网络— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答不够自然且语法错误较多，时间表达混乱，建议用简单明了的句子直接回答问题，并补充具体时间。

範例: I started using the internet when I was about 10 years old because it became more accessible at that time.

建議: 表达不够清晰，语法和用词错误较多，建议简洁明了地说明频率并给出具体原因，使用连词使句子更连贯。

範例: I go online every day because my job requires me to search for information and solve problems quickly.

建議: 回答不连贯且语法错误严重，表达不清楚，建议用简单句子直接说明时间和原因，避免无关内容。

範例: Yes, when I was in junior school, I was not allowed to use the internet because the school wanted us to focus on studying.

建議: 语法和表达不准确，句子结构混乱，建议简洁表达观点并说明原因，避免重复。

範例: Yes, I spend a lot of time online because my job requires it, so I have little free time for other activities like reading books.

建議: 表达不够自然，语法错误较多，建议用更自然的表达方式说明如果没有互联网会做什么，并补充具体细节。

範例: If there was no internet, I would read paper novels every day because I enjoy reading as a hobby.

× Actually I use the Internet when I was a child because with the repair development of the Internet I can use it when 2042.

✓ Actually I used the Internet when I was a child because with the rapid development of the Internet I will be able to use it in 2042.

句子中描述过去的动作，动词应使用过去式“used”。另外，“repair”应为“rapid”，表示“快速的”。“can use it when 2042”应改为“will be able to use it in 2042”，表示将来时态和正确的介词使用。

× Actually I go online every day because my job needs me to attach the mainland to such some knowledge and I need the Internet to to find some solution for some problem anywhere, anytime.

✓ Actually I go online every day because my job needs me to access the mainland for such knowledge and I need the Internet to find some solutions for some problems anywhere, anytime.

“attach the mainland”应为“access the mainland”，表示“访问大陆”。“to to find”重复，应改为“to find”。“some solution”应为复数“some solutions”，因为表示多个解决方案。

× Yeah, of course it has been. It is in my Junior School that I don't. I am alone too. I am not allowed to use the Internet because petition we focus on studying.

✓ Yeah, of course it has been. It was in my Junior School that I wasn't allowed to use the Internet. I was alone too because we focused on studying.

句子结构混乱，“I don't”应为“I wasn't allowed”。“petition”应为“because”，表示原因。时态应统一为过去时。

× Actually I spend most of my time in the Internet because I my job requires me to go online and I haven't free time to offer Internet to do something else such as read books.

✓ Actually I spend most of my time on the Internet because my job requires me to go online and I don't have free time to use the Internet to do something else such as read books.

介词“in the Internet”应为“on the Internet”。“I haven't free time”应为“I don't have free time”。“offer Internet”应为“use the Internet”。

× Uh, I think I will raise the novels in paper because my hobby is reading novel, so if the Internet is not exist, I think I would read novels every day.

✓ Uh, I think I will read novels on paper because my hobby is reading novels, so if the Internet did not exist, I think I would read novels every day.

“raise the novels”应为“read novels”。“in paper”应为“on paper”。“reading novel”应为复数“reading novels”。“if the Internet is not exist”应为“if the Internet did not exist”，使用虚拟语气的过去式。