past influence. Ensure subject-verb agreement and correct noun forms.

× And he, he guide me how to pronounce uh from test my step and he showed me.

✓ And he guided me on how to pronounce words step by step and he showed me techniques.

The verb 'guide' should be in past tense 'guided' to match the past timeframe. 'Guide me how to pronounce' should be 'guided me on how to pronounce' or 'guided me in pronouncing'. Use 'step by step' as an adverbial phrase and add a clear object like 'techniques'.

× Experience and value knowledge to study English.

✓ He shared his experience and valuable knowledge to help me study English.

The fragment lacks a clear subject and verb. Rephrase to 'He shared his experience and valuable knowledge...' to make a complete sentence and to use correct adjective 'valuable' instead of 'value'.

× So he's good in literature? I think so.

✓ He was good at literature, I think.

Use past tense 'was' to match earlier references and 'good at' is the correct prepositional phrase. The question mark is inappropriate in reported speech; make a declarative statement.

× To be honest, uh, I still in contact with, uh, my old English teacher because it's the first English teacher and I'm appreciate him so much.

✓ To be honest, I am still in contact with my old English teacher because he was my first English teacher and I appreciate him so much.

Use the verb 'am' with 'in contact' to form 'am in contact with'. 'It's the first English teacher' should be 'he was my first English teacher' to refer to the person. 'I'm appreciate him' is incorrect; use 'I appreciate him'.

× Umm, sometime, uh, I uh.

✓ Umm, sometimes I talk to him.

The original is an incomplete fragment. Provide a complete clause that fits context, e.g., 'sometimes I talk to him.' Use 'sometimes' (adverb) not 'sometime' unless singular unspecified time.

× To be honest, he gave me everything from pronunciation and grammar, uh, especially he inspired me, uh, to study English.

✓ To be honest, he gave me everything from pronunciation to grammar; especially, he inspired me to study English.

Use 'to' in the phrase 'from... to...' instead of repeating 'and'. The tense 'gave' and 'inspired' are correct past tense; minor punctuation and word order adjustments improve clarity.

× This is the.

✓ This is the reason why I enjoy learning English.

Original is an incomplete sentence. Provide a full clause that conveys the intended meaning.

× The first time I study him, I'm attracted by him, but at her death, I.

✓ When I first studied under him, I was attracted to him, but after some time my feelings changed.

Use past tense 'studied' to match past situation. 'Study him' is incorrect—use 'studied under him' or 'learned from him'. 'I'm attracted by him' should be past: 'I was attracted to him'. 'At her death' is incorrect and unclear; infer intended 'after some time'.

× My dream is strange.

✓ My dream is unusual.

Use 'unusual' as a clearer adjective than 'strange' depending on nuance. Keep present simple 'is' if referring to current dream.

× Uh, but sometime I still have uh, a dream to become a teacher.

✓ But sometimes I still have a dream of becoming a teacher.

Use 'sometimes' (adverb) and the collocation 'a dream of becoming' rather than 'a dream to become'. Keep present simple for ongoing desire.

× Uh and umm, I think uh, English teacher is our one of my.

✓ I think being an English teacher is one of my goals.

The original misuses pronouns and word order. Use 'being an English teacher' or 'an English teacher is one of my goals' to express intention. 'Our one of my' is incorrect mixing pronouns.