网络— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 你的回答中存在语法错误，如时态和主谓一致问题，且表达不够流畅。建议练习正确使用过去时态，并简洁明了地表达开始使用互联网的时间和原因。

範例: I started using the internet when I was very young because I needed to find information for my school homework.

建議: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，建议使用正确的时态和句子结构，并具体说明上网的频率和时间。

範例: Nowadays, I often go online every day to play games, watch videos, and listen to music, usually for about two hours.

建議: 回答语法混乱，表达不清晰，建议理清思路，使用简单句子描述被禁止上网的具体时间和原因。

範例: Yes, I remember once during the holidays when I had a lot of homework unfinished. My mother did not allow me to use the internet until I finished my work.

建議: 回答中时态和语法错误较多，建议使用正确的时态和句子结构，清楚表达自己上网时间长的原因。

範例: Yes, I think I spend too much time online because I often search for information and work on homework or group projects.

建議: 回答表达不够连贯，语法错误较多。建议使用连词连接句子，表达清晰自己没有互联网时的活动和感受。

範例: If I didn't have the internet, I would exercise at home using my running machine. I don't like going outside, so exercising indoors makes me happy and comfortable.

× When I were very young, I used, I used the Internet because in my memory I have a lot of the school homework and I were using, I were using Internet to look for, looked for some information.

✓ When I was very young, I used the Internet because I remember I had a lot of school homework and I was using the Internet to look for some information.

这里的主语是第一人称单数，动词be应该用was而不是were。'homework'是不可数名词，不需要加冠词'the'。动词时态应保持一致，使用过去时。

× In nowaday I often go online because I like playing games and watching TV, watching some videos or listening some music.

✓ Nowadays, I often go online because I like playing games, watching TV, watching some videos, or listening to some music.

'nowaday'拼写错误，应为'nowadays'。'listening some music'缺少介词'to'，正确用法是'listening to some music'。

× So I often go online about. 10:00.

✓ So I often go online at about 10:00.

表示具体时间点时应使用介词'at'，'about'表示大约时间，二者应连用为'at about 10:00'。

× Yes, I remember when I was charged. I have many homework in the holiday but I don't finished but tomorrow I will go to the school so but I'm online at that time so my mom is didn't mean to go in.

✓ Yes, I remember when I was punished. I had a lot of homework during the holiday but I didn't finish it. Tomorrow I will go to school, but I was online at that time, so my mom didn't want me to go online.

'charged'用词不当，应为'punished'。'have'应改为过去时'had'。'don't finished'时态错误，应为'didn't finish'。'will go to the school'中'the'多余，应为'go to school'。'is didn't mean to go in'语法错误，应为'didn't want me to go online'。

× Yes, because in today I often going to search for information online and I have many teamwork or homework will go to finished so I always online.

✓ Yes, because nowadays I often search for information online and I have a lot of teamwork or homework to finish, so I am always online.

'in today'应为'nowadays'。'often going to search'时态错误，应为'often search'。'will go to finished'结构错误，应为'to finish'。缺少动词，'I always online'应为'I am always online'。

× I spend much time online.

✓ I spend a lot of time online.

'much'通常用于否定句或疑问句，肯定句中应使用'a lot of'来表示大量。

× I think if without the Internet are always doing some sport because in my home has a running machine so I don't I don't like go out so I just doing some sports in my home and it's let me more happy and it spend time so it let me more comfortable.

✓ I think if there were no Internet, I would always do some sports because I have a running machine at home. I don't like to go out, so I just do some sports at home. It makes me happier and helps me spend time, so it makes me more comfortable.

'if without the Internet are always doing'结构错误，应为'if there were no Internet, I would always do'。'sport'应为复数'sports'。'in my home has'语序错误，应为'I have ... at home'。'I don't like go out'缺少不定式'to'。'just doing'应为'just do'。'it's let me more happy'语法错误，应为'it makes me happier'。'it spend time'应为'helps me spend time'。'it let me more comfortable'应为'it makes me more comfortable'。