网络— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答需要更准确的时态和更清晰的表达，开头应直接回答问题并给出具体时间段（例如“when I was in high school”），然后用一两句解释原因。避免重复和语法错误，句子不要超过5句。可以使用连词如“because”或“so”来连接句子。

範例: I started using the internet when I was in high school. At that time my family didn't allow me to have a smartphone, so I couldn't go online as a child. I felt it was a bit late compared with my classmates, but I quickly caught up by using school computers.

建議: 回答应先直接给出频率（例如“every day”或“several times a day”），然后用一到两句具体说明上网目的，注意避免重复词汇并完成未说完的句子。使用连接词如“because”或“to”使表达连贯。

範例: I go online every day, usually several times a day. I mainly check the news and social media because it helps me stay informed and keep in touch with my close friends.

建議: 先直接回答“yes”或“no”，然后说明具体时间和原因，使用正确的语法和时态（例如“when I was in senior high school”），并用连词解释父母的担心。避免双重否定和不完整的短语。

範例: Yes, I remember. When I was in senior high school my parents didn't allow me to use the internet at home because they were worried I would spend too much time playing games and it would affect my studies.

建議: 回答应直接回应问题（Yes/No），并用具体原因支持你的观点。注意语法（例如“I'm addicted to my phone”改为更自然表达），用一至两句说明举例或结果，不要太冗长并修正错词。

範例: Yes, I think I spend too much time online. I often use my phone to browse interesting content when I'm bored, and it has become a way to relieve stress, which makes it hard to limit my screen time.

建議: 回答应具体列出没有互联网时会做的活动，结构清晰：先概述，再给具体例子。避免破碎句和不相关或无法理解的短语，使用连词如“for example”并具体说明活动细节（时间、频率或感受）。

範例: If I didn't have the internet, I would spend more time on hobbies and relaxing. For example, on weekends I would practise the piano, read books, meet friends in person, and go for walks to relax.

× I start using the Internet when I was in high senior school because when I was child I can't use mobile phone and connect and touch the Internet.

✓ I started using the Internet when I was in senior high school because when I was a child I couldn't use a mobile phone or access the Internet.

句中应使用过去时描述过去发生的动作，动词“start”需改为过去式“started”；“when I was child”缺少不定冠词，应为“when I was a child”；表示过去不能做某事用过去式的情态动词“couldn't”而不是现在时“can't”；“connect and touch the Internet”用词不自然，改为“access the Internet”更地道。建议：回顾一般过去时用法和常见过去时情态动词（couldn't）的用法，注意冠词 a/an 的使用。

× I think it's late for me to use the Internet when I was in.

✓ I think I started using the Internet quite late.

原句结构不完整且时态混用（现在时“I think it's late”与过去时间状语“when I was in”不匹配），造成意义不清。将句子重构为简单明了的表达“I started using the Internet quite late.”更符合语境。建议：避免在一句话中混用不一致的时态，确保主句和时间状语配一致并表达完整。

× Now I use the mobile phone to search for search for the news on the Internet every day.

✓ Now I use my mobile phone to search for news on the Internet every day.

句子应使用一般现在时描述习惯性动作，动词形式本身正确，但出现重复“search for search for”；另外“the mobile phone”更常说“my mobile phone”。建议：检查重复词并使用适当的物主代词或不带冠词的名词短语。

× I can't leave it now because I can use it to connect with my best friends or.

✓ I can't live without it now because I can use it to connect with my best friends.

原句用词不当且句子未完成（以 or 结尾）。“can't leave it”应为习语“can't live without it”；去掉多余的“or”并完整表达与朋友保持联系的意思。建议：注意习惯用语的正确表达并避免句尾残缺。

× Of course, I remember a time was in Senior High School because my parents worried about me to play games using the mobile phone, so they always require me to not to use.

✓ Of course, I remember a time when I was in senior high school because my parents worried that I would play games on my mobile phone, so they always told me not to use it.

需要使用过去时态并调整从句结构：加上“when I was”引导时间状语从句；“worried about me to play games”结构不对，应为“worried that I would play games”或“worried about me playing games”；“require me to not to use”语法错误，改为“told me not to use it”。建议：练习过去时态的从句（that 从句、when 从句）以及动词搭配（worry that / worry about + -ing）。

× Of course, now I can't leave my mobile phone, I always spend too much time online.

✓ Of course, now I can't live without my mobile phone; I always spend too much time online.

类似前句，应使用一般现在时描述现在的习惯；“can't leave my mobile phone”仍应为“can't live without my mobile phone”；句子最好用分号或连接词连接两个独立分句。建议：掌握连接独立分句的标点或连词用法，并使用正确习语。

× I concentrated on it because there are so many interesting information from it and I feel boring and I want to release my pressure.

✓ I get absorbed in it because there is so much interesting information on it, and I feel bored so I want to relieve my stress.

“concentrated on it”时态和表达不自然，改为“I get absorbed in it”更贴切；“many information”错误，information 是不可数名词，应用“much information”或“a lot of information”；“interesting information from it”常说“information on it”；“I feel boring”应为“I feel bored”；“release my pressure”不自然，应为“relieve my stress”。建议：注意可数/不可数名词的搭配（many vs much），形容词/副词的区分（boring vs bored），以及固定搭配（relieve stress）。

× I think I will do so many things without Internet.

✓ I think I will do many things without the Internet.

将来时使用 generally correct，但“so many things”在正式表达中可简化为“many things”；缺少定冠词“the Internet”。建议：注意固定搭配“the Internet”的使用，并在正式语境中避免口语化的“so many”。

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✓ For example, on the weekend I would do activities such as playing the piano or practicing other instruments.

原句严重断裂且词序混乱：“when in at the weekend always playing the”无意义；“Internship plan instructions in instrument”更不是正确表达。重写为清晰句子：“On the weekend I would do activities such as playing the piano or practicing other instruments.”建议：写句子时先理清要表达的主体和动作，避免中途插入不相关短语；练习常用介词搭配（on the weekend）和动名词短语（playing the piano / practicing instruments）。