自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more accurate with grammar and structure, and make your response more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, correct noun phrases (e.g., "a four-wheeled bicycle" or "a balance bike"), and give one or two brief supporting details using linking words (because/so/which). Avoid repetitions and filler words.

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small four-wheeled bicycle that my father bought for me so I could learn to ride, and I loved practicing on it every weekend.

建議: Organise your answer with a clear opinion followed by specific reasons and improved vocabulary. Use linking words (because, so, therefore) and correct collocations ("petrol is expensive", "use bicycles", "in large cities"). Remove hesitations and avoid repeating the same idea. Provide one or two concrete examples to support your point.

範例: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country because petrol is expensive, so many people choose bikes for short trips. For example, in the city where I live, commuters often cycle to work or to the market to save money and avoid traffic.

× Yes I have one, it's 4 wheel bicycle and I love it a lot 'cause it's what my first and my dad bought it for me to practice biking.

✓ Yes, I had one. It was a four-wheel bicycle, and I loved it a lot because it was my first one and my dad bought it for me to practice biking.

Tense consistency and word form: The question asked about the past ('Did you have... when you were a child?'), so the student should use past tense (had, was, loved, bought) rather than present tense (have, love). Also '4 wheel' should be written as 'four-wheel' (compound adjective) and 'what my first' is incorrect; use 'my first one'. Use 'because' instead of informal ''cause'. Improve punctuation for clarity.

× Yes I have one, it's 4 wheel bicycle and I love it a lot 'cause it's what my first and my dad bought it for me to practice biking.

✓ Yes, I had one. It was a four-wheel bicycle, and I loved it a lot because it was my first one and my dad bought it for me to practice biking.

Quantifier/word choice: 'what my first' is not a proper phrase; you need 'my first one' to refer to the first bicycle. Also '4' should be spelled out as 'four' in formal writing and combined with 'wheel' as a compound adjective 'four-wheel'.

× Yes I have one, it's 4 wheel bicycle and I love it a lot 'cause it's what my first and my dad bought it for me to practice biking.

✓ Yes, I had one. It was a four-wheel bicycle, and I loved it a lot because it was my first one and my dad bought it for me to practice biking.

Conjunction and clause structure: The original uses 'and' to join multiple ideas awkwardly and ''cause' informally. Using 'and' between 'it was a four-wheel bicycle' and 'I loved it' is fine, but the clause 'because it was my first one and my dad bought it for me to practice biking' explains reasons and should be clear and complete. Rewriting clarifies relationships between ideas.

× Certainly yes, because uh pre told petroleum is quite expensive, so we tend to use more bike to go somewhere nearby because I live in another big city so people usually use bicycle.

✓ Certainly yes. Petrol (or gasoline) is quite expensive, so we tend to use bikes more to go somewhere nearby. I live in a large city, so people usually use bicycles.

Tense and number consistency: Use present simple appropriately for general statements ('is quite expensive', 'we tend', 'people usually use'). Correct count nouns: 'bike' should be plural 'bikes' when speaking generally; 'bicycle' should be plural 'bicycles'. Also 'pre told' is incorrect — likely meant 'petrol' or 'petroleum'; choose 'petrol' or 'gasoline'. Break into clearer sentences and remove filler 'uh'.

× Certainly yes, because uh pre told petroleum is quite expensive, so we tend to use more bike to go somewhere nearby because I live in another big city so people usually use bicycle.

✓ Certainly yes. Petrol (or gasoline) is quite expensive, so we tend to use bikes more to go to places nearby. I live in a large city, so people usually use bicycles.

Preposition and phrase choice: Use 'go to places nearby' rather than 'go somewhere nearby' for clarity. 'In another big city' is awkward; 'in a large city' is better. Also repeat of 'because' creates run-on; split into sentences. Preposition 'to' is needed with 'go' when specifying destinations.