网络— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Tu respuesta tiene algunos errores gramaticales y de estructura que afectan la claridad. Intenta usar tiempos verbales correctos y frases más naturales. Además, evita redundancias y mejora la fluidez.

範例: I started using the internet when I was in my second year of college, about 20 years ago. It was one of the most impressive experiences I've ever had.

建議: Tu respuesta es confusa y contiene errores que dificultan la comprensión. Trata de organizar mejor tus ideas y usar conectores para que la respuesta sea clara y coherente.

範例: I go online every day at specific times. In the morning, I listen to a podcast while having breakfast, and in the evening, I check my emails.

建議: La respuesta tiene errores gramaticales y algunas frases poco claras. Intenta usar estructuras correctas y ejemplos específicos para mejorar la respuesta.

範例: I don't remember ever being forbidden to use the internet. Since it became common in daily life, everyone has had access to it at home, university, or work.

建議: La respuesta es difícil de entender debido a errores y palabras incorrectas. Es importante usar vocabulario adecuado y frases claras para expresar tus ideas.

範例: I don't think I spend too much time online. I use my smartphone mainly for work and studying, and in my free time, I read on it.

建議: Tu respuesta es buena pero puede mejorar con una estructura más clara y vocabulario más preciso. Usa conectores para que la respuesta sea más fluida.

範例: Without the internet, I would probably exercise more and read physical books instead of on my phone. However, I think my life would remain mostly the same.

× The first time that I got in touch when Internet was when I was on the second year of college.

✓ The first time that I got in touch with the Internet was when I was in the second year of college.

The sentence has a past tense issue and a preposition error. 'Got in touch when Internet was' is incorrect; it should be 'got in touch with the Internet'. Also, 'on the second year' should be 'in the second year' because we use 'in' for years of study. The verb tense 'was' is correct here as it refers to a past event.

× That might be probably 20 years ago, and it was one of the most impressive experiences that I ever have.

✓ That was probably 20 years ago, and it was one of the most impressive experiences that I have ever had.

The phrase 'might be probably' is redundant and incorrect; 'was probably' is appropriate for a past event. Also, 'that I ever have' should be 'that I have ever had' to correctly use the present perfect tense to describe experiences up to now.

× Well, I go online every day, but I have a specific time. That I eat as Carol on my journal an it is during the morning I hear a podcast and later on the evening or night I use it to just check my e-mail.

✓ Well, I go online every day, but I have a specific time. That is when I eat breakfast while reading my journal, and in the morning I listen to a podcast. Later in the evening or at night, I use it just to check my e-mail.

The original sentence has unclear and incorrect prepositions and phrasing. 'I eat as Carol on my journal an' is unclear; it should be 'I eat breakfast while reading my journal'. 'During the morning I hear a podcast' should be 'in the morning I listen to a podcast'. Also, 'later on the evening or night' should be 'later in the evening or at night'. These corrections improve clarity and correct preposition use.

× I don't think I have ever weren't allowed to use the Internet.

✓ I don't think I have ever been not allowed to use the Internet.

The phrase 'have ever weren't allowed' is grammatically incorrect because 'weren't' is past tense and cannot be used with 'have ever'. The correct form is present perfect passive: 'have ever been not allowed'.

× Because since the Internet is started to be most common in our daily lives, everybody can use it, like in EU, at the university, in your house, even its own products.

✓ Because since the Internet started to become more common in our daily lives, everybody can use it, like in the EU, at the university, in your house, even on their own devices.

'Is started to be most common' is incorrect; it should be 'started to become more common' to correctly use past tense and verb form. Also, 'its own products' is unclear; 'their own devices' is more appropriate. 'In EU' should be 'in the EU' with the definite article.

× Well, I couldn't say that I spend too much time online.

✓ Well, I couldn't say that I spend too much time online.

This sentence is correct in tense and structure; no correction needed.

× I is spend too much time you surmise fart my smartphone but it's for different causes like I have some important files here so I can have my classes at work or wreath.

✓ I spend too much time, you might say, on my smartphone, but it's for different reasons like I have some important files here so I can have my classes at work or elsewhere.

The original sentence has multiple errors: 'I is spend' should be 'I spend' (subject-verb agreement), 'you surmise fart' is incorrect and unclear, replaced with 'you might say'. 'Causes' should be 'reasons'. 'Wreath' is likely a typo for 'elsewhere'. These corrections fix grammar and clarity.

× I use my cell phone for reading noise just for my spare time.

✓ I use my cell phone for reading news just in my spare time.

'Reading noise' is likely a typo for 'reading news'. Also, 'just for my spare time' should be 'just in my spare time' to correctly use the preposition with 'time'.

× What would I do without Internet? I will probably do more exercise or instead of reading my books on my cell phone, I go read it like on a paper.

✓ What would I do without the Internet? I would probably do more exercise or, instead of reading my books on my cell phone, I would read them on paper.

The question is hypothetical, so the conditional tense 'would' should be used consistently instead of 'will'. Also, 'go read it like on a paper' is incorrect; it should be 'would read them on paper'. 'The Internet' requires the definite article.

× But I think the rest of my life will be almost similar that I have now.

✓ But I think the rest of my life will be almost similar to what I have now.

The phrase 'similar that I have now' is incorrect; it should be 'similar to what I have now' to correctly use the preposition 'to' with 'similar' and clarify the comparison.