网络— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Ihre Antwort enthält viele Füllwörter und Wiederholungen, was die Natürlichkeit und Effektivität beeinträchtigt. Versuchen Sie, klarer und präziser zu antworten, indem Sie Füllwörter vermeiden und die Antwort auf maximal fünf Sätze beschränken.

範例: I started using the internet many years ago mainly to help with my school homework. It became a useful tool for researching and learning new topics for my lessons.

建議: Die Antwort ist unklar und enthält redundante Informationen. Verwenden Sie klare und zusammenhängende Sätze mit passenden Verbindungswörtern, um Ihre Antwort logisch und verständlich zu gestalten.

範例: I go online almost every day because I need to complete my homework. For example, I often find writing samples and read articles to improve my skills.

建議: Die Antwort ist unvollständig und unstrukturiert. Versuchen Sie, Ihre Gedanken klar zu ordnen, vollständige Sätze zu bilden und Ihre Meinung mit konkreten Gründen zu unterstützen.

範例: Yes, there was a time when my parents didn't allow me to use the internet because they were worried about the content I might see. I understand their concerns because young people can be exposed to inappropriate material online.

建議: Die Antwort ist verständlich, aber etwas langatmig und enthält Wiederholungen. Versuchen Sie, Ihre Antwort prägnanter zu gestalten und klare Verbindungswörter zu verwenden.

範例: No, I don't think I spend too much time online because I set limits for myself. I mainly use the internet to improve my English and plan to use it more for beneficial purposes in the future.

建議: Die Antwort ist etwas allgemein und könnte spezifischer sein. Versuchen Sie, konkrete Beispiele zu geben und Ihre Meinung klar zu strukturieren.

範例: Without the internet, life would be challenging for many people, including me. For instance, many jobs depend on social media and online communication, so losing internet access would affect work and daily life significantly.

× So it was many years ago when I started to use uh, Internet.

✓ So it was many years ago when I started to use the Internet.

The word 'Internet' is a proper noun and should be preceded by the definite article 'the'. This is an article error (ID 22).

× So it was unnecessary for my home assignments, homeworks, umm, from school.

✓ So it was necessary for my home assignments, homework, umm, from school.

The word 'unnecessary' is incorrect in this context; the intended meaning is 'necessary'. Also, 'homeworks' is incorrect as 'homework' is an uncountable noun and does not have a plural form. This is a singular and plural issue (ID 1) and incorrect use of adjectives (ID 13).

× And nowadays I'm gonna write some samples from the Internet and for example, from writing tasks or just from reading tasks, I just read the books, so.

✓ And nowadays I'm going to write some samples from the Internet, for example, from writing tasks or just from reading tasks; I just read books, so.

The phrase 'gonna' is informal and should be replaced with 'going to' for correctness. Also, 'the books' is incorrect here because it refers to books in general, so the article 'the' should be omitted. This is an article error (ID 22).

× So, yes, uh, when I used it, uh, for a long time, my parents decided not to give me my phone that I didn't use, umm, any kind of, uh, online images.

✓ So, yes, uh, when I used it for a long time, my parents decided not to give me my phone because I didn't use, umm, any kind of, uh, online images.

The phrase 'not to give me my phone that I didn't use' is incorrect and unclear. It should be rephrased to clarify the meaning. Also, 'online images' is unclear; possibly 'access to online content' is intended. This is a sentence structure error (ID 26) and incorrect use of prepositions (ID 11).

× So in my opinion, uh, young generation, uh, shouldn't use the Internet because when they're young and they start to use, uh, for a.

✓ So in my opinion, the young generation shouldn't use the Internet because when they're young and they start to use it, uh, for a.

The phrase 'young generation' needs the definite article 'the'. Also, the pronoun 'it' is missing after 'start to use'. This is an article error (ID 22) and incorrect use of pronouns (ID 12).

× So in my opinion, no, because nowadays I put a limit and I decided not to use it for a long time and I use it rarely and try to focus on my English.

✓ So in my opinion, no, because nowadays I set a limit and have decided not to use it for a long time; I use it rarely and try to focus on my English.

The verb 'put' is incorrect here; 'set a limit' is the correct phrase. Also, tense consistency requires 'have decided' instead of 'decided'. This is a past tense issue (ID 5) and modal verb usage (ID 4) in terms of expressing intention and decision.

× For example, maybe their job is related to the social medias, because nowadays there are so many people who work with the Internet and earn money.

✓ For example, maybe their job is related to social media, because nowadays there are so many people who work on the Internet and earn money.

The phrase 'related to the social medias' is incorrect; 'social media' is uncountable and does not take 'the' or plural 'medias'. Also, 'work with the Internet' should be 'work on the Internet'. This is an article error (ID 22) and incorrect use of prepositions (ID 11).