网络— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Apni answer e sentence structure ar grammar bhalo kore use korun. Question er direct answer diye start korun, tarpor specific details add korun. For example, 'I started using the internet around 2018 when I was 18 years old.'

範例: I started using the internet around 2018 when I was 18 years old. At that time, I mainly used it for studying and social media.

建議: Apni answer e clear and natural English use korun. Directly question er answer din, tarpor supporting details add korun linking words diye. For example, 'I go online very frequently, almost every hour, because I like to check social media updates.'

範例: I go online very frequently, almost every hour, because I like to check social media updates. However, I realize it can be addictive and sometimes I feel frustrated about it.

建議: Apni answer e clear and coherent sentence structure use korun. Directly question er answer din, tarpor supporting details add korun linking words diye. For example, 'Yes, in 2018, my parents did not allow me to use the internet much because they were strict about it.'

範例: Yes, in 2018, my parents did not allow me to use the internet much because they were strict about it. They wanted me to focus more on my studies.

建議: Apni answer e natural English use korun, sentence gulo clear and connected thakuk. Linking words use korun. For example, 'Yes, I think I spend too much time online because once I start watching videos, I want to watch more, which wastes a lot of time.'

範例: Yes, I think I spend too much time online because once I start watching videos, I want to watch more, which wastes a lot of time. This makes me realize I should control my usage.

建議: Apni answer e complete sentence use korun, clear and logical structure maintain korun. Directly question er answer din, tarpor supporting details add korun. For example, 'Recently, our country had no internet for about 10 days, which was frustrating but also gave me time to focus on other activities.'

範例: Recently, our country had no internet for about 10 days, which was frustrating but also gave me time to focus on other activities like reading books and spending time with family.

× OK so I am not sure when did I exact. Start using the Internet, but I think it's in between 2018 or 19.

✓ OK so I am not sure when I exactly started using the Internet, but I think it was between 2018 and 2019.

The original sentence has incorrect question word order within a statement and improper placement of 'exact'. In English, indirect questions do not invert subject and verb. Also, 'exact' should be 'exactly' as an adverb modifying 'started'. The phrase 'in between 2018 or 19' is incorrect; it should be 'between 2018 and 2019'. Suggestion: Use correct indirect question structure and proper adverb placement.

× When I was like. 20 year 18 years old I guess.

✓ When I was like 18 or 20 years old, I guess.

The phrase '20 year 18 years old' is confusing and incorrect. 'Year' should be plural 'years' when referring to age. Also, the order and conjunction are incorrect. The correct form is '18 or 20 years old'. Suggestion: Use plural 'years' for age and correct conjunctions.

× Like in every hour.

✓ Like every hour.

The phrase 'in every hour' is unnecessary and awkward here. 'Every hour' alone is sufficient to express frequency. Suggestion: Remove unnecessary prepositions for clarity.

× Sometimes I check my Internet or social medias.

✓ Sometimes I check my internet or social media.

'Internet' is uncountable and should not be capitalized here. 'Social medias' is incorrect; 'social media' is uncountable and plural in meaning. Suggestion: Use 'internet' lowercase and 'social media' as uncountable noun.

× Like a cycle but I don't know it a very bad addiction but I can't help it now.

✓ It's like a cycle, and I know it's a very bad addiction, but I can't help it now.

The original sentence lacks proper connectors and verb forms. 'I don't know it a very bad addiction' is incorrect; it should be 'I know it's a very bad addiction'. Suggestion: Use proper conjunctions and verb forms for clarity.

× It is what it is and I am really frustrated about.

✓ It is what it is, and I am really frustrated about it.

The phrase 'frustrated about' requires an object. The sentence is incomplete without specifying what the frustration is about. Suggestion: Add the object 'it' after 'frustrated about'.

× Yes, back to 2018. Aye. I'm not allowed to use the Internet because I was. Not that. Much metro to access the Internet and. Use the damn.

✓ Yes, back in 2018. I wasn't allowed to use the Internet because I didn't have much metro access to the Internet and couldn't use it.

The sentence has tense inconsistency and unclear phrases. 'I'm not allowed' should be past tense 'I wasn't allowed'. 'Not that much metro' is unclear; likely meant 'didn't have much access'. 'Use the damn' is incomplete and unclear. Suggestion: Use past tense consistently and clarify phrases.

× My parents were very strict about this so.

✓ My parents were very strict about this, so.

The sentence ends abruptly and needs completion or proper punctuation. However, no pronoun error here; this is more sentence structure. Suggestion: Complete the sentence or connect properly.

× Yes, I definitely think I spend too much time online because I am addicted to it and it's very pretty much addictive because.

✓ Yes, I definitely think I spend too much time online because I am addicted to it and it's very addictive because.

The phrase 'very pretty much addictive' is redundant and incorrect. 'Pretty much' and 'very' both intensify, so one should be used. Also, 'addictive' is an adjective correctly used here. Suggestion: Use either 'very' or 'pretty much' but not both together.

× You know. If I am watching a real, I want to watch another which is time consuming.

✓ You know, if I am watching a reel, I want to watch another, which is time-consuming.

The sentence has punctuation and word choice errors. 'Real' should be 'reel' (short video). Commas are needed to separate clauses. 'Time consuming' should be hyphenated as 'time-consuming' when used as an adjective. Suggestion: Correct word choice and punctuation.

× So recently like 4. Up to 10 or 11 days in our country have no Internet, so it's pretty much frustrating and.

✓ So recently, for about 4 to 10 or 11 days, our country had no Internet, so it was pretty frustrating and...

The sentence has tense inconsistency and unclear phrasing. 'Have no Internet' should be past tense 'had no Internet' to match 'recently'. The phrase 'like 4. Up to 10 or 11 days' is unclear and needs rephrasing. Suggestion: Use past tense and clearer time expressions.

× Also. Good for me because if I am without the Internet.

✓ Also, it was good for me because when I am without the Internet...

The sentence is incomplete and lacks a main verb. 'Also. Good for me because if I am without the Internet.' is a fragment. Suggestion: Complete the sentence with a main clause.