网络— Part 1 評分報告
對話
Part 1
考官
When did you start using the internet?
考生
I started using the Internet when I was in middle school after my parents bought a mobile phone for me. That made it much easier for me to keep in touch with my friends and family, especially through social media and messaging apps such as QQ and WeChat. I really enjoy sharing my thoughts online because it helped me feel closer to them, even when we were apart.
考官
How often do you go online?
考生
Exactly, I usually go online every day, especially in the evening when I lay in the bed to send messages or browse interesting posts on social media platforms like Xiaohongshu. Going online has many advantages. For example, it helps me to relax after a busy day of work. In addition, it allows me to stay connected with my family and friends, which is very important to me.
考官
Can you remember a time you weren’t allowed to use the internet?
考生
Yes, I remember a time when I wasn't allowed to use the Internet, especially during my years in primary and junior high school. My parents believed that too much screen time will negatively affect my school performance and strike my attention from studying. Therefore, they restricted my access but still try to find information by using their phone occasionally. This appearance taught me to manage my time more efficiently.
考官
Do you think you spend too much time online?
考生
No, I don't think I spend too much time online because I have a lot of homework and classes during the daytime, which keeps me quite busy in the evening. Then I'm lying in bed. I usually use my phone to watch videos or send text messages to relieve and relax. So my online time is quite limited and mainly for relaxation.
考官
What would you do without the internet?
考生
Without the Internet, I would spend more time focusing on myself by reading books or studying, and this helps me to enhance my knowledge. On weekdays, I would concentrate more on my studies and avoid using my phone to minimize distractions. However, during the weekends, I would hang out with my friends to enjoy college time together, which is essential.
評估
總分
Part 1
When did you start using the internet?
分數: 85.0建議: 回答较自然且内容丰富，但句子稍长，建议简化句子结构，避免冗长，同时增加连接词使表达更连贯。
範例: I started using the internet in middle school when my parents gave me a mobile phone. This helped me stay in touch with friends and family through apps like QQ and WeChat. I enjoy sharing my thoughts online because it makes me feel closer to them even when we are apart.
How often do you go online?
分數: 90.0建議: 回答内容具体且结构清晰，但开头的“Exactly”不太自然，建议使用更合适的连接词或直接回答问题。
範例: I usually go online every day, especially in the evening when I lie in bed to send messages or browse posts on Xiaohongshu. It helps me relax after a busy day and stay connected with my family and friends, which is very important to me.
Can you remember a time you weren’t allowed to use the internet?
分數: 80.0建議: 回答中有语法和表达错误，如“strike my attention”应为“distract my attention”，建议注意用词准确性，并简化句子结构。
範例: Yes, during primary and junior high school, my parents didn't allow me to use the internet much. They thought too much screen time would distract me from studying. So, they limited my access, but I sometimes used their phone to find information. This experience taught me to manage my time better.
Do you think you spend too much time online?
分數: 85.0建議: 回答内容合理，但句子衔接略显生硬，建议使用更多连接词使表达更流畅。
範例: No, I don't spend too much time online because I have a lot of homework and classes during the day. In the evening, when I lie in bed, I usually watch videos or send messages to relax. Therefore, my online time is limited and mainly for relaxation.
What would you do without the internet?
分數: 90.0建議: 回答结构清晰，内容具体，但句子稍长，建议适当拆分句子并使用连接词提高流畅度。
範例: Without the internet, I would spend more time reading books and studying to improve my knowledge. On weekdays, I would focus more on my studies and avoid using my phone to reduce distractions. During weekends, I would hang out with my friends to enjoy college life, which is very important to me.
文法
× My parents believed that too much screen time will negatively affect my school performance and strike my attention from studying.
✓ My parents believed that too much screen time would negatively affect my school performance and distract my attention from studying.
这里使用了过去时态的动词believed，后面的从句中应该使用与之对应的过去将来时态would，而不是现在时态will。此外，动词strike my attention用法不当，正确表达应为distract my attention，意为分散注意力。
× Then I'm lying in bed.
✓ Then I lie in bed.
这里描述的是习惯性动作，应该使用一般现在时lie而不是现在进行时lying。
× My parents believed that too much screen time will negatively affect my school performance and strike my attention from studying.
✓ My parents believed that too much screen time would negatively affect my school performance and distract my attention from studying.
动词distract后面搭配介词from，表示“分散注意力于某事”，而strike my attention是不正确的搭配。
× Therefore, they restricted my access but still try to find information by using their phone occasionally.
✓ Therefore, they restricted my access but still tried to find information by using their phone occasionally.
前半句使用了过去时restricted，后半句的动词try应与之时态一致，改为过去时tried。
× Without the Internet, I would spend more time focusing on myself by reading books or studying, and this helps me to enhance my knowledge.
✓ Without the Internet, I would spend more time focusing on myself by reading books or studying, and this would help me to enhance my knowledge.
前半句使用了虚拟语气would，后半句的动词helps应与之时态一致，改为would help。
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