网络— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Try to avoid repetition and improve sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, instead of repeating 'popular', say 'it was very popular among people my age'.

範例: I started using the internet during my teenage years because I needed to stay connected with my friends and family. At that time, it was very popular among people my age, so I also began learning how to use it.

建議: Work on grammar and sentence clarity. Use linking words like 'sometimes' and 'other times' to show contrast. Avoid vague phrases like 'not so sure'.

範例: Sometimes, I spend a long time online doing research or learning new things to prepare for tests. Other times, I don't spend much time online at all.

建議: Improve sentence structure and grammar. Use clear linking words to explain reasons and conditions. Avoid unclear phrases like 'I'm doing when I was a child'.

範例: Yes, I remember when I was a child, my parents did not allow me free access to the internet because they thought it might affect my studies. Therefore, they limited my internet use to one hour or sometimes only 30 minutes a day.

建議: Focus on grammar and sentence flow. Use linking words to explain reasons clearly. Avoid fragmented sentences and unclear phrases like 'I. I'm not employed an eye'.

範例: Yes, I know I spend a lot of time online, especially on TikTok where I enjoy watching memes. This is mainly because I am currently unemployed and have a lot of free time.

建議: Improve sentence completeness and coherence. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid fragmented sentences. Be specific about hobbies and activities.

範例: Without the internet, I would try different hobbies, especially outdoor activities like gardening and horse riding. I would also do physical exercises to stay healthy, and spend time listening to music and reading books.

× I I need to stay connected with my friend and families and that's when the time I started learning about it as well.

✓ I needed to stay connected with my friends and family and that's when I started learning about it as well.

The sentence mixes present tense 'need' with past context 'started'. It should be past tense 'needed' to match the time frame. Also, 'friend and families' should be plural 'friends and family' for correct usage.

× I I need to stay connected with my friend and families and that's when the time I started learning about it as well.

✓ I needed to stay connected with my friends and family and that's when I started learning about it as well.

'Friend' should be plural 'friends' and 'families' should be 'family' as a collective noun here.

× I started using Internet in my teenage years because I I need to stay connected with my friend and families and that's when the time I started learning about it as well.

✓ I started using the Internet in my teenage years because I needed to stay connected with my friends and family and that's when I started learning about it as well.

The noun 'Internet' requires the definite article 'the' when referring to the global network.

× I not so sure some someday I would go online for very long times just to do some research or learning about different things and preparing for tests.

✓ I'm not so sure. Sometimes I would go online for a very long time just to do some research or learn about different things and prepare for tests.

'I not so sure' should be 'I'm not so sure' to be grammatically correct. 'Some someday' is incorrect; 'sometimes' fits better. 'Very long times' should be 'a very long time' as 'time' is uncountable here. 'Learning' and 'preparing' should be parallel infinitives 'learn' and 'prepare'.

× I not so sure some someday I would go online for very long times just to do some research or learning about different things and preparing for tests.

✓ I'm not so sure. Sometimes I would go online for a very long time just to do some research or learn about different things and prepare for tests.

No article needed before 'research' as it is uncountable.

× And also someday I would just really don't spend much time online.

✓ And also sometimes I really don't spend much time online.

'Someday' refers to a single future day; 'sometimes' is correct for frequency. 'Would just really don't' is incorrect; 'really don't' suffices.

× Yes, I can recall that I'm doing when I was a child at the time.

✓ Yes, I can recall that I was doing when I was a child at the time.

'I'm doing' is present continuous and does not fit past context; it should be 'I was doing'.

× Apparently isn't allowed me to have a free access to the Internet because they think it might affect to my studies so they cut it down to like one hour a day only.

✓ Apparently, I wasn't allowed to have free access to the Internet because they thought it might affect my studies, so they cut it down to like one hour a day only.

'Isn't allowed me' is incorrect; correct form is 'I wasn't allowed'. 'A free access' should be 'free access' without article. 'Affect to' should be 'affect' without 'to'. 'They think' should be past tense 'they thought' to match past context.

× Apparently isn't allowed me to have a free access to the Internet because they think it might affect to my studies so they cut it down to like one hour a day only.

✓ Apparently, I wasn't allowed to have free access to the Internet because they thought it might affect my studies, so they cut it down to like one hour a day only.

'Affect' is a transitive verb and does not require the preposition 'to' after it.

× Yes, personally I do know that I spend so much time online, especially on TikTok and then I would just understand all the meme and also because I. I'm not employed an eye. Have a lot of free time.

✓ Yes, personally I do know that I spend so much time online, especially on TikTok, and then I just understand all the memes also because I'm not employed and I have a lot of free time.

'Understand all the meme' should be 'understand all the memes' (plural). 'I. I'm not employed an eye.' is incorrect; should be 'I'm not employed and I have'. Present tense 'spend' is correct here.

× Yes, personally I do know that I spend so much time online, especially on TikTok and then I would just understand all the meme and also because I. I'm not employed an eye. Have a lot of free time.

✓ Yes, personally I do know that I spend so much time online, especially on TikTok, and then I just understand all the memes also because I'm not employed and I have a lot of free time.

'Meme' should be plural 'memes' because it refers to multiple items.

× I will try. Out different hobby.

✓ I will try out different hobbies.

'Try out' is a phrasal verb and should be together. 'Hobby' should be plural 'hobbies' to indicate more than one.

× I will try. Out different hobby.

✓ I will try out different hobbies.

'Hobby' should be plural 'hobbies' when referring to multiple activities.

× And especially the outdoor activity as well, like gardening, horse riding.

✓ And especially outdoor activities as well, like gardening and horse riding.

'Outdoor activity' should be plural 'outdoor activities' and no definite article 'the' is needed here. Also, 'like gardening, horse riding' should be connected with 'and'.

× Like doing some physical exercises that to, you know, to get myself something about that.

✓ Like doing some physical exercises to, you know, get myself involved in that.

The phrase 'that to, you know, to get myself something about that' is ungrammatical and unclear. Corrected to 'to get myself involved in that' for clarity and grammar.

× And also I also do like listening to music and reading.

✓ I also like listening to music and reading.

Starting sentence with 'And also' is redundant; 'I also like' is sufficient and more natural.