网络— Part 1 評分報告

建議: In English (Afghanistan), you should focus on clear and natural sentence structures. Avoid redundancy like repeating words ('at at the childhood', 'it's it's'). Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add specific details with linking words to improve coherence.

範例: I started using the internet when I was in class 6. Since then, I have used it regularly for both studying and entertainment because it is very useful for my learning and leisure activities.

建議: In English (Afghanistan), try to use correct prepositions and avoid repetition ('the the'). Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Provide a complete explanation with clear reasons and avoid incomplete sentences.

範例: Nowadays, I go online most of the time during my daily routine because my work and studies are conducted online. For example, my university provides study materials in PDF format, so I have to use the internet frequently.

建議: In English (Afghanistan), ensure subject-verb agreement and correct verb forms ('I wasn't allowed'). Use linking words to connect ideas and provide clear reasons. Avoid vague phrases and be specific about the situation.

範例: Yes, I remember a time when I wasn't allowed to use the internet during my HSM exams. I spent all my time studying to prepare well, so I avoided using the internet to focus better.

建議: In English (Afghanistan), use correct grammar and sentence structure. Avoid run-on sentences and use linking words like 'because' and 'so' properly. Be specific about why you spend time online and organize your answer clearly.

範例: I spend a lot of time online because my studies require it, and I also enjoy entertainment materials available there. Additionally, I use the internet to stay connected with my friends, so I spend most of my time online for these reasons.

建議: In English (Afghanistan), avoid repeating words ('music music', 'I I'). Use clear and natural sentences with linking words to connect ideas. Provide specific activities and explain why they are enjoyable or meaningful.

範例: Without the internet, I would spend my time playing the guitar because I love music. Sometimes, I also help my mother in the kitchen, which makes both of us happy.

× As I am very clever from my childhood, I use the Internet at at the childhood.

✓ As I have been very clever since my childhood, I have used the Internet since then.

The original sentence incorrectly uses present tense 'am' and 'use' to describe a past and continuing situation. The phrase 'from my childhood' should be 'since my childhood' to indicate the starting point of an action continuing to the present. The verb tense should be present perfect to show an action that started in the past and continues now.

× When I was in class 6, I started using Internet regularly for my study purpose and also for entertainment.

✓ When I was in class 6, I started using the Internet regularly for my study purposes and also for entertainment.

The sentence is mostly correct but missing the definite article 'the' before 'Internet' and 'study purpose' should be plural 'study purposes' to indicate multiple reasons. This is an article error and quantifier issue.

× So it's it's very useful for my place.

✓ So it's very useful for me.

The phrase 'useful for my place' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'useful for me' to indicate personal benefit. 'My place' refers to a location, which is not intended here.

× Nowadays I go to online most of the time of my daily routine because the works or the study are now in online.

✓ Nowadays I go online most of the time in my daily routine because the work and study are now online.

The phrase 'go to online' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'go online'. 'Works' should be 'work' as an uncountable noun here. 'In online' should be 'online' without a preposition.

× The the university studies is in PDF, so I have to.

✓ The university studies are in PDF, so I have to.

'Studies' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' not 'is'. The sentence is incomplete but corrected for subject-verb agreement.

× I was unable to use the Internet due to my examination.

✓ I was unable to use the Internet due to my examinations.

'Examination' should be plural 'examinations' if referring to multiple tests or a general period of exams. Otherwise, it can remain singular if referring to one exam.

× I spent the full time on my studies and that's why I didn't allowed to.

✓ I spent all my time on my studies and that's why I wasn't allowed to.

'Didn't allowed' is incorrect; the correct form is 'wasn't allowed' because 'allowed' is a past participle used with 'was' in passive voice. Also, 'the full time' should be 'all my time' for natural expression.

× I spend most of the time online because my studies and also entertainment materials are funny online and I have to be connected with my friends We using the Internet so I spend most of the time in the online For these reasons.

✓ I spend most of my time online because my studies and entertainment materials are enjoyable online, and I have to be connected with my friends. We use the Internet, so I spend most of my time online for these reasons.

The sentence has multiple issues: 'funny' should be 'enjoyable' or 'interesting' (incorrect adjective use), 'We using' should be 'We use' (present tense), 'in the online' should be 'online' (preposition error), and sentence structure needs correction for clarity.

× Without Internet I spend my time playing guitar as I am a music music lover so I I pass my time playing the guitar and sometimes helping my mother in the kitchen.

✓ Without the Internet, I spend my time playing the guitar as I am a music lover. I pass my time playing the guitar and sometimes help my mother in the kitchen.

The sentence is run-on and repetitive ('music music lover'). It needs punctuation and restructuring for clarity. 'Without Internet' needs 'the' article. 'Helping' should be parallel with 'pass' so 'help' is better here.

× That makes me very happy and she is very pleased.

✓ That makes me very happy and my mother very pleased.

The pronoun 'she' is unclear; specifying 'my mother' clarifies the subject. Also, 'makes me happy and my mother pleased' is parallel and clear.