网络— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 文法の誤りが多く、意味が伝わりにくいです。特に動詞の使い方と時制に注意し、文を簡潔にまとめる練習をしましょう。具体的な年齢や理由を明確に述べると良いです。

範例: I started using the internet when I was 30 years old. Since then, I have enjoyed using my smartphone because it is very useful for daily tasks.

建議: 答えが不完全で、文が途切れているため意味が不明瞭です。毎日オンラインにアクセスする頻度と、具体的に何をするのかを明確に述べる練習をしましょう。

範例: I go online every day and spend a lot of time searching for information and communicating with friends.

建議: 文法と語彙の誤りが多く、意味が伝わりにくいです。過去の経験を話す際は、時制と単語の使い方に注意し、具体的な状況を説明しましょう。

範例: Yes, I remember when I was a child, I wasn't allowed to use the internet, so I wanted to use a smartphone but couldn't.

建議: 理由を述べていますが、文が不完全で意味が曖昧です。理由を明確にし、文を完結にまとめる練習をしましょう。

範例: Yes, I think I spend too much time online. It is not good for me because there are many beautiful places in the world that I want to experience.

建議: 文法と意味の誤りが多く、答えが不明瞭です。仮定法を使い、インターネットがなかった場合の行動を明確に述べる練習をしましょう。

範例: If I didn't have the internet, I would probably play in the park with my friends more often.

× I started to using the Internet when I was. 30 years.

✓ I started using the Internet when I was 30 years old.

'Started' should be followed by the gerund form of the verb without 'to'. The phrase 'when I was 30 years' is incomplete; it should be 'when I was 30 years old'.

× I started to using the Internet when I was. 30 years.

✓ I started using the Internet when I was 30 years old.

The sentence has incorrect punctuation and incomplete time expression. The period after 'was' is incorrect and '30 years' should be '30 years old' to correctly express age.

× So I enjoy using the smartphone, it is useful for me.

✓ So I enjoy using the smartphone because it is useful for me.

The original sentence is a comma splice; two independent clauses are joined incorrectly with a comma. Using 'because' correctly connects the clauses.

× I go online every day, so I use a lot of time for example. Search and. Want.

✓ I go online every day, so I spend a lot of time, for example, searching and wanting.

'Use a lot of time' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'spend a lot of time'. Also, 'search and want' are incomplete and unclear; 'searching and wanting' as gerunds fit better but 'wanting' is still unclear in context.

× I go online every day, so I use a lot of time for example. Search and. Want.

✓ I go online every day, so I spend a lot of time, for example, searching and browsing.

The sentence fragments 'Search and. Want.' are incomplete and unclear. Replacing them with 'searching and browsing' makes the sentence coherent.

× Yes, I remember a time I wasn't allowed to use the Internet so I wanted to smartphone when I was. Child.

✓ Yes, I remember a time I wasn't allowed to use the Internet, so I wanted to use a smartphone when I was a child.

'Wanted to smartphone' is incorrect; 'wanted to use a smartphone' is correct. Also, 'when I was. Child.' is incomplete and should be 'when I was a child.'

× Yes, I remember a time I wasn't allowed to use the Internet so I wanted to smartphone when I was. Child.

✓ Yes, I remember a time I wasn't allowed to use the Internet, so I wanted to use a smartphone when I was a child.

The sentence lacks proper punctuation and article usage. Adding a comma before 'so' and 'a' before 'child' corrects the sentence.

× Yes, I think I spend too much time online. It is no good for me because there are a lot of good place in the world, so I have to experience a lot of.

✓ Yes, I think I spend too much time online. It is not good for me because there are a lot of good places in the world, so I have to experience a lot.

'A lot of good place' should be 'a lot of good places' to match plural form. 'It is no good' should be 'It is not good' for correct negation.

× It is no good for me because there are a lot of good place in the world, so I have to experience a lot of.

✓ It is not good for me because there are a lot of good places in the world, so I have to experience a lot.

'Place' should be plural 'places' to agree with 'a lot of'.

× Maybe I played the park with my friend, however I played the outside now too, so I love you.

✓ Maybe I would play in the park with my friend; however, I play outside now too, so I love it.

The sentence has tense inconsistency and incorrect prepositions. 'Played the park' should be 'play in the park'. 'Played the outside now too' is incorrect; 'play outside now too' is correct. 'I love you' is likely a mistake for 'I love it'. Also, punctuation and conjunction use need correction.