网络— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答时语法和用词需更准确，避免语法错误和重复表达。可以简洁明了地表达起始时间，并用连词连接细节，使回答更自然流畅。

範例: I started using the internet when I was in primary school. At first, I mainly chatted with my friends and shared interesting things through some apps. Additionally, we had a computer class from the third grade, which helped me learn how to use the internet more effectively.

建議: 回答中有过多的口头语和重复，影响流畅度。应减少“umm”等填充词，使用连词使句子更连贯，表达更具体。

範例: I go online almost every day because I rely on it for many tasks. For instance, I use the internet to search for information and chat with my friends through apps like WeChat.

建議: 回答中出现重复词语和不连贯表达，应避免口头语，使用连词连接句子，使表达更自然且结构完整。

範例: Yes, I remember one Friday during primary school when I wanted to go home and play games or chat with my friends online. However, my mom was strict and forbade me from using the internet until I finished my homework.

建議: 回答内容较完整，但语法和表达需改进。建议使用更准确的词汇和句式，避免语法错误，使表达更自然流畅。

範例: Yes, I do spend quite a lot of time online because I often shop, chat with my friends and family, and search for information. However, sometimes I neglect face-to-face communication, which is important for maintaining good relationships. I believe spending too much time online is also bad for health.

建議: 回答较好，内容具体且连贯。可注意动词时态一致和冠词使用，使表达更准确自然。

範例: Without the internet, I would often read books because they give me a sense of peace and help me forget upsetting things. I also enjoy planting flowers on my balcony, which is a great way to relax and refresh myself after a busy day. These activities help me focus and feel calm.

× Well, I started using Internet in my primary school and at first I just chatted with my friends online and share some interesting things to them by some apps and we also had a computer class from 3rd grade which helped me learn how to use Internet better.

✓ Well, I started using the Internet in my primary school and at first I just chatted with my friends online and shared some interesting things with them by some apps and we also had a computer class from 3rd grade which helped me learn how to use the Internet better.

“Internet”作为特指的网络，需要加定冠词“the”。此外，动词时态和介词使用也需调整。

× Well, I started using Internet in my primary school and at first I just chatted with my friends online and share some interesting things to them by some apps and we also had a computer class from 3rd grade which helped me learn how to use Internet better.

✓ Well, I started using the Internet in my primary school and at first I just chatted with my friends online and shared some interesting things with them by some apps and we also had a computer class from 3rd grade which helped me learn how to use the Internet better.

句中“share”应与前文“chatted”保持时态一致，改为过去式“shared”。

× Well, I started using Internet in my primary school and at first I just chatted with my friends online and share some interesting things to them by some apps and we also had a computer class from 3rd grade which helped me learn how to use Internet better.

✓ Well, I started using the Internet in my primary school and at first I just chatted with my friends online and shared some interesting things with them by some apps and we also had a computer class from 3rd grade which helped me learn how to use the Internet better.

动词“share”后应接介词“with”表示“与某人分享”，而非“to”。

× Umm, to be honest, I use Internet most every day. You know I totally depended on it. For example, when I need to search some information, I need to use Internet and umm I use WeChat or any other online apps to chat with my friends. Umm you know it is like a.

✓ Umm, to be honest, I use the Internet almost every day. You know I totally depend on it. For example, when I need to search for some information, I need to use the Internet and umm I use WeChat or any other online apps to chat with my friends. Umm you know it is like a.

“Internet”前应加定冠词“the”。“most every day”应改为“almost every day”。“depended”时态应为现在时“depend”。“search”后应加介词“for”。

× Umm, to be honest, I use Internet most every day. You know I totally depended on it. For example, when I need to search some information, I need to use Internet and umm I use WeChat or any other online apps to chat with my friends. Umm you know it is like a.

✓ Umm, to be honest, I use the Internet almost every day. You know I totally depend on it. For example, when I need to search for some information, I need to use the Internet and umm I use WeChat or any other online apps to chat with my friends. Umm you know it is like a.

描述习惯性动作应使用一般现在时，“depended”应改为“depend”。

× Umm, to be honest, I use Internet most every day. You know I totally depended on it. For example, when I need to search some information, I need to use Internet and umm I use WeChat or any other online apps to chat with my friends. Umm you know it is like a.

✓ Umm, to be honest, I use the Internet almost every day. You know I totally depend on it. For example, when I need to search for some information, I need to use the Internet and umm I use WeChat or any other online apps to chat with my friends. Umm you know it is like a.

动词“search”后应加介词“for”，表示“搜索某物”。

× Yes, I remember it was a Friday in my primary school and after the class I wanted to go home to check with my friends online and play games. By by by. My mom was strict about this. She forbade me from using Internet until I finished my homework.

✓ Yes, I remember it was a Friday in my primary school and after the class I wanted to go home to check with my friends online and play games. By by by. My mom was strict about this. She forbade me from using the Internet until I finished my homework.

“Internet”前应加定冠词“the”，表示特指网络。

× Yes, I remember it was a Friday in my primary school and after the class I wanted to go home to check with my friends online and play games. By by by. My mom was strict about this. She forbade me from using Internet until I finished my homework.

✓ Yes, I remember it was a Friday in my primary school and after the class I wanted to go home to check with my friends online and play games. By by by. My mom was strict about this. She forbade me from using the Internet until I finished my homework.

“forbade”是过去式，符合语境，无需修改。

× Yes, I do spend quite of time online because I often shop, chat with my friends and family members and search for information on.

✓ Yes, I do spend quite a lot of time online because I often shop, chat with my friends and family members and search for information online.

“quite of time”表达错误，应为“quite a lot of time”。“search for information on”缺少介词对象，改为“search for information online”。

× Yes, I do spend quite of time online because I often shop, chat with my friends and family members and search for information on. However, sometimes I just ignore the face to face communication which is very important to maintain good relationship with my loved ones.

✓ Yes, I do spend quite a lot of time online because I often shop, chat with my friends and family members and search for information online. However, sometimes I just ignore face-to-face communication which is very important to maintain good relationships with my loved ones.

“face to face communication”应改为“face-to-face communication”，且“good relationship”应为复数“good relationships”。

× I think spend too much online is not good for health.

✓ I think spending too much time online is not good for health.

“spend”应改为动名词“spending”，并补充“time”使表达完整。

× Without Internet, I often read books because it give me a sense of peace and helps me forget some upsetting things, and I also enjoy planting flowers on my balcony, which I find to be a great way to relax and refresh myself after a busy day.

✓ Without the Internet, I often read books because it gives me a sense of peace and helps me forget some upsetting things, and I also enjoy planting flowers on my balcony, which I find to be a great way to relax and refresh myself after a busy day.

“Internet”前应加定冠词“the”。“give”应改为第三人称单数“gives”，与主语“it”一致。

× Without Internet, I often read books because it give me a sense of peace and helps me forget some upsetting things, and I also enjoy planting flowers on my balcony, which I find to be a great way to relax and refresh myself after a busy day.

✓ Without the Internet, I often read books because it gives me a sense of peace and helps me forget some upsetting things, and I also enjoy planting flowers on my balcony, which I find to be a great way to relax and refresh myself after a busy day.

“Internet”作为特指名词，前面需要加定冠词“the”。