网络— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is relevant and provides some detail, but it can be improved by making the language more natural and correcting minor grammatical errors. For example, instead of "introduced me with educational games," say "introduced me to educational games." Also, try to use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

範例: I started using the Internet during my teenage years because my parents introduced me to educational games. These games were not only entertaining but also helped me learn new things effectively.

建議: Your answer has some grammatical mistakes and unclear phrases. To improve, try to use correct sentence structures and clearer vocabulary. For example, instead of "I always be ensure to keep my privacy which is in the danger on online method," say "I always make sure to protect my privacy because it can be at risk online." Also, use linking words to connect your ideas.

範例: I seldom go online because I prefer personal interactions. Moreover, I always make sure to protect my privacy since it can be at risk when using the internet.

建議: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. To improve, try to structure your response clearly with a topic sentence and supporting details, and avoid filler words like "Uh." For example, say "Yes, during a family vacation, my parents asked us to disconnect from the internet so that we could appreciate nature and spend quality time together."

範例: Yes, I remember a family vacation when my parents asked us to disconnect from the internet. They wanted us to fully appreciate the natural surroundings and spend more quality time with each other.

建議: Your answer is confusing and has grammatical errors. To improve, respond directly and clearly, using correct grammar and linking words. For example, say "No, I don't think I spend too much time online because I always maintain a balance between using the internet and pursuing my personal hobbies."

範例: No, I don't think I spend too much time online because I always maintain a balance between using the internet and engaging in my personal hobbies.

建議: Your answer is relevant and clear but can be improved by using more natural phrasing and linking words. For example, instead of "which not only enhance my confidence but also develop skills in me," say "which not only boost my confidence but also help me develop new skills."

範例: If there were no internet, I would focus on improving other skills such as cooking and painting, which not only boost my confidence but also help me develop new talents.

× My parents introduced me with educational games, which not only entertained me but also helped me in my learning.

✓ My parents introduced me to educational games, which not only entertained me but also helped me in my learning.

The verb 'introduce' is followed by the preposition 'to' when indicating the thing or person being introduced. Using 'with' here is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'introduced me to educational games.'

× I seldom go online, I give more preference to the personal interactions and I always be ensure to keep my privacy which is in the danger on online method.

✓ I seldom go online; I give more preference to personal interactions and always ensure to keep my privacy, which is in danger when using online methods.

The phrase 'give more preference to' is awkward; 'prefer' or 'give preference to' is better. Also, 'I always be ensure' is incorrect; it should be 'I always ensure.' The phrase 'which is in the danger on online method' is incorrect; it should be 'which is in danger when using online methods.' Proper prepositions and verb forms are necessary for clarity.

× Yes, I vividly remember our family vacation where my parents insisted us that we should disconnect the Internet to fully appreciate the environment and natural surroundings.

✓ Yes, I vividly remember our family vacation where my parents insisted that we should disconnect the Internet to fully appreciate the environment and natural surroundings.

The verb 'insist' is not followed by an object pronoun like 'us' but by a clause starting with 'that.' Therefore, 'insisted us that' is incorrect; it should be 'insisted that we.'

× Uh, and because they won't, we should be more engaged with each other and environment.

✓ Uh, and because they wanted us to, we should be more engaged with each other and the environment.

The phrase 'because they won't' is unclear and incorrect in this context. It likely intends to express 'because they wanted us to.' Also, 'engaged with each other and environment' needs the definite article 'the' before 'environment.'

× So on that.

✓ So, on that note.

The phrase 'So on that' is incomplete and unclear. The correct expression is 'So, on that note,' which is a common way to conclude or transition in speech.

× No, I don't consider myself that. I used a lot of Internet to be online.

✓ No, I don't consider myself like that. I use the Internet a lot to be online.

The phrase 'I don't consider myself that' is incomplete; it should be 'like that.' Also, 'I used a lot of Internet' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'I use the Internet a lot.' The verb tense should be present to match the question about current habits.

× I always maintain a balance between my between my personal hobbies.

✓ I always maintain a balance between my personal hobbies.

The phrase 'between my between my personal hobbies' contains a repeated phrase 'between my.' Removing the repetition corrects the sentence structure.

× When there is no Internet, I would like to enhance my other skills such as cooking and painting, which not only enhance my confidence but also develop skills in me.

✓ When there is no Internet, I would like to enhance my other skills such as cooking and painting, which not only enhance my confidence but also help develop my skills.

The phrase 'develop skills in me' is awkward and incorrect. The correct expression is 'help develop my skills.' This uses the correct preposition and possessive pronoun for clarity.