网络— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答较为自然且内容相关，但句子结构稍显重复，且部分表达不够地道。建议使用更简洁的句子结构，并避免重复表达。

範例: I started using the internet when I was in primary school, around grade four. My school permitted us to bring iPads, which helped us study and research information online effectively.

建議: 回答内容丰富，但存在语法错误（'accessing'应为'access'），且句子稍长，建议注意语法准确性并简化表达。

範例: I go online very often, especially when I'm at home or on breaks. Also, during public transport rides, I usually watch videos on YouTube or Netflix for entertainment.

建議: 回答表达不够流畅，句子结构复杂且有语法错误。建议简化句子，使用更自然的表达方式。

範例: When I was in primary school, my parents sometimes didn't allow me to use the internet because they were concerned about excessive use of devices like phones and iPads.

建議: 回答内容明确，但句子重复使用“because”，且有语法错误（'platform'应为'platforms'，'content... are'应为'is'）。建议注意语法和句式多样性。

範例: Yes, I believe I spend too much time online since I'm addicted to short video platforms like YouTube and Instagram, where the content is compact and engaging.

建議: 回答内容丰富，但存在拼写错误（'paying'应为'playing'），句子稍长。建议注意拼写和简洁表达。

範例: Without the internet, I would probably visit the library to borrow novels and enjoy reading quietly. Alternatively, I might play badminton or go swimming to stay healthy.

× When I was like primary 4, my school allowed us to bring iPad to school and this allowed us to study and research some information online which is really useful.

✓ When I was in primary 4, my school allowed us to bring iPads to school and this allowed us to study and research some information online which was really useful.

这里“like primary 4”表达不准确，应该用介词短语“in primary 4”表示“在小学四年级”。“iPad”应使用复数形式“iPads”，因为指的是多台设备。最后，“which is really useful”应改为过去时“which was really useful”，因为描述的是过去的情况。

× When I'm travelling by public transport, I usually accessing the Internet for some entertainment like watching videos on YouTube or Netflix.

✓ When I'm travelling by public transport, I usually access the Internet for some entertainment like watching videos on YouTube or Netflix.

“usually”后面应接动词原形“access”，而不是动名词“accessing”，因为“usually”是频率副词，后面跟一般现在时动词。

× When I was a primary school student, I was not allowed to access the Internet sometimes because my parents understood the consequences of over using or relying on digital devices like mobile phone and iPads, so they limited.

✓ When I was a primary school student, I was sometimes not allowed to access the Internet because my parents understood the consequences of overusing or relying on digital devices like mobile phones and iPads, so they limited my usage.

“sometimes”位置应调整到“was”之后，形成“was sometimes not allowed”。“over using”应合成一个词“overusing”。“mobile phone”应使用复数“mobile phones”。句尾“so they limited”不完整，应补充宾语，如“my usage”。

× Yes, I definitely think that I spend too much time online because I'm quite addicted to short videos platform like YouTube and Instagram because the content of those videos are really compact and interesting.

✓ Yes, I definitely think that I spend too much time online because I'm quite addicted to short video platforms like YouTube and Instagram because the content of those videos is really compact and interesting.

“short videos platform”应为复数“short video platforms”，表示多个平台。主语“content”是不可数名词，谓语动词应使用单数“is”。

× Without the Internet, I may go to the library to lend some novels and then enjoy the time to read novels quietly and immersed in the unreal world.

✓ Without the Internet, I may go to the library to borrow some novels and then enjoy the time reading novels quietly and immersing myself in the unreal world.

“lend”是“借出”，应使用“borrow”表示“借入”。“enjoy the time to read”表达不自然，应改为“enjoy the time reading”。“immersed in”缺少主语，改为“immersing myself”更准确。

× Or maybe I will engage in physical activities like paying badminton or swimming, which benefits my health.

✓ Or maybe I will engage in physical activities like playing badminton or swimming, which benefit my health.

“paying badminton”应为“playing badminton”，动词拼写错误。关系代词“which”指代复数“activities”，谓语动词应使用复数“benefit”。