网络— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to make your answer more natural and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add specific details. Avoid redundancy and filler words like 'Uh'.

範例: I started using the internet during my childhood. I often use it to search for information related to my studies and research projects.

建議: Make your answer clearer and more coherent by using appropriate linking words and correct vocabulary. Avoid unclear phrases like 'available jazz'. Provide specific examples of activities you do online.

範例: I usually go online several times a day, especially during my free time. I use the internet to chat with my friends and colleagues, check my emails, and stay updated with news.

建議: Your answer is too long and unclear. Use shorter sentences and clear linking words to improve coherence. Be specific about when and why you were not allowed to use the internet.

範例: Yes, I remember once my family asked us not to use the internet so we could spend quality time together. We put our phones away and enjoyed each other's company without distractions.

建議: Make your answer more natural and structured. Start with a clear opinion, then explain with specific reasons using linking words.

範例: I don't think I spend too much time online because I mainly use it for work and to chat with my overseas friends whenever I have free time.

建議: Try to organize your answer better with clear sentences and linking words. Be specific about what you would do and why, avoiding unclear phrases.

範例: If there were no internet, I would spend more time reading books because I love reading. I have many books at home that I haven't read yet. Also, I would enjoy spending quality time with my mother in the kitchen, learning cooking skills.

× Everybody remember I started using Internet during my childhood.

✓ Everybody remembers I started using the Internet during my childhood.

The subject 'Everybody' is singular, so the verb should be 'remembers' to agree in number. Also, 'Internet' should have the definite article 'the' before it.

× Uh, I often use the Internet for searching regarding my study or research project.

✓ Uh, I often use the Internet to search for my study or research projects.

The phrase 'for searching regarding' is incorrect. The correct form is 'to search for'. Also, 'project' should be plural if referring generally.

× I usually go online. Several times a day, specially when I have some free time, I use as an available jazz with my friends and colleagues, as well as to check emails and see updates.

✓ I usually go online several times a day, especially when I have some free time. I use it to chat with my friends and colleagues, as well as to check emails and see updates.

The original sentence has incorrect structure and unclear phrases like 'use as an available jazz'. It should be 'use it to chat'. Also, 'specially' should be 'especially'.

× I only remember my family member prohibited all of us to not use the Internet and spend the friendly environment in the home and we really enjoy at that time without any without checking regular or mobile phone, we are hold our mobile phone in an almirah and enjoy the company.

✓ I only remember my family members prohibited all of us from using the Internet to maintain a friendly environment at home. We really enjoyed that time without checking our regular or mobile phones; we kept our mobile phones in an almirah and enjoyed the company.

The sentence has multiple errors: 'family member' should be plural 'family members'; 'prohibited all of us to not use' should be 'prohibited all of us from using'; 'spend the friendly environment' is incorrect, should be 'to maintain a friendly environment'; 'we are hold' should be 'we kept'; and overall sentence structure needs improvement.

× I don't think so. That takes me to my time on the Internet, but whenever I have time in free time I spend on it regarding my work and chatting my emails and chat with my overseas friends.

✓ I don't think so. That takes up my time on the Internet, but whenever I have free time, I spend it on work, checking my emails, and chatting with my overseas friends.

The phrase 'That takes me to my time' is incorrect; it should be 'takes up my time'. Also, 'chatting my emails' is incorrect; it should be 'checking my emails'. The sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× If there is no Internet, I would like to to read a lot of books because I love reading.

✓ If there were no Internet, I would like to read a lot of books because I love reading.

In conditional sentences about unreal present situations, 'If there is' should be 'If there were'. Also, there is a repeated 'to' which should be corrected.

× There are lot of book in my home which I don't read yet.

✓ There are lots of books in my home which I haven't read yet.

'lot of book' should be 'lots of books' to match plural form. Also, 'don't read yet' is better expressed as 'haven't read yet' for correct tense.

× But I would like to read all of this and spend my quality time with my mother in the kitchen Mumbai learning from schooling skills.

✓ But I would like to read all of these and spend quality time with my mother in the kitchen in Mumbai, learning skills from schooling.

'all of this' should be 'all of these' to refer to plural books. The phrase 'in the kitchen Mumbai' needs a preposition 'in' before Mumbai. 'learning from schooling skills' is unclear and corrected to 'learning skills from schooling'.