网络— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答时句子不够连贯，有断句问题，且表达不够自然。建议使用完整句子，避免中断，且内容应更流畅自然。

範例: I started using the internet when I was in primary school. Although my parents initially banned me from using it, I found other ways to access it.

建議: 回答简洁明了，但可以增加细节使内容更丰富，例如说明上网的具体用途。

範例: I go online every day, especially when I am at work, to check emails and complete my tasks efficiently.

建議: 回答重复了之前内容，且表达不够完整。建议补充更多细节，并使用连贯句子。

範例: Yes, I remember when I was in primary school, my parents allowed themselves to use the internet but banned me because they were concerned about my age.

建議: 回答中存在断句问题，表达不连贯。建议使用完整句子，并且可以增加原因说明。

範例: No, I don't think I spend too much time online because most of my work and studies need to be done on the internet.

建議: 回答不连贯且句子不完整，表达混乱。建议用完整句子清晰表达想法，并且逻辑连贯。

範例: Without the internet, I would listen to music, read books, or perhaps do some sports to spend my leisure time.

× At that time, my parents, in fact. Banned me from using the internet, but I found another way to get in touch with it.

✓ At that time, my parents, in fact, banned me from using the internet, but I found another way to get in touch with it.

句子中“in fact”后面不应使用句号，导致句子结构不完整，应改为逗号，使句子连贯。

× Yes, when I was in primary school, my parents could use the internet, but they banned me from using it.

✓ Yes, when I was in primary school, my parents could use the internet, but they banned me from using it.

此句中“my parents could use the internet”与上下文逻辑不符，且表达不清晰。建议改为“my parents used the internet”，但根据指示只纠正语法错误，此处语法无误，故不修改。

× As you see, most of my work. And studies have to be completed online.

✓ As you see, most of my work and studies have to be completed online.

句子被错误地拆分成两部分，导致句子不完整，应合并为一句完整句子。

× With the internet. I, listen to music. Read books on. Or perhaps do some sports. To spare my leisure time.

✓ With the internet, I listen to music, read books, or perhaps do some sports to spare my leisure time.

原句被错误拆分成多个不完整的句子，应合并为一个完整句子，且去除多余的逗号，使表达连贯。