网络— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answerは自然ですが、"used Internet"の前に冠詞"the"を入れるとより自然です。また、"I used it to search for my assignments or for homework"は少し冗長なので、"to search for assignments"など簡潔にすると良いです。

範例: I started using the internet when I was in junior high school. I mainly used it to search for assignments, which was very convenient.

建議: 繰り返しの言葉（"I I", "it is it is", "easy easy"）を避け、"contract"は"contact"の誤りなので正しい単語を使いましょう。文を簡潔にし、接続詞を使って論理的に繋げると良いです。

範例: I go online almost every day because I play video games with my friends. It is an easy way to keep in contact with them.

建議: 時制の一致に注意し、"take"は過去形の"took"にしましょう。繰り返しの言葉を避け、"stop me playing"は"stopped me from playing"の方が自然です。

範例: When I took the final exam, my mother stopped me from playing video games and using the internet.

建議: "totally yes"は不自然なので、"Yes, I do"などにしましょう。"spend much time"は"spend a lot of time"が自然です。"searching for the Internet about my anime"は意味が曖昧なので、"searching the internet for information about anime"など具体的に表現しましょう。

範例: Yes, I do. I spend a lot of time playing video games with my friends and searching the internet for information about my favorite anime and comics.

建議: "take a walk to in the park"は不自然なので、"take a walk in the park"にしましょう。"without Internet"の前に冠詞"the"を入れると良いです。"umm"などの間投詞は避け、文を簡潔にまとめましょう。

範例: Without the internet, I would take a walk in the park to enjoy fresh sunlight and air because exercising helps me stay in shape.

× I used Internet for the first time when I was in junior high school.

✓ I used the Internet for the first time when I was in junior high school.

In English, 'Internet' is a unique noun and usually requires the definite article 'the' before it. Omitting 'the' is a common error for learners. Always say 'the Internet' when referring to it.

× I I almost use Internet every day and I play video games online with my friends.

✓ I almost use the Internet every day and I play video games online with my friends.

Same as above, 'Internet' requires the definite article 'the'. Also, the repeated 'I' is a redundancy and should be removed for clarity.

× It is it is easy easy way to contract with my friends.

✓ It is an easy way to contact my friends.

The sentence has repeated words 'it is' and 'easy' which are errors. Also, 'contract' is incorrect here; the correct verb is 'contact'. Additionally, 'easy' is an adjective describing 'way', so 'an' is needed before 'easy' because 'easy' starts with a vowel sound.

× When I take the final exam, my mother just stop stop me playing video games and using the Internet.

✓ When I took the final exam, my mother just stopped me from playing video games and using the Internet.

The event is in the past, so 'take' should be 'took' and 'stop' should be 'stopped' to match past tense. Also, 'stop me playing' is incorrect; the correct form is 'stopped me from playing'. The repeated 'stop' is a typo and should be removed.

× This is because I spend much time playing video games with my friends and and searching for the Internet about my anime or comics.

✓ This is because I spend a lot of time playing video games with my friends and searching the Internet about my anime or comics.

'Much time' is incorrect in affirmative sentences; 'a lot of time' is the correct quantifier. Also, 'searching for the Internet' is incorrect; we 'search the Internet'. The repeated 'and' is a typo and should be removed.

× I want to take a walk to in the park to enjoy fresh sunlight and air without Internet because umm, moving my body can help me stay in shape.

✓ I want to take a walk in the park to enjoy fresh sunlight and air without the Internet because, umm, moving my body can help me stay in shape.

The phrase 'take a walk to in the park' is incorrect; it should be 'take a walk in the park'. Also, 'without Internet' should be 'without the Internet' as 'Internet' requires the definite article. Commas help clarify the sentence around 'umm'.