网络— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is unclear and contains many hesitations and grammatical errors. Try to give a direct response with clear sentence structure and avoid filler words. For example, start with a clear topic sentence and then provide specific details about when and where you first used the internet.

範例: I started using the internet when I was in 10th grade. The first time I used it was at my school because we didn't have internet at home then, as it was too expensive for my family.

建議: Your answer provides relevant information but is somewhat disorganized and contains grammatical mistakes. Use linking words to connect ideas and improve clarity. Also, try to use more precise vocabulary and avoid redundancy.

範例: Currently, I go online every day to check my emails and use social media. I also use WhatsApp video calls to stay in touch with my family and share photos and videos regularly.

建議: Your answer addresses the question but has grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to form complete sentences and use linking words to make your answer more coherent and natural.

範例: Yes, I remember once when I was in the hospital, using the internet and mobile phones was not allowed. At that time, I couldn't update my family about my condition online.

建議: Your answer is unclear and lacks structure. Try to directly answer the question with a clear opinion and support it with specific reasons or examples. Avoid fragmented sentences and improve grammar.

範例: Yes, I think I spend too much time online nowadays. I use my mobile phone daily to check emails, play games, and browse the internet, which takes up a lot of my time.

建議: Your answer is relevant and shows personal experience, but it contains some grammatical errors and unclear phrases. Try to use clearer sentence structures and correct word choices to express your ideas more effectively.

範例: When I feel bored of using the internet and social media, I like to take a break and do drawing. It's my favourite hobby because it helps me relax and express my thoughts without distractions.

× I started to you and done it in, uh, my 10th class.

✓ I started using it in my 10th class.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'started to you and done it' which is grammatically incorrect. The correct past tense form is 'started using it'. The verb 'start' is followed by the gerund form 'using' to indicate the beginning of an action in the past.

× Uh, uh, I first time use drink, uh, in my school and, uh, in my house there was no available Internet because that time it was the too expensive for the everyone.

✓ The first time I used the internet was at my school, and at my house there was no available internet because at that time it was too expensive for everyone.

The sentence has multiple issues: 'first time use drink' is incorrect; it should be 'first time I used the internet'. Also, 'the too expensive for the everyone' is incorrect; it should be 'too expensive for everyone'. The past tense 'used' is needed to match the time frame, and articles and prepositions are corrected for proper usage.

× If you're talking about currently stations, I usually go online using the social media and to check my emails regular basis and also use my WhatsApp video call and article to connect my family members and also share some videos photos on the daily basis.

✓ If you're talking about current times, I usually go online using social media to check my emails regularly, use WhatsApp video calls to connect with my family members, and also share some videos and photos on a daily basis.

The sentence has tense and word choice errors: 'currently stations' should be 'current times'; 'regular basis' needs the adverb 'regularly'; 'WhatsApp video call and article' is incorrect, it should be 'WhatsApp video calls'; 'on the daily basis' should be 'on a daily basis'. The present tense is used correctly but needs proper adverb and noun forms.

× Yes, I really remember one time in the hospital there was not allowed anyone to use the Internet and also mobile phones.

✓ Yes, I really remember one time in the hospital when no one was allowed to use the internet or mobile phones.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'there was not allowed anyone'. The correct structure is 'no one was allowed'. Also, 'Internet' should be lowercase unless at the beginning of a sentence, and 'or' is more appropriate than 'and' in this context.

× And the first time I am not, I was not used any Internet to update about my situation to my family members.

✓ And the first time, I did not use the internet to update my family members about my situation.

The sentence incorrectly mixes tenses and verb forms: 'I am not' is incorrect here, and 'was not used' is passive and incorrect. The correct past tense active form is 'I did not use'. Also, 'any Internet' is unnecessary; 'the internet' is sufficient.

× Definitely today is my life mostly lie on the mobile phone and I use a daily basis many times e-mail.

✓ Definitely, today my life mostly relies on the mobile phone, and I use email many times on a daily basis.

The verb 'lie' is incorrect here; it should be 'relies' to indicate dependence. 'Use a daily basis many times e-mail' is ungrammatical; it should be 'use email many times on a daily basis'. Present tense is appropriate here.

× To use the Internet to play my items also.

✓ I also use the internet to play my games.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. 'Play my items' is incorrect; likely intended 'play my games'. The sentence needs a subject and proper verb form in present tense.

× When I am uh feel boring from my mobile, especially from using the Internet and social media, I need to take some rest that time.

✓ When I feel bored with my mobile, especially from using the internet and social media, I need to take some rest at that time.

The phrase 'I am uh feel boring' is incorrect; it should be 'I feel bored'. 'That time' should be 'at that time'. Present tense is used to describe habitual actions.

× I usually do drying and it's the my favorite hobby.

✓ I usually do drawing, and it's my favorite hobby.

'Do drying' is incorrect; the correct gerund is 'drawing'. Also, 'the my' is redundant; only 'my' is needed. The verb 'do' is correctly followed by a gerund.

× It helps me to feel relaxed and I can draw my thoughts in any way without any distraction.

✓ It helps me feel relaxed, and I can express my thoughts in any way without any distractions.

The phrase 'draw my thoughts' is unusual; 'express my thoughts' is more natural. Also, 'distraction' should be plural 'distractions' to match 'any'. The sentence structure is improved for clarity.