老师— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答时句子结构较为复杂且有重复，表达不够自然流畅。建议简化句子，避免重复表达，并且注意语法准确性。

範例: My favorite teacher was my physics teacher last year. He recognized my potential and encouraged me to join the Advanced Physics club, which helped me develop a strong interest in physics. Because of this, I decided to study physics in my undergraduate course.

建議: 回答中存在重复和语法错误，表达不够清晰。建议简化句子，避免重复，并且直接回答问题。

範例: No, I am not in touch with my primary school teacher. I changed schools during secondary education and lost contact with them.

建議: 回答不完整且语法错误较多，表达不清晰。建议使用完整句子，明确说明老师如何帮助自己，并避免语法错误。

範例: My favorite teacher helped me by encouraging me whenever I felt lost. He also motivated me to participate in competitions and join the Advanced Physics club, which boosted my confidence and interest in physics.

建議: 回答较为清晰，但表达略显简单。建议使用更自然的表达方式，并且注意时态和连贯性。

範例: Yes, I definitely want to be a teacher in the future, specifically a university professor. After completing my undergraduate studies, I plan to pursue a PhD and eventually become a professor.

× He discovered my potential in physics and encouraged me to join the Advanced Physics club which I discovered my interest in physics and decided to take courses of physics under in undergraduate course.

✓ He discovered my potential in physics and encouraged me to join the Advanced Physics club, where I discovered my interest in physics and decided to take physics courses during my undergraduate studies.

句子中“which I discovered my interest in physics and decided to take courses of physics under in undergraduate course”结构不完整且时态混乱，应改为“where I discovered my interest in physics and decided to take physics courses during my undergraduate studies”使句子更通顺且时态一致。

× I decided to take courses of physics under in undergraduate course.

✓ I decided to take physics courses during my undergraduate studies.

“take courses of physics under in undergraduate course”中“under in”是错误的介词搭配，应使用“during my undergraduate studies”表示“在本科期间”。

× I don't have the contact of my primary school teacher, so I don't I don't know.

✓ I don't have the contact information of my primary school teacher, so I don't know.

“I don't I don't know”重复且不完整，应删去多余部分；“contact”应具体为“contact information”更准确。

× I transferred to another secondary school in my secondary school life, which is Chancery Health College.

✓ I transferred to another secondary school during my secondary school years, which is Chancery Heath College.

“in my secondary school life”表达不自然，应改为“during my secondary school years”更符合英语习惯。

× As I said, it allows me to realize that myself is.

✓ As I said, it allowed me to realize that about myself.

“myself is”结构不完整且错误，应改为“about myself”表示“关于我自己”，且时态应与前文一致。

× He always encouraged me to study when I got lost and he discovered my potential increases and encouraged me to join more and more competition and the advanced physics club.

✓ He always encouraged me to study when I was lost, discovered my potential, and encouraged me to join more and more competitions and the Advanced Physics club.

“got lost”更常用表达为“was lost”；“potential increases”时态错误，应为“discovered my potential”；“competition”应为复数“competitions”。

× I will continue my study after I finished my undergraduate study and I will definitely take a PhD and become a professor.

✓ I will continue my studies after I finish my undergraduate studies, and I will definitely pursue a PhD and become a professor.

“after I finished”时态错误，应为“after I finish”表示将来时间；“take a PhD”表达不准确，应为“pursue a PhD”；“study”应为复数“studies”。