网络— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答时语法错误较多，表达不够自然，且句子结构松散。建议简化句子，注意时态和主谓一致，避免重复表达。

範例: I started using the internet when I was about seven years old at my grandparents' house. I mainly played flash games on their computer, which was quite fun and original at that time.

建議: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不完整，句子不连贯。建议使用连接词使句子更流畅，并注意句子完整性。

範例: I go online every day, especially during work hours because I need to communicate with clients and colleagues. After work, I also use the internet for entertainment and relaxation.

建議: 回答语法错误严重，表达不清晰。建议理清句子结构，使用正确的时态和词汇，避免重复和混乱。

範例: Yes, when I was in high school, my parents did not allow me to use the internet because they thought studying was more important at that time.

建議: 回答较为自然，但有些重复和口语填充词较多。建议减少重复，使用更丰富的词汇表达观点。

範例: Yes, I do spend too much time online, especially since I use my smartphone almost all day, from morning until night. I realize this is not a healthy habit.

建議: 回答内容具体且有条理，但语法和表达仍需改进。建议使用更准确的时态和连接词，使表达更流畅。

範例: Actually, I once tried not using the internet for a whole Saturday. On that day, I practiced yoga and meditation, and I also cooked some meals in the kitchen.

× I use it in my grandparents house.

✓ I use it in my grandparents' house.

这里的grandparents是复数所有格，表示“祖父母的房子”，需要在grandparents后面加上所有格的撇号。

× Is really original.

✓ It is really original.

句子缺少主语，应该用it作为主语，is前面需要加it。

× I use the computer to play some flash games.

✓ I used the computer to play some flash games.

根据上下文，描述的是过去的动作，应该用过去时used。

× I use the Internet to connect my clients, my colleagues and uh, to finish my work.

✓ I use the Internet to connect with my clients, my colleagues and, uh, to finish my work.

connect后面需要加介词with，表示“与……联系”。

× I use the Internet to connect my clients, my colleagues and uh, to finish my work.

✓ I use the Internet to connect with my clients, my colleagues and, uh, to finish my work.

connect后面需要加介词with，表示“与……联系”。

× And when I after work I also use Internet to enter.

✓ And after work, I also use the Internet to surf online.

句子结构混乱，缺少主语和正确的动词，enter用法不当，改为surf online更符合语境。

× my parents weren't allowed me to use Internet

✓ my parents didn't allow me to use the Internet

这里需要用过去时的didn't allow，且allow后面直接接宾语me，不用被动语态。

× my parents weren't allowed me to use Internet

✓ my parents didn't allow me to use the Internet

Internet前面需要加定冠词the。

× they think they thought the most important things for me at that time was to study and focus on my curriculums I don't use.

✓ they thought the most important thing for me at that time was to study and focus on my curriculum, so I didn't use it.

时态混乱，主谓不一致，curriculums应为curriculum（不可数名词），句子需要分开表达。

× the most important things for me at that time was to study and focus on my curriculums

✓ the most important thing for me at that time was to study and focus on my curriculum

things应为thing，curriculums应为curriculum，保持单数形式。

× I don't use.

✓ I didn't use it.

描述过去情况，应该用过去时didn't use，并补充宾语it。

× I spend too much time online.

✓ I spend too much time online.

此句时态正确，无需修改。

× I use the Internet with my smartphone day and night.

✓ I use the Internet on my smartphone day and night.

使用介词on搭配smartphone更合适。

× I use the Internet with my smartphone day and night.

✓ I use the Internet on my smartphone day and night.

介词with用法不当，应该用on表示“用手机上网”。

× I decided to uh, don't use Internet during the whole Saturday

✓ I decided to, uh, not use the Internet during the whole Saturday

不定式后面用否定形式not use，且Internet前加定冠词the。

× I also cooked in the kitchen.

✓ I also cooked in the kitchen.

此句无语法错误，无需修改。