老师— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Améliorez la grammaire et la cohérence en corrigeant les erreurs de conjugaison et en évitant les répétitions. Par exemple, utilisez le temps correct des verbes et évitez de répéter "help" deux fois dans la même phrase. Aussi, clarifiez le genre du professeur pour éviter la confusion.

範例: All my teachers are supportive, but if I had to choose one, I would pick my statistics professor because he always wants me to understand the lessons. Whenever I have problems in class, he is always willing to help me grasp the concepts.

建議: Travaillez sur la fluidité et la structure des phrases. Évitez les pauses inutiles et les répétitions comme "good good". Utilisez des phrases complètes et claires pour exprimer vos idées.

範例: Actually, I am no longer in touch with my primary school teacher because it has been more than 10 years. Although I don't remember much about her, I believe she was a good teacher because she helped me develop a love for learning.

建議: Corrigez les erreurs de genre et de grammaire, et améliorez la cohérence en utilisant des mots de liaison. Par exemple, évitez de mélanger "she's" et "he's" et utilisez des connecteurs pour rendre la réponse plus fluide.

範例: My statistics professor always wants me to fully understand the lessons. Therefore, he encourages me to answer his questions, and if I don't understand some abstract concepts, he is always willing to help me.

建議: Améliorez la structure des phrases et utilisez un vocabulaire plus naturel. Par exemple, remplacez "knowledged" par "knowledgeable" et simplifiez les phrases pour plus de clarté.

範例: If I have the chance, I would like to be a teacher because I enjoy explaining concepts to others and helping them gain more knowledge. I believe teaching is a way to build a knowledgeable community.

× All my teachers are so supportive but if I have to choose one, I choose my statistiques professor because he always want me to understand all the lessons and if I have a problems in my class she is always willing to help and help me to understand.

✓ All my teachers are so supportive but if I have to choose one, I choose my statistics professor because he always wants me to understand all the lessons and if I have problems in my class, he is always willing to help and help me to understand.

The verb 'want' should be 'wants' to agree with the third person singular subject 'he'. Also, 'a problems' is incorrect; 'problems' is plural and should not have 'a'. The pronoun 'she' is inconsistent with 'he' referring to the same professor, so it should be 'he'. These corrections ensure subject-verb agreement and pronoun consistency.

× All my teachers are so supportive but if I have to choose one, I choose my statistiques professor because he always want me to understand all the lessons and if I have a problems in my class she is always willing to help and help me to understand.

✓ All my teachers are so supportive but if I have to choose one, I choose my statistics professor because he always wants me to understand all the lessons and if I have problems in my class, he is always willing to help and help me to understand.

The pronoun 'she' is incorrectly used when referring to the statistics professor who was previously referred to as 'he'. Consistent pronoun use is necessary to avoid confusion.

× Actually, I'm no longer in touch with my primary school teacher because it's been more than 10 years and. I don't have. Any memories about her? But I think she's good good teacher because she helps me to love the learning.

✓ Actually, I'm no longer in touch with my primary school teacher because it's been more than 10 years and I don't have any memories about her. But I think she was a good teacher because she helped me to love learning.

The sentence mixes present and past tenses incorrectly. Since the teacher is from the past, 'was' and 'helped' should be used. Also, 'good good' is a repetition error and should be 'good'. The phrase 'love the learning' is awkward; 'love learning' is more natural.

× Actually, I'm no longer in touch with my primary school teacher because it's been more than 10 years and. I don't have. Any memories about her? But I think she's good good teacher because she helps me to love the learning.

✓ Actually, I'm no longer in touch with my primary school teacher because it's been more than 10 years and I don't have any memories about her. But I think she was a good teacher because she helped me to love learning.

The original sentence has improper punctuation and sentence fragments ('and.', 'I don't have.', 'Any memories about her?'). These should be combined into complete sentences for clarity and correctness.

× My statistics professors always want me to fully understand the lessons. So he'll always want to try to make me respond to his questions and if I don't understand some concepts that is abstract she's he's always willing to help me to understand.

✓ My statistics professor always wants me to fully understand the lessons. So he always tries to make me respond to his questions, and if I don't understand some abstract concepts, he is always willing to help me understand.

'Professors' should be singular 'professor' to match 'he'. 'Want' should be 'wants' for third person singular. 'He'll always want to try' is awkward; 'he always tries' is better. The phrase 'concepts that is abstract' is incorrect; 'concepts' is plural, so 'are abstract' or 'abstract concepts' is correct. The pronouns 'she's he's' are inconsistent and should be 'he is'.

× My statistics professors always want me to fully understand the lessons. So he'll always want to try to make me respond to his questions and if I don't understand some concepts that is abstract she's he's always willing to help me to understand.

✓ My statistics professor always wants me to fully understand the lessons. So he always tries to make me respond to his questions, and if I don't understand some abstract concepts, he is always willing to help me understand.

The pronouns 'she's he's' are incorrect and confusing. Since the professor is male, 'he is' should be used consistently.

× If I have a chance, I think I want to be a teacher too, because I love the way that I can explain some concepts with others, help them to understand, to gain more knowledge, as a way to create, to build a community that is knowledged.

✓ If I have a chance, I think I would like to be a teacher too, because I love the way I can explain some concepts to others, help them understand, and help them gain more knowledge, as a way to create and build a knowledgeable community.

'I want to be' is less polite and less conditional than 'I would like to be' when expressing future intentions. 'Explain some concepts with others' should be 'explain some concepts to others'. The phrase 'a community that is knowledged' is incorrect; 'knowledgeable community' is the correct adjective form.