网络— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答は直接的で意味は通じますが、より自然で簡潔にするために主題文をはっきりさせ、補足理由を短くまとめてください。例：時期（年齢）→具体的な状況（親がスマホを買った）という順にすると流れが良くなります。また「the Internet」は小文字の"internet"でも自然です。

範例: I started using the internet when I was in junior high because my parents bought me a smartphone, so I began exploring social media and videos.

建議: 頻度と理由を明確に述べられています。改善点はスペルと細かい表現（"everyday"は副詞的に使うなら"every day"）の正確さと、接続語で自然に繋げることです。短い追加例を入れるとより具体的になります（いつ、どの時間帯に）。

範例: I go online every day, mainly in the evenings, because I use social media like YouTube and Instagram to relax and catch up with friends.

建議: 回答は明確ですが、より自然な接続語（"so"や"therefore"）や短い追加情報（どんな本を読んだか、何を学んだか）を加えると良いです。また"Internet"の大文字は不要です。

範例: Yes. Last year my parents limited my screen time, so I couldn't use the internet and instead read a novel about history, which improved my concentration.

建議: 内容は伝わりますが文法と論理の流れが乱れています（"limited schooling time"は意味が不明瞭、繰り返しの"so"）。改善するには一つの主張（はい、多い）→理由（チャットや動画）→結果（親が制限した、現在の利用時間）という順で簡潔に述べ、正しい語順にしてください。

範例: Yes. I spend a lot of time chatting with friends and watching YouTube, so my parents set limits. Now I usually use my smartphone for about two hours a day.

建議: 仮定法の構造と理由が自然で良いです。より具体性を出すために練習の頻度や目標（例えば週に何回、習得したい技）を加えるとさらに良くなります。

範例: If I didn't have the internet, I would practice dancing more, probably for an hour every day, to learn new routines and relieve stress.

× I go online everyday because I use social media, especially YouTube and Instagram.

✓ I go online every day because I use social media, especially YouTube and Instagram.

'Every day' should be two words when used as an adverb meaning 'daily'. Writing it as 'everyday' (one word) makes it an adjective meaning 'ordinary', which is incorrect here. Use 'every day' to indicate frequency.

× I go online everyday because I use social media, especially YouTube and Instagram.

✓ I go online every day because I use social media, especially YouTube and Instagram.

The present simple is correct for habitual actions, but ensure correct adverb form 'every day'. No change to verb tense needed; this entry highlights tense appropriateness and adverb correction.

× I wasn't able to use the Internet last year because my parents limited screen time for my phone. As a result, I read a book.

✓ I wasn't able to use the Internet last year because my parents limited the screen time on my phone. As a result, I read a book.

The past simple 'wasn't able' and 'limited' are correct for past events. The error is prepositional/article use: use the definite article 'the' with 'screen time' when referring to a specific limit and 'on my phone' is the natural preposition. This correction keeps past tense consistency.

× Yes, I always chat with my friends and watch YouTube so my parents limited schooling time so I usually spend 2 hours to use smartphone.

✓ Yes, I always chat with my friends and watch YouTube, so my parents limited my screen time; I usually spend two hours using my smartphone.

Mixed tense and wording issues: 'always chat' and 'watch' (present simple) describe habitual present actions, while 'limited' is past simple — this is acceptable if parents previously limited it, but context implies an ongoing limit, so better to clarify. Replace 'schooling time' with 'screen time' and add possessive 'my'. Use 'spend two hours using my smartphone' rather than 'spend 2 hours to use smartphone'. Write numbers as words in formal speech. Also add punctuation to separate clauses.

× Yes, I always chat with my friends and watch YouTube so my parents limited schooling time so I usually spend 2 hours to use smartphone.

✓ Yes, I always chat with my friends and watch YouTube, so my parents limited my screen time; I usually spend two hours using my smartphone.

'Spend' is followed by a time expression plus a gerund: 'spend two hours using' is correct. 'Spend two hours to use' is incorrect structure. Use gerund after time expressions with 'spend'.

× When I was a junior high school student, my parents bought a smartphone for me, so I started using the Internet.

✓ When I was a junior high school student, my parents bought a smartphone for me, so I started using the Internet.

Overall sentence is grammatical. If improvement desired, use 'bought me a smartphone' as a more natural word order: 'my parents bought me a smartphone, so I started using the Internet.' The original prepositions are acceptable.

× If I didn't have the Internet, I would practice dancing more because I enjoy moving to music. It helps me relax and reduce stress.

✓ If I didn't have the Internet, I would practice dancing more because I enjoy moving to music. It helps me relax and reduces stress.

In the second sentence, parallel structure requires subject-verb agreement: 'It helps me relax and reduces stress' is slightly awkward because 'helps' already governs 'reduce' in the base form. Better to write 'It helps me relax and reduces my stress' or 'It helps me relax and reduces stress' — keep verbs parallel: 'helps me relax and reduces my stress' uses two verbs ('helps' and 'reduces') with consistent subjects. Alternatively, 'It helps me relax and reduces my stress' clarifies the object. The conditional sentence uses past simple and would + verb correctly.