网络— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is understandable but can be improved by making it more concise and natural. Avoid vague age ranges like '5 to 10 years old' and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, correct minor grammar errors such as 'using Internet' to 'using the internet'.

範例: I started using the internet when I was about six years old. My father bought a new computer for me and my sister, and we used it to play games and watch movies together.

建議: Your answer is a bit unclear and repetitive. Try to directly answer the question first, then explain with clear linking words. Also, correct grammar mistakes like 'a important' to 'an important' and 'enter to an social media platform' to 'go on a social media platform'.

範例: I usually go online several times a day, especially when I receive notifications. If the notification is important, I check it and then go on social media to interact with my friends.

建議: Your answer is somewhat confusing and contains grammatical errors. Try to start with a clear topic sentence, then explain with specific details using linking words. Also, use correct phrases like 'turn off the internet' instead of 'off the Internet'.

範例: I usually use the internet every day without restrictions. However, when I have exams, I turn off the internet and keep my phone aside so that I can focus on studying.

建議: Your answer is repetitive and has grammatical mistakes. Try to give a clear opinion first, then explain with specific reasons using linking words. Also, avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure.

範例: Yes, I think I spend too much time online because my friends live far away. Therefore, I use social media to stay connected with them, which makes me active on my phone for long periods.

建議: Your answer is a bit vague and contains grammatical errors. Try to answer directly what you would do without the internet, then explain why. Use linking words to make your answer coherent and avoid general statements.

範例: Without the internet, I would spend more time reading books and meeting friends in person. Although the internet is very useful for research and communication, I believe offline activities are also important.

× I started using Internet when I was a small child, like around 5 to 10 years old where my father bought a new computer for me and my sister.

✓ I started using the Internet when I was a small child, like around 5 to 10 years old, when my father bought a new computer for me and my sister.

The word 'Internet' is a proper noun that requires the definite article 'the' before it. Also, 'where' is incorrectly used; 'when' is appropriate to refer to time. Adding commas improves sentence clarity.

× Basically I use Internet daily where there is no restriction to my use of Internet, but in some case where I have exams or I have to study for exams that case I have to off the Internet and keep my phone aside to focus on the studies I.

✓ Basically, I use the Internet daily where there is no restriction on my use of the Internet, but in some cases when I have exams or I have to study for exams, I have to turn off the Internet and keep my phone aside to focus on my studies.

The word 'Internet' requires the definite article 'the'. 'In some case' should be plural 'in some cases'. 'Off the Internet' needs the verb 'turn' to be correct. 'Keep my phone aside' is acceptable but 'turn off the Internet' is the correct phrase. Also, 'focus on the studies I' is incorrect; it should be 'focus on my studies'.

× Yes, I think I spend too much time on online because my friends are not nearby to my home.

✓ Yes, I think I spend too much time online because my friends are not nearby my home.

The phrase 'on online' is incorrect; 'online' is an adverb and does not need a preposition. Also, 'nearby to my home' is incorrect; 'nearby my home' or 'near my home' is correct.

× There are more far to my home so I have to connect by my social medias with them.

✓ They live far from my home, so I have to connect with them through my social media.

'More far' is incorrect; 'far' is a comparative adjective and does not take 'more'. The correct phrase is 'far from'. 'Connect by my social medias' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'connect with' and 'social media' is uncountable, so 'social medias' is incorrect.

× So I have to act be active on the social media.

✓ So I have to be active on social media.

The phrase 'act be active' is incorrect and redundant. 'Be active' is sufficient. Also, 'the social media' is incorrect; 'social media' is uncountable and does not need 'the'.

× I think nowadays Internet should be convenient to each and every person because without Internet this generation can't live where we have to study for our research purpose and also we have to engage with our friends.

✓ I think nowadays the Internet should be convenient for each and every person because without the Internet this generation can't live, as we have to study for our research purposes and also engage with our friends.

'Internet' requires the definite article 'the'. 'Convenient to' should be 'convenient for'. 'Research purpose' should be plural 'research purposes'. The sentence is long and needs commas and conjunctions for clarity.