网络— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，建议注意时态一致性和句子结构，避免重复表达。可以简洁明了地说明开始使用互联网的时间和原因。

範例: I started using the internet when I was 12 because I got my own iPad. I usually use it to watch YouTube and Netflix.

建議: 回答中有语法错误和表达不流畅，建议使用连贯的句子并注意动词形式。可以直接回答频率并补充具体原因。

範例: I go online every day because I need to take notes on my iPad for school. Besides that, I watch YouTube and Netflix to relax.

建議: 回答不够清晰，语法错误较多，建议理清思路，使用正确的时态和句子结构，明确描述没有网络的经历。

範例: Yes, once I went to a school camp where there was no internet. During that time, I couldn't use any devices like my iPad or iPhone.

建議: 回答表达混乱，语法和词汇使用不当，建议简洁明了地表达观点，使用恰当的词汇和句型。

範例: Yes, I think I spend too much time online because the internet offers many interesting things like chatting with friends and watching movies.

建議: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不清晰，建议理清句子结构，使用正确的时态和词汇，明确描述没有互联网时的活动。

範例: If I didn't have the internet, I would spend more time hanging out with my friends and family, doing outdoor activities or watching TV together.

× When I was 12 years old I start to use Internet because I having my own iPad and my own.

✓ When I was 12 years old I started to use the Internet because I had my own iPad and my own.

句子中描述过去的动作，动词应使用过去时态。'start'应改为'started'，'having'应改为'had'。

× When I was 12 years old I start to use Internet because I having my own iPad and my own.

✓ When I was 12 years old I started to use the Internet because I had my own iPad and my own.

Internet前应加定冠词'the'，因为Internet是特指的名词。

× So usually I use the Internet for watching YouTube and Netflix.

✓ So usually I use the Internet to watch YouTube and Netflix.

动词后接动词时，'for watching'应改为'to watch'，符合习惯用法。

× So I just start to use the Internet when I was 12.

✓ So I just started to use the Internet when I was 12.

描述过去动作，'start'应改为过去式'started'。

× One time I need to follow my school teachers to join a camp fight because there are no Internet, so I have no choice but to stop using any technology devices like the iPad and iPhone so I can use it.

✓ One time I had to follow my school teachers to join a camp fight because there was no Internet, so I had no choice but to stop using any technological devices like the iPad and iPhone until I could use them again.

'need to'表示现在或将来义务，过去应使用'had to'。'are no Internet'应为'was no Internet'，因为是过去。'technology devices'应为'technological devices'。句子结构需调整使表达更清晰。

× One time I need to follow my school teachers to join a camp fight because there are no Internet, so I have no choice but to stop using any technology devices like the iPad and iPhone so I can use it.

✓ One time I had to follow my school teachers to join a camp fight because there was no Internet, so I had no choice but to stop using any technological devices like the iPad and iPhone until I could use them again.

'there are no Internet'中Internet是不可数名词，且描述过去，应使用'there was no Internet'。

× Definitely, I believe that every citizen would ourselves spend too much time on Internet because there are different things and very special things that in the Internet that we can use it to communicate with people or watching movies or TV.

✓ Definitely, I believe that every citizen would spend too much time on the Internet because there are different and very special things on the Internet that we can use to communicate with people or watch movies or TV.

'would ourselves spend'中'ourselves'使用错误，应去掉。'on Internet'应为'on the Internet'。'that in the Internet'结构错误，应为'things on the Internet'。'use it to communicate'中'it'多余，应去掉。

× Definitely, I believe that every citizen would ourselves spend too much time on Internet because there are different things and very special things that in the Internet that we can use it to communicate with people or watching movies or TV.

✓ Definitely, I believe that every citizen would spend too much time on the Internet because there are different and very special things on the Internet that we can use to communicate with people or watch movies or TV.

Internet前应加定冠词'the'，因为是特指的名词。

× ...that we can use it to communicate with people or watching movies or TV.

✓ ...that we can use to communicate with people or watch movies or TV.

动词并列时应保持形式一致，'watching'应改为动词原形'watch'。

× Every day and every moment because as a student I need to drop notes by using my iPad and usually I use I watching YouTube on Netflix as a relaxation activities.

✓ Every day and every moment because as a student I need to take notes by using my iPad and usually I watch YouTube and Netflix as relaxation activities.

'drop notes'应为'take notes'。'I use I watching'结构错误，应为'I watch'。'on Netflix'应为'and Netflix'。'a relaxation activities'中'a'与复数不符，应去掉。

× Every day and every moment because as a student I need to drop notes by using my iPad and usually I use I watching YouTube on Netflix as a relaxation activities.

✓ Every day and every moment because as a student I need to take notes by using my iPad and usually I watch YouTube and Netflix as relaxation activities.

'a relaxation activities'中'activities'为复数，前面不应加不定冠词'a'。

× Every day and every moment because as a student I need to drop notes by using my iPad and usually I use I watching YouTube on Netflix as a relaxation activities.

✓ Every day and every moment because as a student I need to take notes by using my iPad and usually I watch YouTube and Netflix as relaxation activities.

'I use I watching'结构错误，'watching'应改为动词原形'watch'。

× So I would say it's every moment unless I'm sleeping.

✓ So I would say it's every moment unless I'm sleeping.

此句时态正确，无需修改。

× What would you do without the internet?

✓ What would you do without the Internet?

Internet作为专有名词，首字母应大写。

× I never thought that would my life be if I without Internet I think I will hang out with my friend outside because without Internet I can watching TV's or movies at home.

✓ I never thought about what my life would be like without the Internet. I think I would hang out with my friends outside because without the Internet I can't watch TV or movies at home.

Internet前应加定冠词'the'。'watching'应改为动词原形'watch'。'TV's'错误，应为'TV'。句子结构需调整使表达更通顺。

× I never thought that would my life be if I without Internet I think I will hang out with my friend outside because without Internet I can watching TV's or movies at home.

✓ I never thought about what my life would be like without the Internet. I think I would hang out with my friends outside because without the Internet I can't watch TV or movies at home.

'my friend'应为复数形式'friends'，因为通常指多个朋友。

× So I would having a leisure activities with my family members or friends to help me to skill time.

✓ So I would have leisure activities with my family members or friends to help me kill time.

'would having'应改为'would have'，动词后接动词原形。'skill time'应为'kill time'，表达消磨时间。

× So I would having a leisure activities with my family members or friends to help me to skill time.

✓ So I would have leisure activities with my family members or friends to help me kill time.

'a leisure activities'中'activities'为复数，前面不应加不定冠词'a'。