网络— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 你的回答中时态使用不准确，应该使用过去时态；句子结构不够清晰，表达不够自然。建议使用简单明了的句子，注意时态一致。

範例: I started using the Internet when I was in junior high school because I had my own mobile phone at that time.

建議: 回答中存在语法错误和句子不完整的问题，缺少连接词使得表达不连贯。建议使用完整句子并用连接词使内容更流畅。

範例: I go online several times a day because I need to keep in touch with my friends and family, and also to find important information on the Internet.

建議: 语法错误较多，表达不自然，时态使用不当。建议使用正确的时态和句型，表达更清晰。

範例: My parents do not allow me to use the Internet before I go to bed. That is the only time I am not allowed to go online.

建議: 回答内容较好，但句子结构稍显复杂且不够流畅。建议简化句子结构，使用连接词使表达更自然。

範例: Yes, I think I spend too much time online. For example, when I want to study and search for important information, I often get distracted by games or interesting videos.

建議: 句子不完整且语法错误，表达不够自然。建议使用完整句子并注意语法，表达更清晰。

範例: If I didn't have the Internet, I would find information by reading books or asking my teachers. This is a good way for me to study without the Internet.

× In my junior high school I start using the Internet because all the time I have my own mobile phone.

✓ In my junior high school, I started using the Internet because at that time I had my own mobile phone.

句子中描述过去的动作，动词时态应使用过去时。原句中使用了现在时“start”，应改为过去时“started”。同时，“all the time”用法不当，应改为“at that time”表示当时。

× I got online several times a day because I should use it.

✓ I went online several times a day because I had to use it.

描述过去的动作，动词应使用过去时。原句中“got”应改为“went”，“should”表示建议，描述过去的义务应使用“had to”。

× Check with my friends and family.

✓ I checked with my friends and family.

该句缺少主语和谓语，导致句子结构不完整。应补充主语“I”和谓语“checked”，使句子完整。

× Also I can find some important information on the Internet.

✓ Also, I could find some important information on the Internet.

描述过去习惯或动作时，动词应使用过去时态。原句中“can”应改为“could”。

× Before I go to bed, my parents will prohibit I use mobile phone.

✓ Before I go to bed, my parents prohibit me from using the mobile phone.

此处描述习惯性动作，不能用将来时“will prohibit”，应使用一般现在时“prohibit”。另外，“prohibit”后应接介词短语“me from using”，而非“I use”。

× Before I go to bed, my parents will prohibit I use mobile phone.

✓ Before I go to bed, my parents prohibit me from using the mobile phone.

“prohibit”后面应使用宾格代词“me”，并且动词“use”应改为动名词“using”。

× Only time I will be not allowed to use the Internet.

✓ That is the only time I am not allowed to use the Internet.

原句缺少主语和谓语，语序不正确。应调整为完整句子，表达清晰。

× Yes, I think when I want to concentrate on my study, for example searching important information on the Internet, I will lose myself in the game or some interesting videos.

✓ Yes, I think when I want to concentrate on my studies, for example, searching for important information on the Internet, I lose myself in games or some interesting videos.

描述习惯性动作时应使用一般现在时，“will lose”改为“lose”。“study”应用复数“studies”。“searching”前加介词“for”。

× for example searching important information on the Internet

✓ for example, searching for important information on the Internet

动词“search”后应接介词“for”，表示“搜索某物”。

× I will lose myself in the game or some interesting videos.

✓ I lose myself in games or some interesting videos.

“game”应使用复数形式“games”，表示泛指多种游戏。

× Is a good way for me to study if without the Internet.

✓ It is a good way for me to study without the Internet.

句子缺少主语，应加“It is”。“if without the Internet”结构不正确，应改为“without the Internet”。