网络— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答时应避免冗长和重复，表达更自然流畅。可以简化句子结构，避免不必要的复杂表达。

範例: I started using the internet when I was about 5 or 6 years old. It helped me learn about the world beyond my country, which I still appreciate today.

建議: 回答中有些重复和不必要的赘述，建议简洁明了地表达频率，并用连接词使句子更连贯。

範例: I am online almost all the time, except during formal tests like IELTS or TOEFL when I disconnect to focus.

建議: 回答较好，但最后一句表达不够自然，建议用更地道的表达方式来说明会议的效果。

範例: Yes, about two years ago during a company meeting, everyone turned off their phones to stay focused and communicate effectively.

建議: 回答中表达有些复杂且不够简洁，建议用更简单直接的语言表达观点，并避免不必要的复杂词汇。

範例: Yes, I spend too much time online playing mobile games, which affects my IELTS preparation. I want to change but it's hard to stop.

建議: 回答中有语法和表达错误，建议使用更准确的词汇和句式，避免模糊和不自然的表达。

範例: Life would be difficult without the internet because I do most of my work online. Also, I use it for entertainment and socializing.

× This experience taught me a lot about the wider world beyond my national border and I still appreciated.

✓ This experience taught me a lot about the wider world beyond my national border and I still appreciate it.

句中“appreciated”使用了过去时，但句意表达的是现在仍然感激，应该用现在时“appreciate”。

× However, from time to time, for example during the IELTS or TOEFL test, I have to disconnect it from the Internet because you know, it's a formal context of test.

✓ However, from time to time, for example during the IELTS or TOEFL test, I have to disconnect from the Internet because you know, it's a formal context of test.

“disconnect it from the Internet”中的“it”指代不明且多余，应直接使用“disconnect from the Internet”。

× And in any other occasions I would also always choose to stay connected.

✓ And on any other occasions, I would also always choose to stay connected.

“in any other occasions”应改为“on any other occasions”，介词使用错误。

× That we stay focused on that day's agenda and communicated well.

✓ That way, we stayed focused on that day's agenda and communicated well.

句子缺少主语和谓语，且时态不一致，应补充“That way,”并将“stay”改为过去时“stayed”。

× Well, to be honest, yes, I think I'm currently spending too much time connecting to the Internet playing mobile games and this could have some kind of negative implications on my iOS preparation.

✓ Well, to be honest, yes, I think I'm currently spending too much time connected to the Internet playing mobile games and this could have some kind of negative implications on my iOS preparation.

“spending too much time connecting to the Internet”表达不自然，应改为“spending too much time connected to the Internet”。

× The main course is that these days I have to do almost all my work with the Internet connected to my laptop, so having no access would be a disaster.

✓ The main cause is that these days I have to do almost all my work with the Internet connected to my laptop, so having no access would be a disaster.

“main course”应为“main cause”，词汇使用错误。

× On the other hand, entertainment and social activities are also realized.

✓ On the other hand, entertainment and social activities are also available.

“are also realized”表达不当，应改为“are also available”表示“也能实现”。