网络— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Câu trả lời của bạn khá rõ ràng nhưng có một số lỗi ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu chưa tự nhiên. Bạn nên chú ý sử dụng thì quá khứ đơn cho hành động đã xảy ra trong quá khứ và tránh lặp từ không cần thiết. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên ngắn gọn hơn và tránh dùng các cụm từ không chính xác như "since then and have been" trong câu này.

範例: I started using the internet when I was 12 years old because I needed it for my studies. My mother bought me a smartphone, and since then, I have used the internet regularly for both learning and entertainment.

建議: Bạn trả lời khá đầy đủ nhưng cần chú ý ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ. Ví dụ, "everyday" nên là "every day" khi nói về tần suất. Ngoài ra, câu "use the Internet to study or entertainment" không chính xác về ngữ pháp, nên dùng "for studying or entertainment". Bạn cũng nên dùng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

範例: I usually go online every day. For instance, I use the internet for studying and entertainment, such as watching videos and listening to music. Moreover, I often chat with my friends and share photos on social media.

建議: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và có lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên dùng thì quá khứ cho hành động trong quá khứ và tránh lỗi về danh từ số nhiều (ví dụ: "educational website" nên là "educational websites"). Ngoài ra, cụm từ "watch field" không rõ nghĩa và cần được thay thế bằng từ phù hợp. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp và cung cấp ví dụ cụ thể hơn.

範例: No, I can't remember a time when I was not allowed to use the internet because I have always used it regularly. For example, I often visit educational websites and watch videos to help me understand my lessons better.

建議: Bạn đã trả lời khá tốt nhưng có lỗi nhỏ về ngữ pháp trong câu cuối cùng ("balance is this" nên là "balance this"). Bạn nên chú ý cách dùng từ và cấu trúc câu để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn. Ngoài ra, bạn có thể thêm một vài chi tiết cụ thể để làm câu trả lời phong phú hơn.

範例: Yes, I think I spend too much time online, especially browsing websites or watching videos for entertainment. However, I try to balance this by spending time outdoors and meeting my friends in person.

建議: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tốt và có ý rõ ràng. Tuy nhiên, bạn nên chú ý đến sự nhất quán về số nhiều và số ít ("which help" nên là "which helps"). Bạn cũng có thể sử dụng thêm liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và tránh lặp từ.

範例: If I didn't have the internet, I would spend more time outdoors. For example, I would hang out with my friends or visit my parents and grandparents, which helps me feel more relaxed and appreciate real life more.

× At that time, I had to study online and my mother bought me a smartphone since then and have been using the Internet regularly for learning and entertainment.

✓ At that time, I had to study online and my mother bought me a smartphone. Since then, I have been using the Internet regularly for learning and entertainment.

The original sentence incorrectly combines two independent clauses with 'and' without proper punctuation, and 'have been using' lacks a clear subject. Splitting into two sentences and adding 'I' before 'have been using' clarifies the meaning and corrects the verb form usage.

× I usually go online everyday.

✓ I usually go online every day.

The word 'everyday' is an adjective meaning 'common' or 'normal', while 'every day' is an adverbial phrase meaning 'each day'. Here, 'every day' is correct because it describes frequency.

× For example, I often use the Internet to study or entertainment like watching video and listening to music.

✓ For example, I often use the Internet to study or for entertainment like watching videos and listening to music.

The verb 'use' requires parallel structure; 'to study' pairs with 'for entertainment'. Also, 'video' should be plural 'videos' to match the context of multiple instances.

× Additionally, I also chat with my friends and send photos on social media.

✓ Additionally, I also chat with my friends and send photos via social media.

The preposition 'on' is less appropriate here; 'via' better indicates the medium used to send photos.

× No, I can't remember a time when I was not allowed to use the Internet because I use it regularly.

✓ No, I can't remember a time when I was not allowed to use the Internet because I have used it regularly.

The present perfect tense 'have used' is appropriate here to indicate an action continuing up to the present, matching the context of regular use over time.

× For example, I often use educational website and watch field to help me better understand my lesson.

✓ For example, I often use educational websites and watch videos to help me better understand my lessons.

'Website' should be plural 'websites' to indicate multiple resources; 'field' is incorrect and should be 'videos'; 'lesson' should be plural 'lessons' to match general study context.

× However, I try to balance is this by spending time outdoors or meeting friends in real life.

✓ However, I try to balance this by spending time outdoors or meeting friends in real life.

The phrase 'is this' is incorrect; it should be 'this' to correctly refer to the previous statement. The adverb placement is corrected by removing 'is'.

× If I didn't have the Internet, I could spend more time outdoors.

✓ If I didn't have the Internet, I would spend more time outdoors.

In the second conditional, the correct modal verb is 'would' to express hypothetical situations, not 'could' which implies ability rather than hypothetical outcome.

× For example, I enjoy hanging out with my friends or visiting my parents and grandparents, which help me feel more relaxed and I love my real life more.

✓ For example, I enjoy hanging out with my friends or visiting my parents and grandparents, which helps me feel more relaxed, and I love my real life more.

The relative pronoun 'which' refers to singular noun phrase, so the verb should be 'helps' (third person singular). Also, a comma before 'and' improves sentence clarity.