网络— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Câu trả lời của bạn cần sử dụng thì đúng hơn và cấu trúc câu rõ ràng hơn. Bạn nên tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như 'I start' nên là 'I started'. Ngoài ra, hãy sử dụng từ vựng chính xác hơn như 'surf the internet' thay vì 'surface'. Câu trả lời nên ngắn gọn, tự nhiên và có liên kết logic.

範例: I started using the internet when I was in high school. At that time, I didn't have a smartphone, so I had to go to an internet cafe to use a computer. I usually used the internet to surf the web and find information.

建議: Bạn cần cải thiện ngữ pháp và từ vựng để câu trả lời rõ ràng và dễ hiểu hơn. Câu trả lời nên có cấu trúc rõ ràng, tránh lỗi như 'to unlike' và 'fighting material'. Hãy sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và cung cấp ví dụ cụ thể hơn.

範例: Nowadays, the internet is very popular, so I usually use my phone or laptop to go online. For example, I often search for teaching materials for my church activities.

建議: Bạn nên sử dụng thì quá khứ đúng và cấu trúc câu rõ ràng hơn. Câu trả lời cần tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và diễn đạt tự nhiên hơn. Hãy sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc và cung cấp lý do cụ thể hơn.

範例: Actually, there was a long period in the past when I didn't use my smartphone because I used it too much before and didn't have time for other activities. I thought it was a waste of time, so I decided not to use it for a while.

建議: Bạn cần cải thiện ngữ pháp và từ vựng để câu trả lời rõ ràng và tự nhiên hơn. Tránh lỗi như 'spend too much time to social media up' và 'face Facebook'. Hãy sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc và cung cấp ví dụ cụ thể hơn.

範例: Yes, I think I spend too much time on social media. For example, I use Facebook and TikTok every day, but I don't gain any meaningful information from them.

建議: Bạn nên sử dụng thì và cấu trúc câu chính xác hơn. Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như 'reading book' nên là 'reading books' và 'waste of time to use smartphone'. Hãy cung cấp thêm chi tiết để câu trả lời phong phú hơn.

範例: If I didn't have the internet, I would probably read books instead. I think reading is a good hobby. Actually, I have bought many books, but I haven't read them because I waste too much time on my smartphone.

× I start using Internet from I was a student in high school.

✓ I started using the Internet when I was a student in high school.

The verb 'start' should be in the past tense 'started' to match the past time reference 'when I was a student in high school'. Also, 'Internet' needs the definite article 'the' before it.

× I start using Internet from I was a student in high school.

✓ I started using the Internet when I was a student in high school.

The noun 'Internet' requires the definite article 'the' because it is a unique entity.

× I start using Internet from I was a student in high school.

✓ I started using the Internet when I was a student in high school.

The preposition 'from' is incorrect here; 'when' is the correct word to indicate the time something started.

× At that time I don't have on smartphones so I have to go to Internet store and use computer in there.

✓ At that time I didn't have a smartphone so I had to go to an Internet store and use a computer there.

'Smartphones' should be singular 'a smartphone' because it refers to possession at that time. 'Internet store' and 'computer' need the indefinite article 'an' and 'a' respectively. 'Don't have on' is incorrect; it should be 'didn't have'. 'In there' should be 'there'.

× At that time I don't have on smartphones so I have to go to Internet store and use computer in there.

✓ At that time I didn't have a smartphone so I had to go to an Internet store and use a computer there.

The verbs 'don't have' and 'have to' should be in the past tense 'didn't have' and 'had to' to match the past time context.

× I always use Internet to surface.

✓ I always use the Internet to surf.

'Surface' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'surf' when talking about browsing the Internet. Also, 'Internet' needs the definite article 'the'.

× I always use Internet to surface.

✓ I always use the Internet to surf.

'Internet' requires the definite article 'the'.

× Nowadays Internet is so popular so I usually use my phone or laptop to unlike I use it in many situation in my life such as fighting material for teaching churches.

✓ Nowadays the Internet is so popular that I usually use my phone or laptop. I use it in many situations in my life, such as finding material for teaching churches.

