自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Câu trả lời cần tự nhiên hơn, sửa lỗi ngữ pháp và nối các câu ngắt quãng để mạch lạc. Nên mở đầu trực tiếp vào câu trả lời, tránh thông tin mâu thuẫn ("child" nhưng nhận quà sinh nhật 18 tuổi) và sử dụng từ nối để cung cấp chi tiết hỗ trợ. Hãy sửa thì động từ và cụm từ như "at my birthday" → "for my birthday"; gộp các câu ngắn lẻ thành tối đa 3–4 câu hoàn chỉnh. Cố gắng dùng từ vựng cụ thể hơn (ví dụ: commute, secondary school).

範例: Yes, I did. My mother gave me a bicycle for my 18th birthday, and I used it to commute to secondary school every day. It was a reliable bike with a sturdy frame, which made my daily rides comfortable and fast.

建議: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng, tránh tiếng ồn miệng như "umm" và hoàn thành ý nghĩ. Sửa ngữ pháp ("as it was" → "as they were", "in today" → "nowadays", hoàn thành cụm "personal" → "personal vehicles"). Thêm lý do cụ thể và một ví dụ để làm câu trả lời thuyết phục hơn, dùng từ nối như "because" hoặc "however" để mạch lạc. Giữ tối đa 3 câu.

範例: I don't think bicycles are as popular now as they used to be, mainly because more people own personal vehicles like scooters or cars. Nowadays, urban areas have better public transport and many prefer motorbikes for convenience. However, cycling is still common in some towns for short trips.

× This is my gift that my mother gave me at my birthday.

✓ This is the gift my mother gave me for my birthday.

The sentence has awkward structure and incorrect preposition. Use 'the gift' (definite article) and 'for my birthday' (correct preposition). Also omit 'that' which is unnecessary here; the reduced relative clause 'the gift my mother gave me' is more natural.

× In my 18th birthday.

✓ On my 18th birthday.

The preposition for days and dates is 'on', so use 'on my 18th birthday'. Also the original is a fragment lacking a main verb; include it in a full sentence or attach it to the previous sentence.

× I used to ride my bike to go to school every day in my secondary period.

✓ I used to ride my bike to school every day when I was in secondary school.

The phrase 'used to' correctly indicates past habitual action. 'To go to' is redundant with 'ride my bike to school'. 'Secondary period' is unnatural; use 'secondary school' or 'secondary education', and 'when I was in' clarifies the time frame.

× I think umm. Bicycles are not as popular as it was in the past.

✓ I think, um, bicycles are not as popular as they were in the past.

Subject-verb agreement and tense consistency: 'bicycles' is plural so use 'they', and compare plural past state with 'were'. Also include a comma after 'I think' and use 'um' spelled conventionally.

× You know, in today people more likely to have their own personal.

✓ You know, today people are more likely to have their own personal bicycles.

The original has missing auxiliary verb and an incomplete object. Use 'today' (no 'in'), include the auxiliary 'are' for the comparative structure 'are more likely to', and complete the noun phrase with 'bicycles'.