生日— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan penggunaan kata yang tepat, serta buat kalimat lebih alami dan efektif. Hindari pengulangan kata seperti 'really' dan gunakan kalimat yang lebih jelas dan terstruktur.

範例: I usually have dinner or breakfast with my family to celebrate my birthday. I feel happy and grateful to share this special moment with them.

建議: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan struktur kalimat agar lebih jelas dan koheren. Gunakan linking words untuk menghubungkan ide dan hindari kalimat yang tidak lengkap atau membingungkan.

範例: When I was a child, my parents planned birthday parties for me, where I would open presents and receive prizes. However, as an adult, I prefer to organize my own celebrations.

建議: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan pilih kata yang tepat agar makna lebih jelas. Gunakan kalimat yang lebih sederhana dan hindari pengulangan kata yang tidak perlu.

範例: Yes, I think celebrating birthdays is important because it helps you appreciate your life and age. It also makes you feel grateful to yourself and to God.

建議: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan buat kalimat lebih jelas dan terstruktur. Gunakan linking words untuk menghubungkan ide dan hindari kalimat yang terputus-putus.

範例: I have not heard much about this, but I think the most important birthdays to celebrate in China might be those of political leaders or people who hold important positions in the country.

× I usually have a dinner or like breakfast with my family to celebrate my knew age.

✓ I usually have dinner or breakfast with my family to celebrate my new age.

The article 'a' before 'dinner' is incorrect because 'dinner' is an uncountable noun in this context and does not require an article. Also, 'knew' is a misspelling of 'new'.

× I think I'm really happy and really grateful to have a special moment at the special day with my family.

✓ I think I'm really happy and really grateful to have a special moment on the special day with my family.

The preposition 'at' is incorrectly used with 'the special day'; the correct preposition is 'on' when referring to days.

× My parents planning a birthday party so like I will open the. Gave and a price.

✓ My parents planned a birthday party, so I would open the gift and receive a prize.

The verb 'planning' should be in past tense 'planned' to match the past context. 'Gave' is incorrect; it should be 'gift'. 'Price' is a wrong word here; it should be 'prize'. Also, sentence structure is corrected for clarity.

× Meanwhile at adult I'm planning to celebrate party to.

✓ Meanwhile, as an adult, I'm planning to celebrate a party too.

The phrase 'at adult' is incorrect; it should be 'as an adult'. 'Celebrate party' needs an article 'a'. 'To' should be 'too' to mean 'also'.

× Yes, I think it is important because I think it's makes you realize how important your life and also the number of your aids.

✓ Yes, I think it is important because I think it makes you realize how important your life is and also the number of your years.

'It's makes' is incorrect; it should be 'it makes'. 'Your life' needs a verb 'is' to complete the sentence. 'Aids' is a wrong word; it should be 'years'.

× An I think it's also becoming it makes it makes you feel grateful to your knew, adds an also grateful to God and yourself.

✓ And I think it also makes you feel grateful for your new age, and also grateful to God and yourself.

'An' should be 'And'. 'Becoming it makes it makes' is redundant and incorrect; simplified to 'also makes'. 'Knew, adds' is incorrect; should be 'new age'. 'Grateful to' should be 'grateful for' when referring to something abstract like age.

× I actually never hear any information or news related to this but.

✓ I have actually never heard any information or news related to this, but.

The verb tense is incorrect; 'never hear' should be 'have never heard' to indicate experience up to now. Also, the sentence is incomplete and needs a comma before 'but'.

× I think the most important maybe it's like a politic, people or persons or like someone who has.

✓ I think the most important maybe are political people or persons, or someone who has.

'It's like a politic' is incorrect; 'politic' is an adjective or noun but used wrongly here. It should be 'political people'. Also, subject-verb agreement corrected from 'it's' to 'are'.

× Important positions in their country.

✓ Important positions in their country.

This is a sentence fragment lacking a subject and verb. It should be connected to the previous sentence or rephrased to form a complete sentence.