网络— Part 1 評分報告

建議: In English (Cambodia), try to use correct tense and clearer sentence structure. For example, say "I started using the Internet when I was young because my dad gave me a phone to help me study and adapt to modern society." Avoid awkward phrases like "since I was a little" and "can easier."

範例: I started using the Internet when I was young because my dad gave me a phone to help me study and adapt to modern society.

建議: In English (Cambodia), focus on clearer and more natural sentence structure. For example, say "I usually go online for 7 or 8 hours a day because I have many tasks and need to communicate with my friends and teachers, depending on the situation." Avoid unclear phrases like "for depends on some case that I have to."

範例: I usually go online for 7 or 8 hours a day because I have many tasks and need to communicate with my friends and teachers, depending on the situation.

建議: In English (Cambodia), try to make your answer more concise and grammatically correct. For example, say "I wasn't allowed to use the Internet during class because my school has a rule banning phone use to prevent distractions and negative effects on studying." Avoid awkward phrases like "bad affection" and repeated ideas.

範例: I wasn't allowed to use the Internet during class because my school has a rule banning phone use to prevent distractions and negative effects on studying.

建議: In English (Cambodia), improve clarity and grammar. For example, say "Yes, I think I spend too much time online because I use it to relax. I often play games or do other activities online in my free time." Avoid incorrect tense and unclear phrases like "did spend a lot of time on online."

範例: Yes, I think I spend too much time online because I use it to relax. I often play games or do other activities online in my free time.

建議: In English (Cambodia), try to express your ideas more clearly and simply. For example, say "Without the Internet, I would focus on important daily activities like listening to music or doing chores." Avoid confusing phrases like "If we raise our body, Internet without."

範例: Without the Internet, I would focus on important daily activities like listening to music or doing chores.

× I started using the Internet since I was a little because my dad offered me a phone so that I can easier to study or to adapt to our real time society.

✓ I have been using the Internet since I was little because my dad offered me a phone so that I could study more easily and adapt to our real-time society.

The phrase 'started using the Internet since' is incorrect because 'since' requires the present perfect tense to indicate an action that began in the past and continues to the present. Also, 'can easier' is incorrect; it should be 'could study more easily' to express ability in the past. 'A little' should be 'little' to mean 'when I was young.' 'Real time society' should be hyphenated as 'real-time society.' Suggestions: Use present perfect with 'since', use 'could' for past ability, and use correct adjective forms.

× I usually go online 7 or 8 hours a day because I have a lot of things to do or to communicate with other people, especially my friends and my teacher for depends on some case that I have to.

✓ I usually go online for 7 or 8 hours a day because I have a lot of things to do or to communicate with other people, especially my friends and my teacher, depending on the situation.

The phrase 'go online 7 or 8 hours a day' needs the preposition 'for' to indicate duration. 'For depends on some case that I have to' is ungrammatical; it should be 'depending on the situation' to express conditional action. Also, 'my teacher for depends' is incorrect word order. Suggestions: Use 'for' to indicate duration and rephrase unclear expressions for clarity.

× Take a look back to the time that I'm not allowed to use Internet is when I'm in a class because my school there's a rule that said it's not allowed for students to use phone during the class which is can be a bad affection for student studying and also it's also get a negative impact that it can ruin.

✓ Looking back, the time when I was not allowed to use the Internet was during class because my school has a rule that students are not allowed to use phones during class, as it can negatively affect students' studying and have a bad impact.

The original sentence is a run-on with incorrect tense and structure. 'Take a look back to the time that I'm not allowed' mixes present and past tenses incorrectly. 'My school there's a rule that said' is ungrammatical; it should be 'my school has a rule that says.' 'It's can be a bad affection' is incorrect; 'it can negatively affect' is correct. 'It's also get a negative impact that it can ruin' is ungrammatical and redundant. Suggestions: Use consistent past tense, correct subject-verb agreement, and simplify sentence structure.

× Personally I think so because I did spend a lot of time on online because sometimes I just need to relax.

✓ Personally, I think so because I do spend a lot of time online since sometimes I just need to relax.

'I did spend' is past tense but the context is present habitual action, so 'I do spend' is correct. 'On online' is incorrect; 'online' does not need a preposition. 'Because' is repeated unnecessarily. Suggestions: Use present tense for habitual actions and correct preposition usage.

× Also that's why I have to spend my own time using online in many different way like playing game or stuff like that.

✓ Also, that's why I have to spend my own time online in many different ways, like playing games or stuff like that.

'Using online' is incorrect; 'online' is an adverb here and does not need 'using.' 'In many different way' should be 'in many different ways' for plural agreement. 'Playing game' should be 'playing games.' Suggestions: Remove unnecessary prepositions and use plural forms where appropriate.

× If we raise our body, Internet without, I would rather do something that focus on my own thing without Internet or just do my own thing that it is really important for my daily life, like listen to music or do our chores, stuff like that.

✓ If I were without the Internet, I would rather do something that focuses on my own interests or just do things that are really important for my daily life, like listening to music or doing chores, stuff like that.

The original sentence is confusing and ungrammatical. 'If we raise our body, Internet without' is unclear and incorrect. The conditional sentence should start with 'If I were without the Internet.' 'Do something that focus' needs subject-verb agreement: 'focuses.' 'Do our chores' should be 'doing chores' to match parallel structure with 'listening to music.' Suggestions: Use correct conditional form, subject-verb agreement, and parallel verb forms.