'Unlike' is incorrect here; likely intended 'like' or 'that'. 'Situation' should be plural 'situations'. 'Fighting' is incorrect; the correct word is 'finding'. 'Internet' needs the definite article 'the'.

× Nowadays Internet is so popular so I usually use my phone or laptop to unlike I use it in many situation in my life such as fighting material for teaching churches.

✓ Nowadays the Internet is so popular that I usually use my phone or laptop. I use it in many situations in my life, such as finding material for teaching churches.

'Internet' requires the definite article 'the'.

× Nowadays Internet is so popular so I usually use my phone or laptop to unlike I use it in many situation in my life such as fighting material for teaching churches.

✓ Nowadays the Internet is so popular that I usually use my phone or laptop. I use it in many situations in my life, such as finding material for teaching churches.

'Situation' should be plural 'situations' because it refers to multiple instances.

× Actually, in the past there is a long time I didn't talk my smartphone because before that time I used it too much and I don't have time to do anything else.

✓ Actually, in the past there was a long time when I didn't use my smartphone because before that time I used it too much and I didn't have time to do anything else.

'There is' should be 'there was' to match past tense. 'Didn't talk my smartphone' is incorrect; it should be 'didn't use my smartphone'. 'Don't have' should be 'didn't have' to maintain past tense consistency.

× Actually, in the past there is a long time I didn't talk my smartphone because before that time I used it too much and I don't have time to do anything else.

✓ Actually, in the past there was a long time when I didn't use my smartphone because before that time I used it too much and I didn't have time to do anything else.

'There is' is present tense; for past events, 'there was' is correct.

× Actually, in the past there is a long time I didn't talk my smartphone because before that time I used it too much and I don't have time to do anything else.

✓ Actually, in the past there was a long time when I didn't use my smartphone because before that time I used it too much and I didn't have time to do anything else.

'Talk my smartphone' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'use' for devices.

× I think it's a waste of time, so I wasn't allowed myself to use it.

✓ I think it's a waste of time, so I didn't allow myself to use it.

'Wasn't allowed myself' is incorrect; the correct form is 'didn't allow myself' because 'allow' is an active verb here and the subject is 'I'.

× I think it's a waste of time, so I wasn't allowed myself to use it.

✓ I think it's a waste of time, so I didn't allow myself to use it.

The past tense of 'allow' in active voice is 'didn't allow'.

× Yes I think so, I spend too much time to social media up.

✓ Yes, I think so. I spend too much time on social media.

'Spend' is present tense and correct here. 'To social media up' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'on' and 'up' is unnecessary.

× Yes I think so, I spend too much time to social media up.

✓ Yes, I think so. I spend too much time on social media.

'Spend time' is followed by the preposition 'on' when referring to activities or platforms.

× Such as I face Facebook or TikTok everyday and I didn't collect any meaningful information.

✓ For example, I use Facebook or TikTok every day and I don't collect any meaningful information.

'Such as' is used to introduce examples within a sentence, not to start a sentence. 'Face' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'use'. 'Didn't collect' should be 'don't collect' to match present tense context.

× Such as I face Facebook or TikTok everyday and I didn't collect any meaningful information.

✓ For example, I use Facebook or TikTok every day and I don't collect any meaningful information.

'Didn't collect' is past tense; the context suggests present tense 'don't collect'.

× Maybe I can read books if I don't use smartphone.

✓ Maybe I can read books if I don't use a smartphone.

'Smartphone' needs the indefinite article 'a' because it is a singular countable noun.

× I think reading book is a good hobby.

✓ I think reading books is a good hobby.

'Book' should be plural 'books' because reading generally refers to multiple books.

× I buy so many books but I didn't read it because I waste of time to use smartphone.

✓ I buy so many books but I don't read them because I waste time using my smartphone.

'Didn't read' is past tense but the context suggests present tense 'don't read'. 'It' should be 'them' to refer to plural 'books'. 'Waste of time to use smartphone' is incorrect; correct form is 'waste time using my smartphone'.

× I buy so many books but I didn't read it because I waste of time to use smartphone.

✓ I buy so many books but I don't read them because I waste time using my smartphone.

'It' is singular pronoun but 'books' is plural; correct pronoun is 'them'.