网络— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答时语法错误较多，表达不够自然，且句子结构较复杂，建议简化句子结构，注意时态和主谓一致。

範例: I started using the Internet when I was in junior high school. My parents thought it was appropriate for me to begin using it then, so they gave me their old phones to access the Internet.

建議: 回答内容混乱，表达不清晰，缺乏连贯性，建议使用简单明了的句子，避免无意义的词汇，注意逻辑连接。

範例: I go online very often, almost all the time. I use my phone to chat with friends and my computer to read documents. Sometimes, I watch videos on my iPad.

建議: 回答中有语法错误和拼写错误，表达不够流畅，建议注意时态和拼写，句子结构应更完整。

範例: Yes, I remember. Before the National College Entrance Examination, my parents did not allow me to use the Internet because they thought it would distract me from studying, and I needed to focus a lot.

建議: 回答中表达不清楚，词汇使用不当，建议使用更准确的词汇和简洁的句子表达观点。

範例: No, I don't think I spend too much time online. Nowadays, many tasks can be done through the Internet, so spending time online is necessary and useful.

建議: 回答语法和表达混乱，逻辑不清晰，建议简化句子，明确表达自己的想法。

範例: If I didn't have the Internet, I think I would feel more relaxed because I wouldn't be disturbed by it. I could spend more quality time with my family and friends.

× my parents think it is suitable for me to start using the Internet and they send their old phones to me too using Internet.

✓ my parents think it is suitable for me to start using the Internet and they send their old phones to me to use the Internet too.

这里“using Internet”用法不正确，应该是“to use the Internet”，表示目的。

× my parents think it is suitable for me to start using the Internet and they send their old phones to me too using Internet.

✓ my parents thought it was suitable for me to start using the Internet and they sent their old phones to me to use the Internet too.

句子描述的是过去发生的事情，动词应使用过去时态。

× my parents think it is suitable for me to start using the Internet and they send their old phones to me too using Internet.

✓ my parents thought it was suitable for me to start using the Internet and they sent their old phones to me to use the Internet too.

描述过去事件，动词应使用过去时态。

× I think I go online all the time, dispatch time, sleeping.

✓ I think I go online all the time, even during breaks and when sleeping.

原句结构混乱，“dispatch time”用词不当，应改为“breaks”或“休息时间”，并且“sleeping”前应加连词。

× I use my phone, connect with my friend and send messages to them and I use my computer to watch. Documents and drives the papers on my causes and I watch my iPad to see that.

✓ I use my phone to connect with my friends and send messages to them. I use my computer to watch documents and do my coursework, and I watch videos on my iPad.

句子结构混乱，断句不当，部分词汇使用错误，应分句并调整表达。

× When I was going to take the National College entrance examination, I wasant allowed to use the Internet because my parents think it will disturb my.

✓ When I was going to take the National College entrance examination, I wasn't allowed to use the Internet because my parents thought it would disturb me.

“wasant”拼写错误，应为“wasn't”；描述过去事件，动词应使用过去时态。

× When I was going to take the National College entrance examination, I wasant allowed to use the Internet because my parents think it will disturb my. Attention on my study and I need a lot of time to study.

✓ When I was going to take the National College entrance examination, I wasn't allowed to use the Internet because my parents thought it would disturb my attention to my studies and I needed a lot of time to study.

“my. Attention”中“my”应为宾格“me”，且句子断句错误，需调整。

× my parents think it will disturb my. Attention on my study and I need a lot of time to study.

✓ my parents thought it would disturb my attention to my studies and I needed a lot of time to study.

描述过去事件，动词应使用过去时态。

× I use my phone, connect with my friend and send messages to them

✓ I use my phone to connect with my friends and send messages to them

“friend”应为复数“friends”，因为后文用“them”指代多个人。

× I use my computer to watch. Documents and drives the papers on my causes and I watch my iPad to see that.

✓ I use my computer to watch documents and do the papers for my courses, and I watch videos on my iPad.

“on my causes”应为“for my courses”，“watch”后面不应有句号，且“drives the papers”表达错误。

× I use my phone, connect with my friend and send messages to them

✓ I use my phone to connect with my friends and send messages to them

“friend”应为复数“friends”，因为后文用“them”指代多个人。

× I wasant allowed to use the Internet because my parents think it will disturb my.

✓ I wasn't allowed to use the Internet because my parents thought it would disturb me.

“wasant”拼写错误，应为“wasn't”；“think”应为过去时“thought”；“will”应为过去时“would”；“my”应为宾格“me”。

× With the development of Internet and technology, there is a tender thing that people need to settle down everything by the Internet.

✓ With the development of the Internet and technology, there is a trend that people need to settle everything through the Internet.

“tender”应为“trend”；“settle down everything”表达不当，应为“settle everything”；“by the Internet”应为“through the Internet”。

× there is a tender thing that people need to settle down everything by the Internet.

✓ there is a trend that people need to settle everything through the Internet.

介词“by”用法不当，应改为“through”表示通过互联网。

× we need to worry talented it using the Internet to solve things.

✓ we need to rely on using the Internet to solve things.

“worry talented it”无意义，应改为“rely on”。

× If I have no Internet, I think I will feel comfortable and relax because no Internet present that there is no.

✓ If I have no Internet, I think I will feel comfortable and relaxed because the absence of the Internet means there is no...

句子不完整且表达混乱，“present that there is no”无意义，应调整表达。

× If I have no Internet, I think I will feel comfortable and relax because no Internet present that there is no. Not too much time to disturb me and I can pay a lot of tensions to get along with my family's on my friends.

✓ If I have no Internet, I think I will feel comfortable and relaxed because there won't be too much time disturbing me, and I can spend more time getting along with my family and friends.

“pay a lot of tensions”表达错误，应为“spend more time”；“my family's on my friends”表达错误，应为“my family and friends”。