网络— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答中语法错误较多，句子不完整，且缺少连贯性。建议注意时态一致性，句子结构完整，并且避免语法错误。

範例: I started using the Internet when I was about 10 years old.

建議: 回答较为自然，但有重复和冗余，且部分表达不够准确。建议简洁表达，避免重复，并使用更准确的词汇。

範例: I go online every day because I use my phone to browse websites and chat with friends.

建議: 回答中语法混乱，表达不清晰，且有重复。建议理清句子结构，使用正确的时态和单复数形式，并避免重复。

範例: Yes, when I was in high school, we were not allowed to bring smartphones or computers to school because the school thought they would affect our study grades.

建議: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清，且句子不连贯。建议使用正确的表达方式，避免重复，并使句子更流畅。

範例: Yes, I think I spend too much time online because with the rapid development of the Internet, people rely heavily on their phones. When I have free time, I can't help but browse the Internet.

建議: 回答表达基本清楚，但有语法错误和用词不当。建议注意句子结构，使用正确的词汇，并避免拼写错误。

範例: Without the Internet, I usually read books or do some exercises because they help me relax and calm down, and they are also good for my body.

× I think I start using the Internet when I was. 10 years old.

✓ I think I started using the Internet when I was 10 years old.

这里描述的是过去发生的动作，应该使用过去时态。原句中使用了现在时态'start'，应改为过去时'started'。

× to browse the website, to chat with other people.

✓ to browse websites, to chat with other people.

'website'是可数名词，表示多个网站时应使用复数形式'websites'。

× it's everyday.

✓ it's every day.

'everyday'是形容词，意为“日常的”，而这里应使用副词短语'every day'表示“每天”。

× when I was high school students, it is not allowed to board your smartphones or computers to school.

✓ when I was a high school student, it was not allowed to bring your smartphones or computers to school.

'students'复数与主语'I'不匹配，应改为单数'student'。

× it is not allowed to board your smartphones or computers to school.

✓ it was not allowed to bring your smartphones or computers to school.

描述过去的情况，应该使用过去时态。'is'应改为'was'。另外，'board'用法错误，应改为'bring'。

× to board your smartphones or computers to school.

✓ to bring your smartphones or computers to school.

'board'通常指登上交通工具，这里应使用'bring'表示携带。

× This is forbidden because schools think because be because schools thought it it will influence our study grades.

✓ This is forbidden because schools think it will influence our study grades.

句子结构混乱，重复使用'because'和'it'，应简化为'...because schools think it will influence our study grades.'。

× schools thought it it will influence our study grades.

✓ schools thought it would influence our study grades.

主句为过去时'thought'，从句应使用过去将来时'would'，而非现在时'will'。

× with the rapid development of Internet, people can't live without their phones.

✓ with the rapid development of the Internet, people can't live without their phones.

'Internet'前应加定冠词'the'。

× When I I said got the Cara time, I just can't control myself to browse the Internet.

✓ When I have free time, I just can't control myself from browsing the Internet.

原句结构混乱，'said got the Cara time'无意义，应改为'When I have free time'。'can't control myself to browse'应改为'can't control myself from browsing'。

× I just can't control myself to browse the Internet.

✓ I just can't control myself from browsing the Internet.

动词短语'control oneself'后应接'from doing'结构，而非'to do'。

× do some exercises without the Internet because it's a good way can make me feel relaxed and calm down and it's also good for my buddy.

✓ do some exercises without the Internet because it's a good way to make me feel relaxed and calm down and it's also good for my body.

'a good way can make'结构错误，应改为'a good way to make'。'buddy'应为'body'，表示身体。