网络— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Сделайте ответ более связным и грамматически корректным: начните с чёткого общего предложения, затем добавьте причину и пример. Избегайте повторов слова «Internet» и исправьте ошибки в структуре предложений (например, «I went to English» → «I started English classes»). Ограничьте ответ до 2–3 предложений.

範例: I started using the internet about two years ago when I began attending English classes. I couldn’t do my homework without it because most resources and exercises were online.

建議: Сформулируйте частоту ясно (например, «almost every day»), используйте связки (because, for example) и исправьте грамматические ошибки. Дайте один конкретный пример и избегайте лишних слов и неправильных фраз («my practice on the my phone»).

範例: I go online almost every day, mainly to talk with friends and complete my homework. For example, I use the internet on my phone to access summer reading materials and practice exercises.

建議: Уточните время и используйте правильные времена (например, «when I was a child» и «I sat on the internet» → «I spent too much time online»). Добавьте одну деталь о том, почему это происходило и как вы чувствовали себя. Оставьте 2–3 предложения.

範例: Yes, I remember when I was a child my father took my phone because I spent too much time online at night. It was boring for me then, but I understand why he worried about my sleep.

建議: Отвечайте прямо, используйте правильные времена и более точные выражения (например, «I do spend too much time online»). Дайте причину и пример, исправив фразы вроде «sit under my phone» (лучше «stare at my phone»).

範例: Yes, I do think I spend too much time online because I often choose my phone instead of doing other tasks. For example, when I plan to start work, I sometimes just stare at my phone and waste time.

建議: Сформулируйте план ясно: используйте условное предложение («If I didn't have the internet, I would…») и уберите звуки колебания. Объясните причину выбора профессии кратко и корректно (например, «work in administration because I find it interesting and enjoyable»).

範例: If I didn’t have the internet, I would look for a job in administration because I find administrative work interesting and enjoyable.

× I started using the Internet two years ago because I went to English and I.

✓ I started using the Internet two years ago because I went to English classes.

The original sentence uses past tense appropriately for 'started' and 'went', but the phrase 'went to English and I' is incomplete and ungrammatical. Replace with 'went to English classes' to show attendance of lessons. Ensure noun 'classes' is included to complete the idea.

× Could not do my homework without Internet and Internet was important for me.

✓ I could not do my homework without the Internet, and the Internet was important to me.

In English, when referring to the Internet in general, the definite article 'the' is required: 'the Internet'. Also add subject 'I' before 'could' and use 'important to me' which is the correct collocation.

× I always use Internet because I should talk with my friends, I should do my homework.

✓ I always use the Internet because I need to talk with my friends and do my homework.

Use 'the Internet' with the definite article. Replace modal 'should' with 'need to' for routine necessity. Also combine clauses with 'and' for clarity.

× For example, when I do so summer readings, I should use Internet because my practice on the my phone.

✓ For example, when I do some summer reading, I need to use the Internet because I practice on my phone.

Several issues: 'so' should be 'some', 'readings' is better as uncountable 'reading' in this context, use 'need to' instead of 'should' for necessity, and fix 'my practice on the my phone' to 'I practice on my phone' and remove extra 'the'.

× I can remember when I was child, my father took my phone because I sit on the Internet too much at night and it was very boring time for me.

✓ I can remember when I was a child; my father took my phone because I sat on the Internet too much at night and that was a very boring time for me.

Add the article 'a' before 'child'. Match tense: 'was' -> 'sat' (past) to agree with recollection. Use 'that was' to refer back to the time. 'Sit on the Internet' is corrected to 'sat on the Internet' though 'spend time on the Internet' would be more natural.

× In my opinion, yes, because I spent my time on the Internet a lot.

✓ In my opinion, yes, because I spend a lot of time on the Internet.

When talking about a current habitual action, use present simple 'spend' not past 'spent'. Also move 'a lot' to natural position: 'spend a lot of time'.

× For example, when I want to do something, I sit under my phone and do nothing.

✓ For example, when I want to do something, I sit with my phone and do nothing.

The preposition 'under' is incorrect here; use 'with my phone' to indicate holding or using the phone. 'Sit with my phone' is natural for describing behavior.

× I would go to work and I would work, uh, to administration because it's really interesting job for me and I can enjoy with, with, with this job.

✓ I would go to work and I would work in administration because it's a really interesting job for me and I would enjoy this job.

Use correct preposition 'in administration'. Add article 'a' before 'really interesting job'. Use 'would enjoy' to match conditional 'I would' and remove the extra 'with'. 'Can enjoy with' is ungrammatical; use 'would enjoy' or 'could enjoy' depending on meaning.