老师— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答时语法和表达不够准确，句子结构混乱，且有重复和不连贯的地方。建议简化句子，注意时态和单复数，避免冗余，使表达更自然流畅。

範例: Yes, I have a favourite teacher from high school. He always encouraged me not to limit myself and to explore the world as much as possible. His advice has had a strong impact on me, and I still remember it clearly.

建議: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，句子结构混乱。建议使用更简洁明了的句子，注意时态和介词的正确使用，避免重复。

範例: No, I am not in touch with my primary school teacher because we are both very busy. I moved to another city for university, while he still lives in my hometown.

建議: 回答不完整且表达不清，句子不连贯，缺少具体细节。建议直接回答问题，使用连贯的句子，并提供具体的帮助方式。

範例: My favourite teacher helped me by encouraging me to keep an open mind and to accept new experiences. This advice helped me grow personally and academically.

建議: 回答中有重复和语法错误，表达不够流畅。建议简化句子，避免口语填充词，清晰表达自己的专业和兴趣。

範例: No, I don't want to be a teacher because my major is international business with a focus on business analytics. I prefer to work in the business field, especially in marketing.

× He is one of my favorite teacher and he told me in my high school he always said don't put yourself in a box just explore the world as you can as much as you can.

✓ He is one of my favorite teachers and he told me in my high school he always said don't put yourself in a box just explore the world as much as you can.

这里的错误是单复数问题。'one of my favorite teacher'中，teacher应为复数teachers，因为one of后面必须接复数名词。还有'as you can as much as you can'中，'as you can'多余，应删去。

× And I've deadline really hit me hard.

✓ And the deadline really hit me hard.

这里的错误是时态和词语使用问题。'I've deadline'不正确，应为'the deadline'，表示特定的截止日期。动词'hit'用过去式正确。

× No, I'm not keeping in touch with my school, my primary school teacher, because we are so busy this this years.

✓ No, I'm not keeping in touch with my primary school teacher because we have been so busy these years.

这里的错误是时态和词语使用问题。'this this years'应为'these years'，表示这几年。'we are so busy'改为'we have been so busy'更符合持续状态。

× I mean, I went to another city to study my university and he and he's still in the in my, you know, hometown to.

✓ I mean, I went to another city to study at university and he is still in my, you know, hometown too.

这里的错误是时态和词语使用问题。'study my university'应为'study at university'。'he and he's'重复，应改为'he is'。'to'应为'too'，表示也。

× Well, my favorite teacher told me in a special way.

✓ Well, my favorite teacher taught me in a special way.

这里的错误是动词使用问题。'told me in a special way'不太合适，应该用'taught me'表示以特殊方式教导。

× I mean, he told me how to explore the world and just open my mind and accept what I saw, what I see.

✓ I mean, he told me how to explore the world and just open my mind and accept what I see.

这里的错误是时态不一致。'what I saw'应改为'what I see'，保持现在时态一致。

× And that is a great improve from what?

✓ And that is a great improvement for me.

这里的错误是句子结构问题。'a great improve'应为'a great improvement'，'from what?'不完整，应改为'for me'表示对我来说是很大的进步。

× No, actually I don't because my major isn't you know isn't education OK, My major is business analytic international business.

✓ No, actually I don't because my major isn't, you know, education. OK, my major is business analytics, international business.

这里的错误是情态动词和句子结构问题。'isn't you know isn't education'重复且不通顺，应调整为'isn't, you know, education'。另外，'business analytic'应为'business analytics'。

× So I would, I prefer go to business area and I'm also interested in marketing such as you know marketing.

✓ So I would prefer to go into the business area and I'm also interested in marketing, such as, you know, marketing.

这里的错误是动词形式和介词使用。'prefer go'应为'prefer to go'，'business area'前加介词'into'更自然。句子中逗号使用也需调整。