网络— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答は意味が伝わりますが、文法の誤りや冗長な表現があり、より自然で明確な表現に改善が必要です。例えば、時制の一致や単語の選択に注意し、簡潔に答えることが重要です。

範例: I started using the internet when I was in elementary school. At that time, I learned to use computers because we had to practice English spelling using computer programs.

建議: 回答は内容が伝わりますが、文法の誤りや不自然な表現が見られます。接続詞を使って文をつなげ、より論理的で自然な流れにすることが望ましいです。

範例: I usually go online twice a week because it is very useful for finding information. However, I think spending too much time online can be dangerous.

建議: 文法の誤りや繰り返しがあり、意味が少し分かりにくいです。時制の一致や明確な表現を心がけ、理由をはっきり述べると良いでしょう。

範例: Yes, I remember when I was a high school student, I was only allowed to use the internet until 9:00 PM because I needed to focus on studying. If I used the internet longer, I couldn't concentrate on my studies.

建議: 内容は伝わりますが、文法や語順の誤りが多く、意味が不明瞭な部分があります。より簡潔で正確な表現を使い、具体的な理由を述べると良いです。

範例: I agree that I spend too much time online because I often check news and social media like Instagram and TikTok. This can be harmful because it wastes a lot of my time.

建議: 文法の誤りが多く、意味が伝わりにくいです。仮定法や適切な動詞の使い方を学び、より自然で明確な回答を心がけましょう。

範例: Without the internet, I would prefer to talk to my friends face to face because I enjoy talking to people. However, nowadays we usually use messaging apps to communicate.

× Probably when I I was elementary high school, at that time I learned using computer because we have to learn regarding English spell, that's why we have to learn computer.

✓ Probably when I was in elementary school, at that time I learned to use the computer because we had to learn English spelling, that's why we had to learn computer.

The sentence has redundancy ('I I'), missing preposition ('in elementary school'), incorrect verb form ('learned using computer' should be 'learned to use the computer'), and awkward phrasing ('learn regarding English spell' should be 'learn English spelling'). Also, tense consistency is needed ('have to' changed to 'had to').

× Normally I'm using online twice a week because online is very useful for me, so we can check a lot of information.

✓ Normally I go online twice a week because the internet is very useful for me, so I can check a lot of information.

The phrase 'I'm using online' is incorrect; the present simple tense 'I go online' is appropriate for habitual actions. Also, 'online' as a noun is incorrect; 'the internet' or 'online' as an adverb is better. 'We can' changed to 'I can' to match the subject.

× However, online is a bit dangerous because we have to spend a lot of time.

✓ However, being online is a bit dangerous because we can spend a lot of time on it.

The sentence lacks clarity; 'online' should be used as 'being online' or 'using the internet'. Also, 'have to spend' implies obligation, but the intended meaning is likely 'can spend' (possibility). Added 'on it' for clarity.

× Yes, I remember when I was high school student, normally I can I could use Internet until 9:00 PM, since at that time I have to study everything.

✓ Yes, I remember when I was a high school student, normally I could use the internet until 9:00 PM, since at that time I had to study everything.

Missing article 'a' before 'high school student'. 'Can I could' is redundant; 'could' is correct for past ability. 'Internet' needs 'the'. 'Have to' should be past tense 'had to' for consistency.

× If I can use Internet, definitely I couldn't focus on study.

✓ If I could use the internet, I definitely couldn't focus on studying.

Conditional sentence requires past tense 'could' for hypothetical past. 'Internet' needs 'the'. 'Focus on study' should be 'focus on studying' (gerund form).

× I totally agree with this statement because nowadays we can check online news by Internet, especially Instagram and Tiktok.

✓ I totally agree with this statement because nowadays we can check online news on the internet, especially Instagram and TikTok.

'By Internet' is incorrect preposition; 'on the internet' is correct. Capitalization of 'TikTok' corrected.

× At that time we spent a lot of time I think a bit harmful for me.

✓ At that time, we spent a lot of time online, which I think was a bit harmful for me.

Missing comma after 'time'. Added 'online' for clarity. 'I think a bit harmful' is awkward; rephrased to 'which I think was a bit harmful'. Past tense 'was' used for consistency.

× Absolutely, I won't enjoy to talk to my friend by face to face since I like talk to someone.

✓ Absolutely, I wouldn't enjoy talking to my friends face to face since I like talking to someone.

'Won't enjoy to talk' is incorrect; 'wouldn't enjoy talking' is correct modal + gerund form. 'My friend' should be plural 'my friends' for general statement. 'By face to face' is incorrect; 'face to face' alone is correct. 'I like talk' should be 'I like talking'.

× However, nowadays we have a Internet so we normally use just message app.

✓ However, nowadays we have the internet, so we normally just use messaging apps.

'A Internet' is incorrect; 'the internet' is correct. 'Message app' should be plural 'messaging apps' or 'a messaging app'. Word order corrected to 'normally just use'.