网络— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to give a clear time reference and explain briefly why you started using the internet. Use simple, correct sentences and avoid redundancy.

範例: I started using the internet about five years ago because I needed to find information for my homework.

建議: Your answer is repetitive and has grammatical mistakes. Try to organise your ideas clearly, use linking words, and avoid repeating the same phrases. Also, use correct plural forms and articles.

範例: I go online every day because I like to read news about finance and technology. Additionally, I often search for information related to my major.

建議: Your answer is confusing and lacks clarity. Try to structure your response with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Use correct tenses and vocabulary to explain the situation logically.

範例: Yes, I remember once during my second year at school when the power was cut off on a Monday. My phone was dead, so I couldn't charge it or use the internet.

建議: Your answer is understandable but contains grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to use more natural expressions and link your ideas clearly.

範例: Yes, I think I spend too much time online, which means I don't have enough time for sports or reading books. I need to manage my time better.

建議: Your answer is good but could be more fluent and organised. Avoid repeating words and use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

範例: If I didn't have the internet, I would spend more time doing sports and developing my hobbies, such as playing the piano. I would also read more books related to my studies.

× I started using the Internet for years.

✓ I have been using the Internet for years.

The original sentence incorrectly uses the simple past tense 'started' with 'for years', which indicates a duration up to the present. The present perfect continuous tense 'have been using' is appropriate to express an action that began in the past and continues to the present.

× I have a housework need to search some information in the Internet.

✓ I have some housework that requires me to search for information on the Internet.

'Housework' is an uncountable noun and should not be preceded by 'a'. Also, 'need' should be connected properly to express necessity. Additionally, 'search some information in the Internet' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'on' and 'information' is uncountable, so 'some' is acceptable but 'in' should be 'on'.

× So in that time using the Internet it was my first time.

✓ So at that time, using the Internet was my first experience.

The original sentence has awkward word order and redundancy. 'In that time' should be 'at that time'. The phrase 'using the Internet it was my first time' is unclear; it should be rephrased to 'using the Internet was my first experience' for clarity and correctness.

× I go online everyday because I always read some news about financial about the technology and I need to search some informations about my major.

✓ I go online every day because I always read some news about finance and technology, and I need to search for information about my major.

The adverb 'everyday' should be two words 'every day' when referring to frequency. 'Financial' should be 'finance' to correctly refer to the subject. 'Some informations' is incorrect because 'information' is uncountable. Also, 'search some informations' should be 'search for information'.

× So I will search the information in the in the Internet.

✓ So I will search for information on the Internet.

The definite article 'the' before 'information' is unnecessary because 'information' is uncountable and general here. Also, 'in the Internet' should be 'on the Internet' as the correct preposition.

× So I often use the online.

✓ So I often use the Internet.

'The online' is incorrect; the correct noun is 'the Internet'. 'Online' is an adverb or adjective, not a noun.

× In the second year, in Monday I come back to school, I think I can enjoy my holidays, but my phone dead and the power cutting I can't.

✓ In the second year, on Monday, I came back to school. I thought I could enjoy my holidays, but my phone was dead and the power was cut off, so I couldn't.

The sentence incorrectly uses present tense verbs 'come', 'think', and 'can't' when referring to past events. The correct past tense forms are 'came', 'thought', and 'couldn't'. Also, 'in Monday' should be 'on Monday'. 'Power cutting' is incorrect; it should be 'power was cut off'.

× I can't charge my earphone, so I remember that I can't use the phone and I can use the Internet.

✓ I couldn't charge my earphones, so I remember that I couldn't use the phone or the Internet.

The sentence has tense inconsistency and incorrect conjunction use. 'Can't' should be past tense 'couldn't' to match the past context. 'Earphone' should be plural 'earphones'. Also, 'and I can use the Internet' contradicts the previous clause; it should be 'or the Internet' to indicate inability to use both.

× Yeah, sure. I think I spend too much time online and I can't do some sports reading books with artists, so I think it is bad things.

✓ Yes, sure. I think I spend too much time online and I can't do some sports or read books with artists, so I think it is a bad thing.

The sentence lacks conjunction 'or' between activities. 'Bad things' should be singular 'a bad thing' to refer to the situation. Also, 'reading books with artists' is unclear but kept as is for meaning.

× I need to control my time spending the online.

✓ I need to control my time spent online.

The phrase 'time spending the online' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'time spent online' where 'spent' is the past participle modifying 'time'. Also, 'the online' is incorrect; 'online' is used without 'the'.

× If I don't have the Internet, I will do some sports.

✓ If I didn't have the Internet, I would do some sports.

The sentence is a second conditional expressing an unreal or hypothetical situation, so the correct form is 'If I didn't have' and 'I would do' instead of 'don't have' and 'will do'.

× Yeah, and cultivate my hobby, like like playing piano.

✓ Yes, and cultivate my hobby, like playing the piano.

The repeated 'like like' is a mistake; it should be a single 'like'. Also, 'playing piano' should be 'playing the piano' as the definite article is used with musical instruments.

× And I will study reading some books about in addition to my major.

✓ And I will study by reading some books in addition to my major.

The phrase 'study reading some books about in addition to my major' is ungrammatical. It should be restructured to 'study by reading some books in addition to my major' to clarify the meaning.