网络— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答较为自然，但句子结构稍显简单，且部分表达不够地道，如“in the primary school”应为“in primary school”。建议使用更地道的表达，并适当丰富细节。

範例: I started using the internet when I was in primary school. Back then, I mainly used it on the computer to play games and chat with my friends on platforms like QQ.

建議: 回答内容重复且表达不够连贯，句子结构有些混乱。建议使用连接词使表达更流畅，并避免重复。

範例: I go online every day because it helps me stay in touch with my friends and family, especially since we live in different cities. This way, we can share our interests and keep our relationships strong.

建議: 回答较好，但时态使用不够准确，如“are”应为“was”。建议注意时态一致，并适当丰富细节。

範例: Yes, when I was in secondary school, my parents didn't allow me to use the internet because my main focus was on academic studies. I had to concentrate on homework and prepare for tests.

建議: 回答内容具体且表达清晰，但可以使用更多连接词使句子更连贯。

範例: Yes, I think I spend too much time online because I often find myself scrolling through various apps for hours, which negatively affects my concentration and productivity. As a result, it's hard for me to focus on my work.

建議: 表达不够自然，句子结构有误，如“It's bad for me to have a better break”不通顺。建议使用更自然的表达，并注意句子逻辑。

範例: If I didn't have the internet, I would probably sleep more because I often stay up late browsing online. Getting more rest would be better for my health.

× When I was in the primary school, I started using the Internet on the computer.

✓ When I was in primary school, I started using the Internet on the computer.

“primary school”前不需要冠词“the”，因为这里指的是一般的学校阶段，而不是特指某一所学校。去掉“the”更符合英语习惯。

× At that time, I used to access the online platform like QQ to play computer games or chat with my friends.

✓ At that time, I used to access online platforms like QQ to play computer games or chat with my friends.

“platform”应使用复数形式“platforms”，因为“like QQ”表示举例，暗示有多个类似的平台。

× I go online every day because it's convenient for us to use the online platform to keep in touch with my friends and my family members.

✓ I go online every day because it's convenient for us to use online platforms to keep in touch with my friends and my family members.

同样，“platform”应为复数“platforms”，表示多种在线平台。

× We can stay connected with each other, which can share our interests.

✓ We can stay connected with each other, which allows us to share our interests.

“which can share our interests”结构不完整，缺少主语，应改为“which allows us to share our interests”使句子完整通顺。

× because at that time, academic studies are my main task.

✓ because at that time, academic studies were my main task.

“at that time”表示过去，谓语动词应使用过去时“were”，而不是现在时“are”。

× If I didn't have Internet I would choose to sleep more because I always stay up late surfing online.

✓ If I didn't have the Internet, I would choose to sleep more because I always stay up late surfing online.

“Internet”前应加定冠词“the”，表示特指互联网。