网络— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 你的回答中有语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，建议注意时态和句子结构，避免重复和拼写错误。可以先用一句话直接回答问题，然后用具体细节支持。

範例: I started using the internet when I was in primary school. I mainly used it to send messages to my friends and to research information for my schoolwork.

建議: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不流畅，建议简洁明了地回答问题，并用连接词组织句子，避免重复。

範例: I go online several times a day because I need to research information for my assessments. During my breaks, I also watch videos and films online.

建議: 回答语法错误较多，表达不清晰。建议使用正确的时态和句子结构，明确表达父母限制上网的原因。

範例: Yes, I remember when I was a child, my parents did not allow me to use the internet because they believed excessive use would affect my studies and concentration.

建議: 回答中有很多重复和语法错误，建议简洁明了地表达观点，并用具体例子支持。

範例: Yes, to be honest, I spend too much time online. For example, I often research information and complete assessments, which takes a lot of my time.

建議: 回答较为完整，但句子结构稍显简单，建议使用连接词使表达更流畅。

範例: Without the internet, I would rely on traditional sources of information such as reading books and newspapers. Also, I would communicate face to face with my friends and spend more time doing outdoor activities.

× I use Dark star the Internet when I was primary school.

✓ I used the Internet when I was in primary school.

这里的动词时态应该是过去式，因为描述的是过去的动作；另外，'primary school'前需要加介词'in'表示在小学期间。

× I use Dark star the Internet when I was primary school.

✓ I used the Internet when I was in primary school.

'in primary school'中需要介词'in'来表示时间段，缺少介词导致表达不完整。

× I need with my friends send a message and used it to research online information my my schoolwork.

✓ I needed to send messages to my friends and used it to research online information for my schoolwork.

'need with my friends send a message'结构不正确，应该用'needed to send messages to my friends'，同时'my my'重复，应改为'for my schoolwork'。

× I need with my friends send a message and used it to research online information my my schoolwork.

✓ I needed to send messages to my friends and used it to research online information for my schoolwork.

描述过去的动作，动词应使用过去式'needed'和'used'。

× I really go unnecessary time a day because I need to do research and finding and finding information.

✓ I really go online many times a day because I need to do research and find information.

'unnecessary time'用法错误，应使用'many times'表示频率；'finding and finding'重复，应改为'find'。

× I really go unnecessary time a day because I need to do research and finding and finding information.

✓ I really go online many times a day because I need to do research and find information.

'finding'在这里应使用动词原形'find'，因为前面有情态动词'need to'。

× For my assessment and when I was a break days I thought online watch videos and films.

✓ For my assessment and during break days, I thought online watching videos and films.

'thought'用法错误，应为'go online'或'watched'；'a break days'应为'during break days'。

× For my assessment and when I was a break days I thought online watch videos and films.

✓ For my assessment and during break days, I went online to watch videos and films.

'when I was a break days'应改为'during break days'，'thought online'应为'went online'。

× Yes, I remember when I was child and my parents will avoid using Internet because my parents believe that excessive Internet used.

✓ Yes, I remember when I was a child, and my parents avoided using the Internet because they believed that excessive Internet use was harmful.

描述过去的动作，动词应使用过去式；'will avoid'应改为'avoided'，'used'应为'noun use'，并且句子结构需调整。

× Yes, I remember when I was child and my parents will avoid using Internet because my parents believe that excessive Internet used.

✓ Yes, I remember when I was a child, and my parents avoided using the Internet because they believed that excessive Internet use was harmful.

'child'前需要冠词'a'，'Internet'前需要冠词'the'。

× In effect, my study and my concentration now.

✓ It affected my study and my concentration at that time.

句子缺少谓语动词，且时态应为过去时，描述过去的影响。

× Yes, to be honest, I spent too much time on one.

✓ Yes, to be honest, I spend too much time online.

根据上下文，描述现在的情况，应使用现在时'spend'，'on one'应为'online'。

× For example, when I was started I needed to research, research information, complete assessment.

✓ For example, when I started, I needed to research information and complete assessments.

'was started'错误，应为'started'；'complete assessment'应为复数形式'assessments'。

× After that I I needed to I needed to all things complete.

✓ After that, I needed to complete all the tasks.

句子结构混乱，重复使用'I needed to'，应简化为'I needed to complete all the tasks'。

× Without the Internet, I think I can depend on traditional information measures such as reading books or newspaper and face to face communications and with my friends going on outdoor activities.

✓ Without the Internet, I think I would depend on traditional information sources such as reading books or newspapers, face-to-face communication, and going outdoors with my friends.

'depend on'后应接名词，'newspaper'应为复数'newspapers'，'face to face communications'应为'singular face-to-face communication'，'with my friends going on outdoor activities'结构不正确，应改为'going outdoors with my friends'。

× Without the Internet, I think I can depend on traditional information measures such as reading books or newspaper and face to face communications and with my friends going on outdoor activities.

✓ Without the Internet, I think I would depend on traditional information sources such as reading books or newspapers, face-to-face communication, and going outdoors with my friends.

描述假设情况，应该使用情态动词'would'而不是'can'。